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Conqueeftador
ConqueeftadorLv44yr
2020-09-09 11:14

I'm liking the story so far very few people have stuff updating I do hope author looks at my comment on his latest chapter on the last paragraph I put some suggestions I think would help

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Roh594
Roh594Author

Thanks for liking my fanfic if you find any mistake you can point them out same with providing your views and i will continue updating unless i get caught in some kinda of work

Roh594
Roh594Author

Yes i am thinking turning chapter 3 into a Cullen's pov the size of the chapter will be small.

Watienla_Jamir
Watienla_JamirLv3

when is the next chapter going to be uploaded? 28???

AntiWorldSystem
AntiWorldSystemLv13

harem?

Roh594:Yes i am thinking turning chapter 3 into a Cullen's pov the size of the chapter will be small.
AntiWorldSystem
AntiWorldSystemLv13

harem?

AntiWorldSystem
AntiWorldSystemLv13

harem?

Avinash_Lakhawat
Avinash_LakhawatLv3

brother can you do more Twilight fanfiction please ๐Ÿฅบ

Roh594:Thanks for liking my fanfic if you find any mistake you can point them out same with providing your views and i will continue updating unless i get caught in some kinda of work
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BOBsonofROB_Uchiha
BOBsonofROB_UchihaLv4

Writing Quality: 3 stars, its readable but there are too many mistakes, not using a period or having some words stuck together. Stability of Updates: 5 stars, the story is already finished so you wouldn't have to worry about any updates, though the first 20 chaps are really long which is nice. Story Development: 5 stars, I like the development, some would say that the story progressed too fast however you gotta remember that the whole novel is 52chaps and not 300+. this novel is simply written for people to enjoy/read in a day. Character Design: 5 stars, if were talking about all characters then i think they're all written correctly, idk about how they are in the original novel but as far as i read from other fanfics/movies i think author did a good job. mc's personality not bad.๐Ÿ‘ World Background: 4 stars, everything is the same as the movie however there are some nice twists here and there, though I think the story about how the first vampire/werewolf/shifters were created was a bit lackluster or better said boring that's why 4 stars. Also author kept mentioning the first werewolf and that mc was supposed to kill him, but that never happened. If I have to give author any tips it would be to try and fix your grammar, even if its not your main language you could still do better in writing, you don't use any question marks/ exclamation marks/ period, you also forget to put spaces a lot of times. Anyway thanks for the nice fanfic author and I hope you write another one in the same world soon.

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