Bro...ur bash of the wizarding society despite [ ur explanations- which is good, cause no one has really done this in a bash. Good job] BUT its too much...u;ve made them out to be a bunch of retards. ----------- -Mole skin pouches having no detection charms when being stolen. ****, wouldnt the pouches be useless? pick pocketing would be the new thing. they had charms that made impossible for anyone other than owner to open it, obviously they;d have detection charms or something -him stealing said pouches in a crowded area and no one noticing? not even fking voldy? come on man,,,,fine, fine, voldy was weak, extremely so, I'll accept, but he was the dark lord, the most powerful too....he should've noticed something. And what about the others? -The the magic cupboards being useless and only the ordered ones being worth it? [dude, if this was the case....wouldnt they be out of business? no normie could buy it since its expensive, and they wouldnt buy as its practically useless] -The old lady being distracted by feeding cats, and forgetting to tell dumbles about the dursleys being arrested? really? That was retarded, [And u want say that she didnt notice harrys abuse...dude the dursleys werent retard....they didnt physically abuse to the point of broken bones, if they did the schools would've caught em, and seeing how much they liked their image, they wouldnt have done it. Also harry was fed, he wasnt like a sick kid, in the bk was described as a scrawny kid. Plus no where in the bk is physical abuse [broken bones] mentioned..emotional yes....BUT , yes petunia did hit harry with a frying pan, their physical abuse was hitting, not broken bones. Plus the BLOOD CHARM, protects person against what the caster [ie: lily] wants...which is voldy....it dosnt heal **** or anything like...it just make the person undetectable voldy and also protects harry from voldy, like in the first movie...actually researched this ] -Also, say u made this blood charm OC.....if dumbles had this, wouldnt he also have something to detect if harry left? he would've searched right? or the old lady would;ve told later -The cloths? oh come on man....they werent that retarded [muggle air repellent?] ---------------------- I will still read on considering this is a better bash fic that most if not all I;ve read, but still to much..u've made em retards
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Ok, since this is the first critique I received, I will deem it with a short reply! :D -------------------- Firstly. Maybe you are right, maybe you are not, nevertheless, a good point. I will tone it down... or not, depending on what fits my future chapters. ---- Your first point. Mokeskin pouches. Man, saying 'it is obvious' to wizards is pointless. I am trying to portray that they have different mindsets than muggles. Which will be important later later later later on. Anyway, maybe I should have describe more why they don't have them but that's beside the point now. For them it is more like: 'Why would anyone steal something they can't get access to? Goblins can just give them another!'. Harry stole them to study the anti-theft charms on them because they must be quite solid if they prevent even other wizards from stealing. ---- Second point: Yeah, that was quite sketchy. But then again. I also have a reason for why the modern wizards are semi-retarded and weak. You may or may not connect the dots when I write it in later chapters. ---- Third. You didn't understand this. The trunk shop is flooded with muggles and new muggle-born every year. They have these premade trunks for sale to 'get a quick penny'. Normal wizards always take custom-made trunks because they have better options, can be more customized, and overall the creator spends more time on them. Yes, they are more expensive but not to the point the wizards can't afford it. Also, in the entirety of the HP series, I didn't see even one wizard starving. Wizards are wealthy. Even the poorest ones. It is just in comparison to the really wealthy old families they don't amount to much. Even Weasleys never starved with so many kids. Even afforded Hogwarts for all of them, etc... ---- Fourth. Arabella Figg. In films when she was a witness in Wizengamot, she looked pretty much out of it, at least for me. ---- Fifth. Arabella definitely noticed the abuse. As for the rest and your supposed research, you are now just bullsh*tting mate. First of all, I never said there is any blood charm made by lily. Dunno if it's said in films or books but if it is then it is mentioned by Dumbles. The same Dumbles who is supposed to be quite untrustworthy in my story. I also clearly stated it is blood WARDS cast by Dumbledore, and Dumbledore alone that heals him and hide his abuse. As for what-ifs concerning the Dursleys... Maybe, maybe not. Open fanfiction.net and you will see so many of them where he is healed by accidental magic it's sickening! I am not going there, especially now that they are out of the picture now. As for the blood charm protection(or whatever you want to call it) that Dumbledore mentioned as the reason why Harry has to stay in a place he can call 'home'... You can't seriously believe that, right? If it really was like that, it was never explained exactly how it works. I mean Harry was running away, getting kidnapped, spending time at Burrow... almost every summer. Then he was most of the time of the year at Hogwarts. Then he never called that place his home. But it still worked and never had any adverse effects? Not even getting weaker? There is just no proof of it if we do not take a Dumbles word at face value. ---- Sixth. Later chapters. ---- Seventh. Pureblood mindset. Just look at Draco and the contempt for all things muggle. --------------------------------- Okay. I may sound a little too defensive :D. Anyway, I tried to put as much thought into it as I could. I, of course, can't cover every little tidbit and force it to make sense. I also can't spend the chapters to explain everything. Even Harry Potter books had many things that didn't actually give a sense or were never explained clearly (for example magic power etc, why Dursleys etc.). What we have, is thousands upon thousands of fanfictions and their way of explaining things. In time, they became a norm and we use them as if it was given and stated in books. So, I am not gonna limit myself by it.
GL...also here...I do not BS https://harrypotter.fandom.com/wiki/Bond_of_blood_charm
KasiCair:Ok, since this is the first critique I received, I will deem it with a short reply! :D -------------------- Firstly. Maybe you are right, maybe you are not, nevertheless, a good point. I will tone it down... or not, depending on what fits my future chapters. ---- Your first point. Mokeskin pouches. Man, saying 'it is obvious' to wizards is pointless. I am trying to portray that they have different mindsets than muggles. Which will be important later later later later on. Anyway, maybe I should have describe more why they don't have them but that's beside the point now. For them it is more like: 'Why would anyone steal something they can't get access to? Goblins can just give them another!'. Harry stole them to study the anti-theft charms on them because they must be quite solid if they prevent even other wizards from stealing. ---- Second point: Yeah, that was quite sketchy. But then again. I also have a reason for why the modern wizards are semi-retarded and weak. You may or may not connect the dots when I write it in later chapters. ---- Third. You didn't understand this. The trunk shop is flooded with muggles and new muggle-born every year. They have these premade trunks for sale to 'get a quick penny'. Normal wizards always take custom-made trunks because they have better options, can be more customized, and overall the creator spends more time on them. Yes, they are more expensive but not to the point the wizards can't afford it. Also, in the entirety of the HP series, I didn't see even one wizard starving. Wizards are wealthy. Even the poorest ones. It is just in comparison to the really wealthy old families they don't amount to much. Even Weasleys never starved with so many kids. Even afforded Hogwarts for all of them, etc... ---- Fourth. Arabella Figg. In films when she was a witness in Wizengamot, she looked pretty much out of it, at least for me. ---- Fifth. Arabella definitely noticed the abuse. As for the rest and your supposed research, you are now just bullsh*tting mate. First of all, I never said there is any blood charm made by lily. Dunno if it's said in films or books but if it is then it is mentioned by Dumbles. The same Dumbles who is supposed to be quite untrustworthy in my story. I also clearly stated it is blood WARDS cast by Dumbledore, and Dumbledore alone that heals him and hide his abuse. As for what-ifs concerning the Dursleys... Maybe, maybe not. Open fanfiction.net and you will see so many of them where he is healed by accidental magic it's sickening! I am not going there, especially now that they are out of the picture now. As for the blood charm protection(or whatever you want to call it) that Dumbledore mentioned as the reason why Harry has to stay in a place he can call 'home'... You can't seriously believe that, right? If it really was like that, it was never explained exactly how it works. I mean Harry was running away, getting kidnapped, spending time at Burrow... almost every summer. Then he was most of the time of the year at Hogwarts. Then he never called that place his home. But it still worked and never had any adverse effects? Not even getting weaker? There is just no proof of it if we do not take a Dumbles word at face value. ---- Sixth. Later chapters. ---- Seventh. Pureblood mindset. Just look at Draco and the contempt for all things muggle. --------------------------------- Okay. I may sound a little too defensive :D. Anyway, I tried to put as much thought into it as I could. I, of course, can't cover every little tidbit and force it to make sense. I also can't spend the chapters to explain everything. Even Harry Potter books had many things that didn't actually give a sense or were never explained clearly (for example magic power etc, why Dursleys etc.). What we have, is thousands upon thousands of fanfictions and their way of explaining things. In time, they became a norm and we use them as if it was given and stated in books. So, I am not gonna limit myself by it.
:O. Okay. I also must confess I don't really remember all of these finer details. I mostly read fanfics and it kinda blends together. I actually write with the Harry Potter movie open (for example when I wrote about Leaky Cauldron, I reviewed the scene like four times.) so if something is mentioned at later date, I won't get it right. Also, tag it as AU if you will but I, nah, I still do not believe Lily could cast it. I would believe in a lasting blood ritual but a charm lasting for decades in the span of few minutes? Did she just out-Dumbledore herself there? I won't solely depend on the books as the source because as I said, even books have their inconsistencies. Honestly, everyone there just waited to die or waited for Harry to save them. Even chicken order casted mostly stunners. You see, that's why I portray wizards as idiots...
amaturewriter:GL...also here...I do not BS https://harrypotter.fandom.com/wiki/Bond_of_blood_charm
well whether u believe or not really dosnt matter....if it happened it the bks, then its cannon no?...I read ur recent chps....its an FF of the FF....meaning ur ' knowledge is FF ', not cannon,...interesting I suppose
KasiCair::O. Okay. I also must confess I don't really remember all of these finer details. I mostly read fanfics and it kinda blends together. I actually write with the Harry Potter movie open (for example when I wrote about Leaky Cauldron, I reviewed the scene like four times.) so if something is mentioned at later date, I won't get it right. Also, tag it as AU if you will but I, nah, I still do not believe Lily could cast it. I would believe in a lasting blood ritual but a charm lasting for decades in the span of few minutes? Did she just out-Dumbledore herself there? I won't solely depend on the books as the source because as I said, even books have their inconsistencies. Honestly, everyone there just waited to die or waited for Harry to save them. Even chicken order casted mostly stunners. You see, that's why I portray wizards as idiots...
pretty sure she did a ritual that gives her life to protect another one that she loves im sure the love part is the othatne lets her protect him.
KasiCair::O. Okay. I also must confess I don't really remember all of these finer details. I mostly read fanfics and it kinda blends together. I actually write with the Harry Potter movie open (for example when I wrote about Leaky Cauldron, I reviewed the scene like four times.) so if something is mentioned at later date, I won't get it right. Also, tag it as AU if you will but I, nah, I still do not believe Lily could cast it. I would believe in a lasting blood ritual but a charm lasting for decades in the span of few minutes? Did she just out-Dumbledore herself there? I won't solely depend on the books as the source because as I said, even books have their inconsistencies. Honestly, everyone there just waited to die or waited for Harry to save them. Even chicken order casted mostly stunners. You see, that's why I portray wizards as idiots...
Wow, You sure know your stuff side, I wish you luck. I will be reading.
KasiCair:Ok, since this is the first critique I received, I will deem it with a short reply! :D -------------------- Firstly. Maybe you are right, maybe you are not, nevertheless, a good point. I will tone it down... or not, depending on what fits my future chapters. ---- Your first point. Mokeskin pouches. Man, saying 'it is obvious' to wizards is pointless. I am trying to portray that they have different mindsets than muggles. Which will be important later later later later on. Anyway, maybe I should have describe more why they don't have them but that's beside the point now. For them it is more like: 'Why would anyone steal something they can't get access to? Goblins can just give them another!'. Harry stole them to study the anti-theft charms on them because they must be quite solid if they prevent even other wizards from stealing. ---- Second point: Yeah, that was quite sketchy. But then again. I also have a reason for why the modern wizards are semi-retarded and weak. You may or may not connect the dots when I write it in later chapters. ---- Third. You didn't understand this. The trunk shop is flooded with muggles and new muggle-born every year. They have these premade trunks for sale to 'get a quick penny'. Normal wizards always take custom-made trunks because they have better options, can be more customized, and overall the creator spends more time on them. Yes, they are more expensive but not to the point the wizards can't afford it. Also, in the entirety of the HP series, I didn't see even one wizard starving. Wizards are wealthy. Even the poorest ones. It is just in comparison to the really wealthy old families they don't amount to much. Even Weasleys never starved with so many kids. Even afforded Hogwarts for all of them, etc... ---- Fourth. Arabella Figg. In films when she was a witness in Wizengamot, she looked pretty much out of it, at least for me. ---- Fifth. Arabella definitely noticed the abuse. As for the rest and your supposed research, you are now just bullsh*tting mate. First of all, I never said there is any blood charm made by lily. Dunno if it's said in films or books but if it is then it is mentioned by Dumbles. The same Dumbles who is supposed to be quite untrustworthy in my story. I also clearly stated it is blood WARDS cast by Dumbledore, and Dumbledore alone that heals him and hide his abuse. As for what-ifs concerning the Dursleys... Maybe, maybe not. Open fanfiction.net and you will see so many of them where he is healed by accidental magic it's sickening! I am not going there, especially now that they are out of the picture now. As for the blood charm protection(or whatever you want to call it) that Dumbledore mentioned as the reason why Harry has to stay in a place he can call 'home'... You can't seriously believe that, right? If it really was like that, it was never explained exactly how it works. I mean Harry was running away, getting kidnapped, spending time at Burrow... almost every summer. Then he was most of the time of the year at Hogwarts. Then he never called that place his home. But it still worked and never had any adverse effects? Not even getting weaker? There is just no proof of it if we do not take a Dumbles word at face value. ---- Sixth. Later chapters. ---- Seventh. Pureblood mindset. Just look at Draco and the contempt for all things muggle. --------------------------------- Okay. I may sound a little too defensive :D. Anyway, I tried to put as much thought into it as I could. I, of course, can't cover every little tidbit and force it to make sense. I also can't spend the chapters to explain everything. Even Harry Potter books had many things that didn't actually give a sense or were never explained clearly (for example magic power etc, why Dursleys etc.). What we have, is thousands upon thousands of fanfictions and their way of explaining things. In time, they became a norm and we use them as if it was given and stated in books. So, I am not gonna limit myself by it.
*Dude
Ken_Uzumaki:Wow, You sure know your stuff side, I wish you luck. I will be reading.
if u want a good harry potter fanfic read THE ODDS WERE NEVER IN MY FAVOR a master piece.
Thank you good sir
anshu_das_Vaishnav:if u want a good harry potter fanfic read THE ODDS WERE NEVER IN MY FAVOR a master piece.
You guys are all idiots, this is a fanfiction not a bloody remake on the book, which means any interpretation you read here is all personal opinion.
And ur point is? Everyone agrees with what you said. I am not sure if u are an idiot or u just didnt bother reading. the problem is that the author has given so much plot power to mc to do shit without any consequence and everyone else other than him is a retard
da_tian:You guys are all idiots, this is a fanfiction not a bloody remake on the book, which means any interpretation you read here is all personal opinion.
I mean, i even gave examples and clearly said that what he did is au, its in the review and comments, and it isnt the problem. Read next time bro
da_tian:You guys are all idiots, this is a fanfiction not a bloody remake on the book, which means any interpretation you read here is all personal opinion.
really where did you start what he wrote was au, cause from what I see you never once said hence why I believe you think it to be some fanfic. of course I have only read your comment from a month ago.
Go read the comments. Read everything next time
da_tian:really where did you start what he wrote was au, cause from what I see you never once said hence why I believe you think it to be some fanfic. of course I have only read your comment from a month ago.
ah like you I like to judge before having all knowledge. it is truly thrilling.😏
U judged . Not me. It was u that talked without reading. Plus how is it even thrilling?
da_tian:ah like you I like to judge before having all knowledge. it is truly thrilling.😏
Before doing anything, learn to read.
da_tian:ah like you I like to judge before having all knowledge. it is truly thrilling.😏
sure, whatever makes you feel good buddy.
Learn to read and not be an idiot. That would make me happy. This conversation is over. Good bye
da_tian:sure, whatever makes you feel good buddy.
A chat of millenniums
amaturewriter:Learn to read and not be an idiot. That would make me happy. This conversation is over. Good bye
