Item: I Reincarnated In Twilight
Rating: 4.2
Author: Roh594

Roh594Author4yr

2020-09-07 15:52

I am just a shameless writer rating my own fanfic i just wants people to read my fanfic and tell me what they think and as i said above its my first time writing so please go easy on me

I Reincarnated In Twilight

Roh594

4.3

59 Chs

Liked by 27 people

Replies35

KokushibouLv4

You should learn to use periods and commas. This is my tip for you, it's extremly important. And make some distance when writing not like this: Gkvfhvgjchbbcfjvfgggtgghcffhhggghvjjcggghhccggzujhjuhyfghhhhhdzhdfthcghhffftgghjvffgggthhcghccgffghchbggcfhctcgcffgghggghcggcghvhcgggggghhhhhggfthvhhcrthhhcghhvtgcghhgffrtthhhhhhhhhhcvkovfghkkncctzggggghkkvghhhvhzuhhhgzhhgggggghjvtzvhhhhhhhvgftggvhvvvvvvvvxhvfgghvhhvvhccgjbghxcggccgbjbbvtccvbkfuifkcuigkfuifiifufi But like this: Jfjdjhejkfkdkjdbjfkfjkkkcioeoeooeirkfkgkxkkxkfkirkrkrikgbjgjfjkfkrjjrkfkfkfkkgjgjgkrkrkkfkkfkkfkfkfjfjfji3ieoidididkkdkdkkdkdkkdkdkfkkdkdkkdkkdkfkdkkdkdkdk Kdkdkkfkfkirkfkfkkfkrjjfkfikfifkfkrkkrkfkkrkrkfikfifijfkfkfkkfkfkfjbfbfjgjbfbfbfjbgbifkfkfkfkgjjfosokslskdkdkdjdkjfjdjfjfjfkkf I honestly don't know how to describe it better then this, because my vocabulary is not great either. There is a word for this but don't know it tbh.

4yr

Roh594Author

Thanks for that i needed it

4yr

Roh594Author

So will u read it or stop reading it ?

Kokushibou:You should learn to use periods and commas. This is my tip for you, it's extremly important. And make some distance when writing not like this: Gkvfhvgjchbbcfjvfgggtgghcffhhggghvjjcggghhccggzujhjuhyfghhhhhdzhdfthcghhffftgghjvffgggthhcghccgffghchbggcfhctcgcffgghggghcggcghvhcgggggghhhhhggfthvhhcrthhhcghhvtgcghhgffrtthhhhhhhhhhcvkovfghkkncctzggggghkkvghhhvhzuhhhgzhhgggggghjvtzvhhhhhhhvgftggvhvvvvvvvvxhvfgghvhhvvhccgjbghxcggccgbjbbvtccvbkfuifkcuigkfuifiifufi But like this: Jfjdjhejkfkdkjdbjfkfjkkkcioeoeooeirkfkgkxkkxkfkirkrkrikgbjgjfjkfkrjjrkfkfkfkkgjgjgkrkrkkfkkfkkfkfkfjfjfji3ieoidididkkdkdkkdkdkkdkdkfkkdkdkkdkkdkfkdkkdkdkdk Kdkdkkfkfkirkfkfkkfkrjjfkfikfifkfkrkkrkfkkrkrkfikfifijfkfkfkkfkfkfjbfbfjgjbfbfbfjbgbifkfkfkfkgjjfosokslskdkdkdjdkjfjdjfjfjfkkf I honestly don't know how to describe it better then this, because my vocabulary is not great either. There is a word for this but don't know it tbh.

4yr

KokushibouLv4

No problem

Roh594:Thanks for that i needed it

4yr

KokushibouLv4

Im putting in my Library, so yes i will read it. And don't forget a Cover for the ff. It will attract more people, most skip ff's without a cover.

Roh594:So will u read it or stop reading it ?

4yr

Roh594Author

I tried add spacing in my 2nd chapter but i publish it and open the fanfic in my phone the spacing i added is not even present

Kokushibou:Im putting in my Library, so yes i will read it. And don't forget a Cover for the ff. It will attract more people, most skip ff's without a cover.

4yr

KokushibouLv4

How? In the first chapter it worked just not enough.

Roh594:I tried add spacing in my 2nd chapter but i publish it and open the fanfic in my phone the spacing i added is not even present

4yr

KokushibouLv4

And change the name to "Reincarnated In Twilight" "I Reincarnated In Twilight" or "Im Reborn In Twilight" and every word big, it looks better this way.

Roh594:Thanks for that i needed it

4yr

Roh594Author

Thanks definitely going change and add cover

Kokushibou:And change the name to "Reincarnated In Twilight" "I Reincarnated In Twilight" or "Im Reborn In Twilight" and every word big, it looks better this way.

4yr

KokushibouLv4

Do that👍🏼about cover, i honestly don't know what kind of cover good is. But real life characters are little meh. So i don't know, maybe pick someone you image how the looks like. Maybe a martial arts character, i don't have a clue.

Roh594:Thanks definitely going change and add cover

4yr

KokushibouLv4

So maybe a anime character that looks like the mc.

Roh594:Thanks definitely going change and add cover

4yr

Roh594Author

I first thought about using alex lightwood from shadow hunters as the cover because i can't think of any anime character

Kokushibou:So maybe a anime character that looks like the mc.

4yr

KokushibouLv4

You can do that, it's just that most of the readers on here are anime fans. But it's no big deal if you do real life characters, this is going to get popular either way. If you upload over 15 chapters, and do the things i said. Because grammar is really important, of course you don't need to perfect writing. Just learn to use commar's and period's atleast a little.

Roh594:I first thought about using alex lightwood from shadow hunters as the cover because i can't think of any anime character

4yr

KokushibouLv4

And the distance thing if possible.

Roh594:I first thought about using alex lightwood from shadow hunters as the cover because i can't think of any anime character

4yr

KokushibouLv4

He and alec look completly different🤣

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4yr

Roh594Author

i don't know anime character who looks like alex lightwood

4yr

Roh594Author

When you said anime character first on that came to my mind was mikoto he was badass i didn't compare him with alec

Kokushibou:He and alec look completly different🤣

4yr

Roh594Author

i don't remember the characters name he looks kinda like alec with hair down

Kokushibou:You can do that, it's just that most of the readers on here are anime fans. But it's no big deal if you do real life characters, this is going to get popular either way. If you upload over 15 chapters, and do the things i said. Because grammar is really important, of course you don't need to perfect writing. Just learn to use commar's and period's atleast a little.

4yr

KokushibouLv4

I forgot his name too, the anime name is darker then black. Idk maybe do him or alec.

Roh594:i don't remember the characters name he looks kinda like alec with hair down

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4yr

Roh594Author

I have a webtoon character who looks kinda like alec the problem is another writer who is writing reincarnated in twilight novel already has him on the cover

4yr

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