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KenceRussel
KenceRusselAuthor4yr
2020-08-31 21:27

Hello, I am the author of 'Primordial Heretic Darkness Art' I hope you can support me in the writing contest by voting power stones in my novel. Thank you!!

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AutoChaos
AutoChaosLv13

No. Its trash. Its most awful I had read so far.

AntiNoob
AntiNoobLv4

Bro, it is just chapter one. Wait for five or more chapter before you judge.

AutoChaos:No. Its trash. Its most awful I had read so far.
AutoChaos
AutoChaosLv13

Writing is bad. Imagination is bad. Don't need to waste time. Nit that desperate

AntiNoob:Bro, it is just chapter one. Wait for five or more chapter before you judge.
Lord_Meph1sto
Lord_Meph1stoLv13

Why dont you go write ur own novel if u want to read only high class novels then?? Dont be a fuckin as*hole to newbie authors.

AutoChaos:No. Its trash. Its most awful I had read so far.
Nikhil_Chand
Nikhil_ChandLv4

single/powercouple/harem?

Jeremy_Kramer
Jeremy_KramerLv5

Romance? Single or multiple love interests?

DeVoided
DeVoidedLv15

Romance?

Tito_Lasanta
Tito_LasantaLv4

This may sound harsh, but could you use a autcorrecting software? The story synopsis looks great but the first chapter english grammar made me wonder if you even care about what you write.

Karl_Devera
Karl_DeveraLv3

lol

Apocalypse_2ndLife
Apocalypse_2ndLifeLv3

DarkFyre
DarkFyreLv15

Question, does the grammar get better? I cant read through the first chapter without crying... i won’t unles someone, anyone tells me it gets better

AimanFaroqq
AimanFaroqqLv15

You lack brain cells and chromosomes, perhaps mentally disabled that u actually are able to read this piece of hippo manure. lol

Lord_Meph1sto:Why dont you go write ur own novel if u want to read only high class novels then?? Dont be a fuckin as*hole to newbie authors.
Lord_Meph1sto
Lord_Meph1stoLv13

Oh my,what do I see here?? A fuckin lazy ass who couldn't even write a piece of shit but criticizing some ******* authors since that's the only place he can act like a top dog without any consequences. Whatever suits your ass dude,whatever. I too have scolded authors b4 like u until I personally tried writing one,so now I don't do it. Oh, don't bother replying anymore too

AimanFaroqq:You lack brain cells and chromosomes, perhaps mentally disabled that u actually are able to read this piece of hippo manure. lol
AimanFaroqq
AimanFaroqqLv15

Hah i bet your writing are definitely worst than the smell of a decomposed rat..I believe nothing gonna happen to me anyway haha and what the fck can you do to me? Get your shit right eh you lil rodent. do you need some rat poison juice? or perhaps a tumor grew inside your brain that it turns you into a retard. Garbage writer deserve a garbage treatment or else they will never grow and remain a garbage with countless of pest residing in it.

Lord_Meph1sto:Oh my,what do I see here?? A fuckin lazy ass who couldn't even write a piece of shit but criticizing some ******* authors since that's the only place he can act like a top dog without any consequences. Whatever suits your ass dude,whatever. I too have scolded authors b4 like u until I personally tried writing one,so now I don't do it. Oh, don't bother replying anymore too
Lord_Meph1sto
Lord_Meph1stoLv13

lol haha!!!! "your writing are definitely worst than". Just come back to flaunt ur pride after u learn basic English. Idiot! Why should I do anything to you, don't just randomly overestimate urself everywhere. "Get your shit right eh lil rodent" You don't even have a proper slang and you just spit out some Hollywood flashy English like think of yourself as smtg,oh pls,just stop making me laugh 😂. I know my english and maybe my writing isn't much but still I think I m better than u fake shit

AimanFaroqq:Hah i bet your writing are definitely worst than the smell of a decomposed rat..I believe nothing gonna happen to me anyway haha and what the fck can you do to me? Get your shit right eh you lil rodent. do you need some rat poison juice? or perhaps a tumor grew inside your brain that it turns you into a retard. Garbage writer deserve a garbage treatment or else they will never grow and remain a garbage with countless of pest residing in it.
AimanFaroqq
AimanFaroqqLv15

Not gonna lie thou.. you really lack brain cells and chromosomes considering how you had to use all of your neuron system just to counter my argument hahah because welll im talking about facts after all. Also english is my 4th language and my lack of understanding in english doesnt even bother me at all but it actually made you cringe all over and that just show how u are worst than a fcking rat..bet your daily meals are boar genitals. But well trash is trash after all. Only uneducated people read and make trash novel and everytime someone smart read these garbages and give some critics, these idiots still think their story own the literature. If these was middle ages i bet you are my slave and war fodder now . Stop writing u dumb shit, you are shaming books

Lord_Meph1sto:lol haha!!!! "your writing are definitely worst than". Just come back to flaunt ur pride after u learn basic English. Idiot! Why should I do anything to you, don't just randomly overestimate urself everywhere. "Get your shit right eh lil rodent" You don't even have a proper slang and you just spit out some Hollywood flashy English like think of yourself as smtg,oh pls,just stop making me laugh 😂. I know my english and maybe my writing isn't much but still I think I m better than u fake shit
Lord_Meph1sto
Lord_Meph1stoLv13

Lol u four eyed chuuni brat, are u living in middle of some jungle or smtg , rat this boar that. U say u r so smart and yet u r here acting like a 8th grader. It's sad u weren't born in a western country, coz nerds like u, four eyes, will be the shits I can always find u in garbage box.

AimanFaroqq:Not gonna lie thou.. you really lack brain cells and chromosomes considering how you had to use all of your neuron system just to counter my argument hahah because welll im talking about facts after all. Also english is my 4th language and my lack of understanding in english doesnt even bother me at all but it actually made you cringe all over and that just show how u are worst than a fcking rat..bet your daily meals are boar genitals. But well trash is trash after all. Only uneducated people read and make trash novel and everytime someone smart read these garbages and give some critics, these idiots still think their story own the literature. If these was middle ages i bet you are my slave and war fodder now . Stop writing u dumb shit, you are shaming books
AimanFaroqq
AimanFaroqqLv15

Hahahahahaha, So? What can you do about it ? With your intellect and degeneration, i believe even cow shit smell nice for you. And so what with wearing spectacles? dont tell me you are going to tell everyone with spectacles are chuunis? Damn your name alone already prove that you are more of an 8th grader that masturbate to words LOL. Oh right since you can find me in the garbage box that means you are that annoying rainbow coloured fly born from a mutated maggot kissing me all day long for survival

Lord_Meph1sto:Lol u four eyed chuuni brat, are u living in middle of some jungle or smtg , rat this boar that. U say u r so smart and yet u r here acting like a 8th grader. It's sad u weren't born in a western country, coz nerds like u, four eyes, will be the shits I can always find u in garbage box.
Lord_Meph1sto
Lord_Meph1stoLv13

pfttt!! Vivid imagination u have there chuuni. I said chuuni bcoz of ur dialogues not coz of ur ugly look.

AimanFaroqq:Hahahahahaha, So? What can you do about it ? With your intellect and degeneration, i believe even cow shit smell nice for you. And so what with wearing spectacles? dont tell me you are going to tell everyone with spectacles are chuunis? Damn your name alone already prove that you are more of an 8th grader that masturbate to words LOL. Oh right since you can find me in the garbage box that means you are that annoying rainbow coloured fly born from a mutated maggot kissing me all day long for survival
AimanFaroqq
AimanFaroqqLv15

A*** poor fly, losing in argument and thats all he had to said after all those taunting..no wonder western had it worst surviving the pandemic =/.

Lord_Meph1sto:pfttt!! Vivid imagination u have there chuuni. I said chuuni bcoz of ur dialogues not coz of ur ugly look.
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DNaCat_RLv13

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JPNovelFan
JPNovelFanLv15

Alright i can’t fkin take it anymore. I’ve read up to the current chapter 83 and while I enjoyed it at the start, the MC has some severe mental retardation and ADHD. He goes on and on about how he needs to be stronger and this and that to the point where *SPOILER* his parents die right in front of him. Instead of using his 2 bases FULL of resources to sit down and cultivate, he decides to wander the fking world and comes across another dungeon. He literally cant sit still at all to cultivate and icnreSe his power. He’s been given this holy grail of cultivation and skills and a body suited for cultivation but does NOTHING with it. It took him an entire year before he even decided to cultivate to start. Now, he keeps getting his butt handed to him by creatures a rank hogher than him but he does nothing to cultivate into the next rank. He has this faulty logic that somehow skills will make him stronger but the author goes on to prove how wrong that idea is because the gap between servant and noble rank creatures is, AND I QUOTE, “100times more pwoerful” and even a fraction of the aura these moble creatures let out just forces all servant ranks to kneel. they are completely helpless against it, so you’d think he’d focus on breaking theough to the next rank? Especially since he’s at the peak right before the next rank, right? NO he just cant fkin sit still and cultivate and power through the beginning phase of cultivation. The start of cultivation novels should always go quickly but the author spends so much time just absolutely wasted on pointless stuff when clearly personal power matters the most. idk man this novel has compeltely frustrated me and I think the author is ruining a good setup and world he built.he even gets saved not once not teice but 3 fking times bY this random godly chick with an umbrella and he’s forced into submission and frozen every time. He legit cant do anything and he’s being shown over and over that personal strength and power matters the most but he refuses to sit down and cultivate. StorY: 2/5 (Great premise but ruined by author with dumb decisions) Character: 0/5 (idiot MC that complains endlessly but does zero to improve perosnal power while having s golden spoon) Writing: 4/5 (decent grammer few mistakes) Plot: 3/5 (ruined by author with dumb decisions) Updates: 3/5 (1ch a day or every few days so it’s average and nothing special)

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