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Memonic
MemonicAuthor4yr
2020-11-02 04:35

hello friends this is my humble novel, I am a novice writer, who wanted to try my luck and see if I can sustain myself from my writing, I hope you like it and support me, vote as much as you can and thank you for reading my novel. English is not my first language so I translated it with google.

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bhambhusuresh
bhambhusureshLv6

keep gender check otherwise very good

GLE
GLELv1

The author I'm interested in one point. God has limited desires, that is, he cannot desire to travel the worlds. Does this mean that he will not travel the worlds at all or will he find some manuscript in the family's library where they tried to create a spell travel around the worlds (There must be a lot of manuscripts lct. Before Merlin's time) or he will create this spell himself. Please clarify.

Memonic
MemonicAuthor

the library is something that is already super dominated. my idea was to make life easier for my protagonist. and of course there are scrolls but there is a surprise for the future in the world of harry potter. I hope you keep reading my novel. thanks for the support. being honest I never thought someone would like the story. since I wrote it to gain experience in writing my grammar. since my first chapters I have been improving. even if I researched a lot of the harry potter forums so that the story had a solid base from spells. ages of some characters. I have even a hidden story told by J. K. Rowling herself. As I said I sincerely hope you keep reading. And you are warned that my grammar is a bit bad because of the language difference. but I'm adapting and learning from my mistakes

GLE:The author I'm interested in one point. God has limited desires, that is, he cannot desire to travel the worlds. Does this mean that he will not travel the worlds at all or will he find some manuscript in the family's library where they tried to create a spell travel around the worlds (There must be a lot of manuscripts lct. Before Merlin's time) or he will create this spell himself. Please clarify.
Shadewind
ShadewindLv6

Is it harem...?

Angelxcx
AngelxcxLv5

yes

Shadewind:Is it harem...?
MasterKai808
MasterKai808Lv12

are u gonna continue this

kaotiCbeast
kaotiCbeastLv2

is this dropped?

MasterKai808
MasterKai808Lv12

are u gonna continue this or make a different one

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amaturewriter
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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv14

I'm not gonna lie, this has very interesting ideas but to me, it was poorly executed. The mc is just way too strong it is a joke. He is basically a god... I loved his backstory (other than the part where the fam should have been killed by Grindelwald and not Voldemort) For me, his three wishes should have been the family background, his looks and maybe something like potent magic power? Then it should have shown the mc growing up, learning all the secrets of his house and the things with the dragons maybe even getting his own. So he won't be a god but is still pretty op from the things he learns in his travels and from his family. We can watch him learn these feeling closer to the character. Then he comes back to do everything mainly build his city and focus on that. Forget all these other things such as controlling muggle world all the magical market's etc He can link his islands as resorts etc that you teleport to from the city, create the private school, the stadium etc. This can then grow and build on into canon and see how it affects the world. Maybe even have it mixed into marvel or something. Having your own magical city in marvel etc. I feel these would have been much more interesting to read tbh. Cause instead I feel what I am reading is a god mc where everything just jumps about, skipping massive parts, making random sht up and adding it in with no thought... It goes way to fast to the point you get confused about what has happened and how. Like he is suddenly friends with the goblin nation, he has all these girls that he gains in seconds etc etc The book is also wayy to focused on how amazingly handsome the mc is and how every girl or person that sees him is start struck and want to worship him... it's honestly like half the story is about this. I hope the author reads this and slows down, think about the plot more etc gl to him

Tri123
Tri123Lv5
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