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Ryuuji_Otonashi
Ryuuji_OtonashiLv12yr
2022-10-22 23:34

it was good at beginning but later on the quality of plot is decreasing, and the mc is now like a simp to his girlfriend, ingrid

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JRCaste
JRCasteLv4

is it harem?

Youngmaster_Joselo
Youngmaster_JoseloLv15

The harem broke

JRCaste:is it harem?
Sinful_Cyanide
Sinful_CyanideLv15

What do you mean the harem broke?

Youngmaster_Joselo:The harem broke
Youngmaster_Joselo
Youngmaster_JoseloLv15

The mc made a clone of himself and gave it to his vampire wife and left her alone so he cucked himself with a clone.

Sinful_Cyanide:What do you mean the harem broke?
Sinful_Cyanide
Sinful_CyanideLv15

Wow... just... wow...I'm so glad I didn't read this, thank you so much for the warning!

Youngmaster_Joselo:The mc made a clone of himself and gave it to his vampire wife and left her alone so he cucked himself with a clone.
Youngmaster_Joselo
Youngmaster_JoseloLv15

No problem bro. I also wish i haven’t

Sinful_Cyanide:Wow... just... wow...I'm so glad I didn't read this, thank you so much for the warning!
JosieGan
JosieGanLv14

🤣🤣🤣

Youngmaster_Joselo:No problem bro. I also wish i haven’t
Zero_8X
Zero_8XLv1

Ah... caramba tava no começo... mas só em saber isso agora isso deixou um gosto amargo na minha boca kkkk eu vou passar pra outro

Youngmaster_Joselo:The mc made a clone of himself and gave it to his vampire wife and left her alone so he cucked himself with a clone.
pEmKayS
pEmKaySLv12

Thanks for sacrificing yourself for the rest of us, bro. We'll be forever grateful!

Youngmaster_Joselo:No problem bro. I also wish i haven’t
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pacul
paculLv13

it starts off very well, though the premise is obviously not new, the mc seems mature & driven, but after a few chapters the book unsurprisingly degraded, it's the usual op regressor mc with years of future knowledge doing his "best" to change the future, and I don't have any problem with that, the overall plot also written quite well, as for grammar I don't have competency to assess, but the little bits & pieces of story spices details that made me cringed hard & left me wondering if the author was a horny & hedonistic teenager, firstly the constant overly glorified mc, yes it's normal for people to admire good looking & well-off individuals, but for side characters & passerby to constantly mention how handsome & beautiful the main characters are in the exact same lines is not only really cringy, it also made the world & the inhabitants seems even less interesting than it already is, if you insist to constantly glorify mc, at least be more creative , rather than the usual copy pasted "he looks so handsome" passerby comments, use variations, like describing how people looks at him with shining eyes, or hushed voices and giggles from the girls, couples arguing, bystanders taking pictures, bad dad jokes of introducing their daughter to mc, or even hyperbole like drooling over him is ok once in a long while, there are literally plethora of these things. And then my biggest concern, the half-assed unrealistic perfectionism, good story conclusion is understandably desired, but poorly thought unrealistic good ending is worse than well thought & realistic bad one, The examples are conclusion of Mc's uncle story, its bad, but not that bad, and then Monica's, it's among the worst sh*t I've ever read, it's poorly thought, irresponsible, and unrealistic. Both made a pattern.

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