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2021-07-23 05:34

Get a proofreader, dear god. MC literally is a meathead who only cares about fighting and is so redundant to the point where he will repeat the same thing more than once in a single paragraph.

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DNaCat_R
DNaCat_RLv13

A quick summary of the review: It is a very good novel with a good chance to become a "great novel", the plot is unpredictable, the world is very wide, it's readable and the characters are interesting ( Just think about the lich and the puppeteer...) I know that there are a lot of people that know how to write a review better than me but since there are only around 20 reviews on this novel I will try to write an accurate review for new readers... Let's start with the best and more interesting parts of the novel... World background and Story development! I must admit that this novel surprised me far more than I expected after reading the first chapters, besides, those surprises aren't something impossible to predict but at the same time, you won't be able to predict anything without understanding the characters' mindset. The world background is also unique, the author was surely inspired by other novels but it is also clear that the result is surprisingly great, I must say that I don't like post-apocalypse yet I enjoy this one a lot, if you like fantasy novels and you are searching for something new, then this one is the novel you are searching! There are a lot of sentients races like demons, elves, strange talking trees, beastmen, liches, and a lot more... I don't know yet if there are other groups of races like the dark race that contains every creature capable to use dark essence, ( like demons, liches, cursed moon cats, etc..) but if there are, it would be even more interesting since our MC's faction have something like "limitless potential"? Well, not that I care about balance, our MC must defy the heavens with something OP after all. Now, let's go on with the almost serious review! The character design is good with some little flows due to the inexperience of the author, but don't think that this is so bad! have you ever tried to write a novel? Well, if the answer is not then let me tell you something, it's hard, very hard... It's rare to find a new author that can fluently change the character's behavior. Well, our dear author failed a bit since it was a little forced but look at the bright side, he tried and I am confident that he will improve! After all, everyone learns from his own mistakes, for this reason, if you find some actions a little forced, don't drop the novel right away, give it a chance to impress you. Ok now, the main character isn't a mindless machine nor he is an honorable man with a normal mindset yet he is quite funny, I like his character, I don't know what other readers think about it but I can't help but smile and sometimes laugh more than usual while reading. And here we are... at the bottom of the review and the nemesis of our almighty author-sama... The writing quality... I know that there are a lot of novels with far more grammatical mistakes and I must admit that this one isn't too far from my bottom-line for grammatical mistakes yet it is readable and grammatical mistakes can always be fixed in the future, so don't lose hope, just pray that the author will somehow find some trustworthy proofreaders and everything will be perfect. Or that is what I always say to myself every time I find something that shouldn't exist... Well, if someone is reading my review until this point, congratulations! You have surpassed my expectations since usually no one read my reviews... Okay, now that you learned everything about the novel, go, spread your wings and read this novel! I hope you will enjoy it~

JPNovelFan
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Alright i can’t fkin take it anymore. I’ve read up to the current chapter 83 and while I enjoyed it at the start, the MC has some severe mental retardation and ADHD. He goes on and on about how he needs to be stronger and this and that to the point where *SPOILER* his parents die right in front of him. Instead of using his 2 bases FULL of resources to sit down and cultivate, he decides to wander the fking world and comes across another dungeon. He literally cant sit still at all to cultivate and icnreSe his power. He’s been given this holy grail of cultivation and skills and a body suited for cultivation but does NOTHING with it. It took him an entire year before he even decided to cultivate to start. Now, he keeps getting his butt handed to him by creatures a rank hogher than him but he does nothing to cultivate into the next rank. He has this faulty logic that somehow skills will make him stronger but the author goes on to prove how wrong that idea is because the gap between servant and noble rank creatures is, AND I QUOTE, “100times more pwoerful” and even a fraction of the aura these moble creatures let out just forces all servant ranks to kneel. they are completely helpless against it, so you’d think he’d focus on breaking theough to the next rank? Especially since he’s at the peak right before the next rank, right? NO he just cant fkin sit still and cultivate and power through the beginning phase of cultivation. The start of cultivation novels should always go quickly but the author spends so much time just absolutely wasted on pointless stuff when clearly personal power matters the most. idk man this novel has compeltely frustrated me and I think the author is ruining a good setup and world he built.he even gets saved not once not teice but 3 fking times bY this random godly chick with an umbrella and he’s forced into submission and frozen every time. He legit cant do anything and he’s being shown over and over that personal strength and power matters the most but he refuses to sit down and cultivate. StorY: 2/5 (Great premise but ruined by author with dumb decisions) Character: 0/5 (idiot MC that complains endlessly but does zero to improve perosnal power while having s golden spoon) Writing: 4/5 (decent grammer few mistakes) Plot: 3/5 (ruined by author with dumb decisions) Updates: 3/5 (1ch a day or every few days so it’s average and nothing special)

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