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mbrapshT
mbrapshTLv144yr
2020-11-23 03:25

Until this point it is an okay story. Don't make it harem. The MC should get powerful over many years since he is thousand of years old and not in a couple of months. MC should become the most powerful human from Earth pretty quick before the towers and other worlds merge together. Also a random girl he teaches cultivation can not keep up in speed of cultivation with an old demon. And please don't add unnecessary drama or random encounters and cliche things. Another thing is to remember the age of MC when writing his character so he doesn't act like child. Good luck 😃

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The_Key
The_KeyLv1

yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

holson_Charles
holson_CharlesLv15

Thats why i am not gonna read this cause authors always somehow forget their mc origins... they make them act like 12 year old, weak for no reason despite Having thousands of Experience years... so i just avoid this type of novel so i dont get disappointed later on...

Deeq8
Deeq8Lv4

I feel you G

holson_Charles:Thats why i am not gonna read this cause authors always somehow forget their mc origins... they make them act like 12 year old, weak for no reason despite Having thousands of Experience years... so i just avoid this type of novel so i dont get disappointed later on...
Kokushibou
KokushibouLv4

Deeq8:I feel you G
Alex_Guetta
Alex_GuettaLv15

Exactly my thought

Stuffedcrow
StuffedcrowLv14

I can't agree. harem can be done if done well and not rushed, and there's no reason those he trains now can't keep up atleast initially since it's just body building. later on once they are cultivating qi. then it should vary depending on access to pills and individual talent since he will be showing them the correct way. them being newbs. becomes irrevalent. tho if the novel goes harem I hope it stays st Irene and flame girl, but no bigger than 3. The whole I'm am a cultivator so let's make a soccer team is just too common

Akolaychinn
AkolaychinnLv2

I believe harem quality can be done depending on the mc's character. If mc choose only one person at the end of the day, what's the point of making harem or he acting like a shy little girl or ignorance to women. I don't mean harem gener should tag along only if mc gonna *** with all of them. At least he should act like a bold type men ( eg. Highschool DXD. Although mc chose at the end of the day, he is honest with his feeling to his harem like pervy thoughts or funny things). Nowadys, most of the harem types are become unnecessary not because of it's gener, because of mc's characteristic that made by authors

Stuffedcrow:I can't agree. harem can be done if done well and not rushed, and there's no reason those he trains now can't keep up atleast initially since it's just body building. later on once they are cultivating qi. then it should vary depending on access to pills and individual talent since he will be showing them the correct way. them being newbs. becomes irrevalent. tho if the novel goes harem I hope it stays st Irene and flame girl, but no bigger than 3. The whole I'm am a cultivator so let's make a soccer team is just too common
Biggest_Boi
Biggest_BoiLv10

harem can be done but it heavily depends on the mc. most of the time I prefer not to read any story with harem tag, since everytime I hope for an 'acceptable' relationship it only give me disappointment, the mc would be a shy retard or the chicks would just 'love' the mc without any reason. since then I stop reading harem story

berxeq
berxeqLv5

harem tag where at the end mc chooses 1 girl is so fkin dogshit . if you have a harem tag , you either fk all the girl and marry them or you die in the end .

Stuffedcrow
StuffedcrowLv14

agreed if it ends with one girl or no girls its not harem.

berxeq:harem tag where at the end mc chooses 1 girl is so fkin dogshit . if you have a harem tag , you either fk all the girl and marry them or you die in the end .
Dagen
DagenLv15

Honestly, telling someone else how you want them to write their srory seems dumb to me. If want the story you asked for write it yourself. If not just set back and enjoy the ride and if dont enjoy it just get off it. I myself have enjoyed so far. Author please feel free to take this anywhere you want and good luck in your writing.

Apocalypse_2ndLife
Apocalypse_2ndLifeLv3

any suggesting of similar novels.. as this is pretty much one week read (at max) right now ????

holson_Charles:Thats why i am not gonna read this cause authors always somehow forget their mc origins... they make them act like 12 year old, weak for no reason despite Having thousands of Experience years... so i just avoid this type of novel so i dont get disappointed later on...
RainFaIl
RainFaIlLv3

Harems disgustingly gross imo. The most rushed and pointless things half the time and even when they arent, makes me feel just wrong

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Ancient_
Ancient_Lv14

And most Importantly not a 1000 years old virgin 😂😂😂. Although I would like that there would be no romance at all. But I've read the tags

Maddox9
Maddox9Lv10

I don't mind a one thousand years old virgin provided the story has no romance and does not devolve into a harem. I usually stay away from stories with harem tag because a vast majority of them are badly written and rushed and lots of harem members are freaking useless and most authors turn the one thousand years old monster into a simp and yes man to anything in shirt including those that tried to kill him it freaking annoying

Ancient_:And most Importantly not a 1000 years old virgin 😂😂😂. Although I would like that there would be no romance at all. But I've read the tags
RainFaIl
RainFaIlLv3

Well yes i know, thats why i put imo (In my opinion).

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eragonnath
eragonnathLv14

Exactly my opinion

Maedreas
MaedreasLv13

majority mmale eaders on sites like webnovels like harem... this is not good sample of population tho more like simps to black and white with even bigger imagination if u want to read something about boobs then u search for harem and, well, if u want story with normal human comunication and such, u just throw every shit with harem to neighbours dogs so they die after it

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losnxd
losnxdLv13

MCmeets random girl in random town Just walking on some street, turns out to be future OP char. Takes her as disciple without trouble. Brings her home to mother who randomly decides to adopt her after 5 min. just an example Lot of holes in this one guys

Nikhil_Chand
Nikhil_ChandLv4

so many comments but author didnt comment here. lmao.... also is this harem?

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