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semi_travelerLv132yr
2022-07-12 11:43

The turning point that made me love this novel was when mc got himself a fckbuddy and just like Angelica I cant for the life of me, ever get rid of this mona lisa from my library. I wont deny being annoyed by Olivia and MC at the start (the power up didnt bother me much, but his cannot-be-hidden-and-also-growing-and-glowing stigma did. was actually glad theres hope in helping Hajin not fall so much) but I always held hope when MC had said "if girlfriend then not Olivia" lol not the exact words but more or less. I just want to praise how special our mc is. I love the indifference and practicality despite the seemingly sheer helplessness in dealing with his genuine emotions. Also for... fate, if it exists. Although there was the drastic addition of Christopher, there werent much change in the TNE storyline which is a plus for me. It was eerie at first when the storyline got written word for word (there were changes sure) but tbh to see an actual scene from the TNE may have excited me more then it should, which is undoubtedly a plus. There are also many things to note of that makes this novel worth the read >MC mentality and approach (just read the chapters without olivia although she gets better. tbh even after being discplined i still want to tape her mouth and limbs whenever i see her and place her in a queen sized bed with yi yeonghan) >The fact that MC is actually too OP where it feels like hes an actual extra. where everything he does feels like a snippet of a famous strong dude. Id say, growth(in strength) is what makes a protagonist and a Cristopher doesnt grow, he only unseals >Improvements in strengthening department (the laws sure that was sweet, but strengthened Hajin? fk yes) >More Yeonha misunderstandings >Yi Byul >Rachel (actually author can we have more message scenarios. idk if shes endgame but evandel has more for you otherwise) >DevilDex I just read it today and finished midterms part3. thank you for making me surpass the weekly reading mission in one day. i will sue you for this 18 hours of happiness

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dvelasquezAuthor

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you like this fanfic of mine so far, and always glad to get any feedback for this novel. Also, hope you were able to finish the current content list, more chapters coming!

Gajin_SnailLv3

bro please can you tell me who the romance is with with im still at chapter 8 and im so excited read it i have 5 star please tell me who it is

dvelasquez:Thank you for the review! I'm glad you like this fanfic of mine so far, and always glad to get any feedback for this novel. Also, hope you were able to finish the current content list, more chapters coming!
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lJeDlLv1

It ain't that bad, if you can ignore all the cursing and edgy stuff. My problem with the cursing is that there's too much of it, I myself curse daily but not to the extent that every sentence I say contains cursing, basically the MC sounds like a brat who just learned swear words. Another thing I didn't like is the MC being too edgy and a prick all the time, like if my friend just says for me to do things all the time and that if I complain one bit he will get angry at me and says for me to 'just get on with it and do it!', I will probably punch him in the goddamn face. Another thing is that this fanfic is basically a wish fulfillment, Why do I say this? well first of all the MC is too fukin' strong! unnecessarily at that, like you can just give him a powerful gift but no... you just had to give him another type of power that doesn't belong to that world, Why?! One more is that the MC is basically a retard, he wants to lay low but he answered almost all the questions correctly, I mean come on buddy that's just a retarded move! if you want to lay low just answer 40-50% of the questions! This is also one of the reasons I hate some novels who has MCs laying low but does it in a retarded manner EX: Guy wants to lay low so that he doesn't get noticed, does a physical exam(running) and stays in the middle but after the exam he didn't even pretend to be exhausted while everyone else was panting from exhaustion, like dude! of course your ganna get fucking noticed! Well enough of that, apart from those things it is pretty good, also please don't write anymore singing its horrible. here's a gif of what I think of the fanfic

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ReevooLv11

Author seems to understand Novel's Extra quite well, so I was excited for this even though the grammar was nothing to praise. However... it went downhill fast. (FULL OF SPOILERS BELOW) Some things that really bother me are, - The MC curses all the time. Like... In almost every conversation he has, he's going to curse. It just honestly results in an off-putting MC that has a small vocabulary who can't speak without feeling like he's superior to everyone else. - Out of nowhere, we get some real chunni shit dumped into the back story of the MC that becomes his extra powers in this world. Some weird, cringe dragon stuff. He also has other power systems other than mana... that add nothing special to the story. Just another way of making the MC OP. Any enjoyment we could have gotten out of someone using their meta-knowledge to get stronger is instantly taken away as the MC is already one of the strongest in the world... while also at school and doing nothing other than cursing other people out. - Progress is slow. Now, that usually means we see character development with other characters and with the MC, but like I said before, he spends most of his time cursing out other characters and saying the same shit 10 chapters in a row to this OC archer girl. ... However, the banter between the MC and Kim Hajin is actually really good. Even though he starts pushing for character growth from Hajin even though its only been like 3 days... C'mon. Anyway, it's not horrible, but I feel this should be used as a draft for the author to rewrite it without the shitty out of nowhere power up, tone down the cursing and increase the pace of the story.

WiLeYBiGhEaDLv12

This novel is harder to review for me. When the dialogue between the mc and most of the other characters is happening, the story is enjoyable and immersive. The focus on including lots of character development through dialogue is a strong point of this story. I also think that the portrayal of characters from the world is done well, as they do not feel totally different from the original novel. The world building could use some improvements. It is there but some more introductions to the power scaling and important characters in the world would help. A lot of the time things are introduced but only in name and without context. The pacing is also consistent but could be faster(cutting out olivia alone would have things moving faster). But other times, some sections are inconsistent, feeling forced, lengthy and not flowing with the rest of the story. This mainly happens with the mc’s interactions with the oc character Olivia. I held off on commenting about this in the early chapters and even deleted a comment as the author stated they were trying to inprove things. And while they do improve, it is not enough and still lacks believablility. Olivia is like Sansa Stark in game of thrones in that she doesnt add anything to the story. She constantly anatagonizes the mc, needs help from the mc, and almost every interaction the mc has with her doesn’t fit with how is his character is portrayed in the rest of the story. No one in the story frustrates, angers, or crosses the mcs boundries more than her, but he never acts according to those feelings aside from yelling at her. But he still helps her more than anyone else, even Kim hajun. I have seen friends in toxic relationships(romantic or otherwise) like this and it is frustrating to read when the mc is portrayed as someone who would never put up with this but continously does. After 40 or so chapters the reason for his patience was given as she reminded him of himself, but it is far from enough to explain his inconsistent character. In my personal opinion, Olivia, like Sansa Stark, could have been removed from the story and nothing would be different. In fact it would probably improve the pacing of the story. I wont touch on the excessive cursing, but it is indeed excessive. Overall, I have hope for this story. It is unique and ambitious. The good quality grammer and spelling compared to other fanfics shows the authors care for this work. I really dont like olivia and the mcs interactions with her. I also worry that the author is being to ambitious with the over complicated backstory. But i do like how the backstory actually has meaning and isnt just there to elicit sympathy. In summation, there is some good, some frustrating and a lot of potential. Above average for now but could be much higher and i hope it keeps improving.

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