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Brezer
BrezerLv144yr
2020-10-29 18:47

it reads like your typical Korean returnee story except with terrible spelling. not really sure if this is a half ass translation or what. it is barely above a MTL . read 8f you're bored ....

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Phantomfiend
PhantomfiendAuthor

Thank you, but it will be great if you point out the terrible spelling to help me out.

Phantomfiend
PhantomfiendAuthor

for example using paragraph comment to point out the mistake, and i will find/fix it on my own to make it better

Brezer
BrezerLv14

pretty much everything needs to be reworked . need an editor, mom, dad sister or someone . good concept just needs to be cleaned up. really not sure if gramarly can help but I hear they do have a trial on it.

Phantomfiend:for example using paragraph comment to point out the mistake, and i will find/fix it on my own to make it better
Phantomfiend
PhantomfiendAuthor

I think I misunderstand what you said about the editor. I just edited all the chapter 6 hours ago. I use google docs and grammarly free account. Thank you so much for your help and time for giving me advice. Appreciate it that. Editor is expensive, cant afford it now. sorry for that. Family don't know about english, that not our first language. It might explain why you not comfortable while reading it. different country have different usage with english language. MAYBE.

Brezer:pretty much everything needs to be reworked . need an editor, mom, dad sister or someone . good concept just needs to be cleaned up. really not sure if gramarly can help but I hear they do have a trial on it.
_AiRen_
_AiRen_Lv10

Don't dishearten an author's hard work, constructive criticism with positive reinforcement is just fine.

nyype
nyypeLv4

Yeah. Since it is translation from his own work, that must be hard for him. Let him do his job. With the time, everything develops

slothyhuman
slothyhumanLv12

the grammar doesnt seem to be the issue. its more of an issue with sentence structure. the grammar is fine but the words are placed oddly and to a fluent and native speaker it just seems broken and hard to read.

Phantomfiend:I think I misunderstand what you said about the editor. I just edited all the chapter 6 hours ago. I use google docs and grammarly free account. Thank you so much for your help and time for giving me advice. Appreciate it that. Editor is expensive, cant afford it now. sorry for that. Family don't know about english, that not our first language. It might explain why you not comfortable while reading it. different country have different usage with english language. MAYBE.
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