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michibadgurl
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2023-07-17 15:45

I thought i could give it a try to read another twilight fanfic. Since i havent read one with rosalie as the fml. The romance betw mc and rosalie starts decent BUT as author tries to add the tech stuffs from marvel world into twilight, im like wth is this BS stuffs!?? Author doesnโ€™t even have knowledge on tech stuff and still dare to write about it??? The audacity. Soo many illogical reasons author adds in.. i felt assaulted as an engineer while reading this.. im only at chapter6 and im disgusted by the BS marvel tech stuffs. Going to drop this. Bye ๐Ÿ‘‹๐Ÿป

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