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BookWorm313
BookWorm313Lv134yr
2020-09-18 05:16

As of Chapter 38 Writing Quality: 4/5 Decent writing quality with some grammer mistakes here and there. This does not spoil the reading process at all. However, it is not perfect therefore a 4/5 rating. Story Development: 4/5 The progress of the story is pretty fluid so far. However, the meeting with his friend seemed abit rushed. Besides that the overall story progression is good. However, there feels like a few issues. For example in their first fight against the enemy. They said his friend teleported the group far away. However, the phrasing made it seem as if they got back to the mountain in no time. Besides that minir issue, the story was smooth. Character Design: 4/5 The character design for the main character is mediocre so far. He shows a sense of nostalgia but it can be seen as he is not giving a strong vibe that he is himself yet someone else (might be confusing) which he should based of how the character is played. However, the side character is amazing as the show of hardship and stress really comes through to you. Update Stability: 5/5 I do not know how fast and consistent the updates are. I am just assuming that the updates are perfect and daily. World Background: 4/5 Not much is known as the story is pretty short still. But a decent amount of information has been given. However, the power system seems one dimensional right now. As a somewhat wuxia story, there needs to be abilities or skills that enables the reader to visualise it. There also needs to be a form of crafting. Considering the titlte the MC has he should have all these bases covered. So i feel as if the world background is not fully out there yet. Overall: 4.2/5 A good novel so far. However, this novel has alot of potential to become a great one. It has certain key moments that can pull in the reader as well have well rounded characters overall. This is a great story for people to pick up if they are in for the long run. I would personally say the biggest issue with this novel is the lack of chapters so far. As more chapters come in I will come out with a new review. Good job so far with the novel 😁

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Immortal_Simo
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Thank you for your elaborate review! I really appreciate it! ))

GLVI_h
GLVI_hLv4

Nice

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AnthonyCerbic
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