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amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-11-03 20:59

I tried being open minded but this bk is just shallow characters. in each chp the MC handsomeness is explained at least one, like thats the focus. And every chick is enamored by this guy and and it just makes em look shallow. OMG he so handsome...what a prince. thats their mentality, that's presented And theres also the fact that bellatix just trusts this guy within a couple hrs of meeting and takes him to meet her family. bellatrix.... so basically character is OC. I get its AU, but the blacks family ' character ' was untrusting, cold, secretive, arrogant, etc. here they are all open friendly. not a hint of the original shit is here. its all OC. Plus the black family accepts what he says just like that, like no distrust or suspicion or even wariness, nothing. They just believe what this stranger says. Another thats just stupid is the plot used as an excuse for stupid shit. what? well the MC's family was exterminated by voldy cause of their power,etc but MC survived and he managed to become world famous.... "Dovahkiin heir, by chance you are "Max the tyrant dragon", who is a recognized and world famous bounty hunter for catching many criminals, he is also the world dueling champion for 3 consecutive years and great historian of the history of magic, that's you." [ C4 ] how was the MC even allowed to achieve such accomplishments with no backing, and not being hunted down ? especially during a time where voldy had power and also when he destroyed the family?...wishes [ MC wished to be SI'd into a body in early 20's, with a past already build ]....and that just ruins a bk for me. honestly why bother writing when wish can simply be used as an excuse to do shit like this? no story, no character build and it just allows retarded shit like this to happen. The theres the merlins beard shit in C5 [ unless removed ]....not sure if its supposed to be funny cause it just ruins every characters personality and tone of the moment so basically just turn of ur brain and ignore any sense of logic and you'll enjoy this. the good thing about this bk is the time, maruders era, it kinda makes it a gem but the shallow characters, almost completely forced interactions and somewhat cringe characters ruin it

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Pump_King
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Why so many fcking Harry Potter fan fic it's so trash!!!!

DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

yea past 3 weeks where not great i read fucking translations because i could not find one fucking average fanfiction its all trash

Pump_King:Why so many fcking Harry Potter fan fic it's so trash!!!!
Commonnerfer
CommonnerferLv4

Harry Potter snd rise of the protector is okay. I think a bend in time is okay aswell i have only read till chapter 100 and i would defintly recommend Lost soul written by Linrim...

DarkKnight32:yea past 3 weeks where not great i read fucking translations because i could not find one fucking average fanfiction its all trash
Nurato
NuratoLv2

go to fanfiction.net if you want good ones.

Pump_King:Why so many fcking Harry Potter fan fic it's so trash!!!!
DaoistSoulDive
DaoistSoulDiveLv4

Bend in time is great and probably my favorite Harry Potter fanfic

Commonnerfer:Harry Potter snd rise of the protector is okay. I think a bend in time is okay aswell i have only read till chapter 100 and i would defintly recommend Lost soul written by Linrim...
ElG0hary
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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv14

I'm not gonna lie, this has very interesting ideas but to me, it was poorly executed. The mc is just way too strong it is a joke. He is basically a god... I loved his backstory (other than the part where the fam should have been killed by Grindelwald and not Voldemort) For me, his three wishes should have been the family background, his looks and maybe something like potent magic power? Then it should have shown the mc growing up, learning all the secrets of his house and the things with the dragons maybe even getting his own. So he won't be a god but is still pretty op from the things he learns in his travels and from his family. We can watch him learn these feeling closer to the character. Then he comes back to do everything mainly build his city and focus on that. Forget all these other things such as controlling muggle world all the magical market's etc He can link his islands as resorts etc that you teleport to from the city, create the private school, the stadium etc. This can then grow and build on into canon and see how it affects the world. Maybe even have it mixed into marvel or something. Having your own magical city in marvel etc. I feel these would have been much more interesting to read tbh. Cause instead I feel what I am reading is a god mc where everything just jumps about, skipping massive parts, making random sht up and adding it in with no thought... It goes way to fast to the point you get confused about what has happened and how. Like he is suddenly friends with the goblin nation, he has all these girls that he gains in seconds etc etc The book is also wayy to focused on how amazingly handsome the mc is and how every girl or person that sees him is start struck and want to worship him... it's honestly like half the story is about this. I hope the author reads this and slows down, think about the plot more etc gl to him

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