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2021-05-07 00:41

The story had potential, the writing quality was good and the MC was likable enough, but it progresses to fast. After a single day he gets into a meeting with the highest ranking people and they personally give him information he doesn’t really need to know at the moment and exposit their inner thoughts every chance they get merely because he is “trustworthy” and “good looking”. If he was alowed to develop and grow a little more without the plot rainning on us like artillery shells in WWII, it would be much more bearable read.

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