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MagicalLv34yr
2020-08-29 15:42

So I am here trying to give myself a review after reading up to the latest chapter. Let's start first with the writing quality, I'm very well aware of how the story's transition turned out pretty decent. The way the author writes the story is pretty clean and concise, enough for the readers to immediately hook up and immersed in the story without any hurdles. I think this is the greatest benefit you get away with every game system novel. With this kind of strength in your hands, you can reveal an adequate amount of show-not-tell and vice versa. The Updates have been pretty consistent, as I can see with the publishing dates of the chapter, that's even more than one. That's more than what I can ask for. Please keep it up. The story development: I'd say that I love the premise especially the "Government". Whether we like it or not, it's always some shady business over there. It's actually decent and not a far-fetched idea. This kind of administration will always F up some characters and this moves me to the next question. With the character design, we can see the glimpse of Alex, despite his beliefs of the heroes, found himself in a predicament and only to be shattered by the dark side of it. But his strong sense of justice had what kept him from moving forward. I pray that he'll because the superhero where today's youth had lost hope on believing one. With the world background, this is just the beginning and its kind of understandable that world-building is tedious and takes time to form. We just witnessed how Alex is transported to another world after the verge of death. Right now, I'm just seeing the bud that had just germinated. I'm very optimistic that it'll grow as abundant as the flora in the garden of Eden. Keep it up! I hope for the very best in this WPC!

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Ripcorez
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Thank you for this review! It means a lot

D21
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D21
D21Lv5

menos texto

localratdad
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this is the most useful book review I've ever read, thanks homie

Drag454
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👍

Tavares13
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ok

PIERROX
PIERROXLv2

Thank you, we need more reviews like this 👌

Lysonic
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now there is a review

Stuffedcrow
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is this harem?

crinix
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is it harem novel?

Ripcorez:Thank you for this review! It means a lot
Yung_Richard
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Hi

ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv2

does mc continue with the idea of saving people without any reward even after story progressed??

Sai_Swami
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Good

zaifi007
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Thanks for enlighting in such a detail.

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