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Tarhanis
TarhanisLv54yr
2020-09-20 23:26

Just an honest and realist review ... For any guys, this fanfic in english is just terrible, google trad is better that this. Reading this make me sick .. . Otherwise, story is classic enough ... just see where this is going, when there will be more chapter. **: This is a fanfic and should be in the fanfic section πŸ˜’

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Roh594
Roh594Author

I did tell it was my first time writing and english is not my first language I understand if you hate it I have no problem with it and I also pointed out I made it in the novel section accidentally.

Li_Cangtian
Li_CangtianLv6

The authors english is honestly not that bad, at least for anyone above a 3rd grade reading average. There are a few mistakes, but nothing is illegible, and meaning can often be understood through context. It is certainly not on the level that can make someone sick, as there are actually novels that do that on this app. I think if the reviewer above found any of those novels, they would likely faint from sheer shock at the level of incomprehendable garbage that some authors slap on a page and call a novel. Again, this novel is of average quality in regards to grammar. Average being the level of most native english speakers. actually better than some native english speakers.

The_Ozymandias
The_OzymandiasLv1

Google Translate...

Roh594:I did tell it was my first time writing and english is not my first language I understand if you hate it I have no problem with it and I also pointed out I made it in the novel section accidentally.
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BOBsonofROB_Uchiha
BOBsonofROB_UchihaLv4

Writing Quality: 3 stars, its readable but there are too many mistakes, not using a period or having some words stuck together. Stability of Updates: 5 stars, the story is already finished so you wouldn't have to worry about any updates, though the first 20 chaps are really long which is nice. Story Development: 5 stars, I like the development, some would say that the story progressed too fast however you gotta remember that the whole novel is 52chaps and not 300+. this novel is simply written for people to enjoy/read in a day. Character Design: 5 stars, if were talking about all characters then i think they're all written correctly, idk about how they are in the original novel but as far as i read from other fanfics/movies i think author did a good job. mc's personality not bad.πŸ‘ World Background: 4 stars, everything is the same as the movie however there are some nice twists here and there, though I think the story about how the first vampire/werewolf/shifters were created was a bit lackluster or better said boring that's why 4 stars. Also author kept mentioning the first werewolf and that mc was supposed to kill him, but that never happened. If I have to give author any tips it would be to try and fix your grammar, even if its not your main language you could still do better in writing, you don't use any question marks/ exclamation marks/ period, you also forget to put spaces a lot of times. Anyway thanks for the nice fanfic author and I hope you write another one in the same world soon.

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