KasiCair

Wait, what? An MC with a brain!?

Dude... That was a very clean explanation. A great take, too! I just had to say that and give you the due praise for it. Here, have a cookie.

Well, that is a healthy outlook on things. But at the same time... the people in these comments were very fair to you. And they do have a point. Look, at the end of the day, I am writing this to help you. ( What? You didn't ask for it? Ha! I didn't ask if you asked, either! ) You are correct. It is your story. You can do whatever you want. If you think you are good enough and don't need to improve, if this is just a for fun hobby and you don't really care about getting readers, then keep going. You will totally have a reader base. People love their power wank fics nowadays. But if you want to improve your writing? Don't get mad. Don't get defensive instantly. Just take a step back for a moment and consider the points the people are trying to tell you here. They have a point. I am not telling you to listen to everybody. Hell, you don't even need to listen to me if you don't want to. Just read the critique, try to be objective for 30 seconds, and consider where they are coming from. It does not even matter if you agree or disagree with the critique. It gives you a better perspective on things, and that could really help in a big way. You will find it hard to improve if you refuse to even consider that somebody critiquing your work might have a point and you instantly get defensive. Nobody is asking you to rewrite your story. This is just a consideration for your future writing endeavors. Feedback is important, and not everybody who dislikes something in your story is a 'hater'. Sometimes, you just f-cked up, and people are correct. Even if you don't like it. Like... it would be hard for Frigga to be MC's mother when she probably wasn't even born at that point in the plot. (Sorry, I couldn't help myself. I really tried not to say it. But it was stronger than me. The hater in me won.) It's a minor point. It does not matter that much, lol. There are much bigger issues in the story. Others have already pointed some of them out. But again, you don't need to do anything about it. You will have people who like your story as it is. But that does not mean it, or you, can't get better. Just food for thought.

Ho, boy. You haven't even gotten to the really bad part. ... Well, okay, to be fair to the author, I didn't like some of his choices in the story, so I am biased. For the new people who haven't read the story yet, if you read this while wondering if you should even start with the story, give it a go and see for yourself. Who knows, you might come to like it.

That's the whole point, though. Why did you make him a toddler? You didn't need to start the story in the womb. Raphael could have awakened, and the story could have started when the MC was, I dunno, like 3 or something? Hell, you could have started it when he was 15 and have his memories return then. He would have some basic training already, and the story could get off the road with the plot very fast. And then you could have sprinkled this throughout the story. The gaining of divinities? Could have been done one by one throughout several chapters in between character interactions and plot development. NOTHING would have been lost and the story would have been more interesting. It wouldn't be monologing by an embryo MC for several chapters straight, followed by monologing by a toddler MC. That's kinda meh. ... Look, I don't say this to make you angry or to start an argument. I don't give a s...ahem. It is an honest critique, and I try to explain properly how it could have been done in a better way and why. Take it as something to consider in the future, or leave it. Up to you. I said my piece, and that's where it ends for me. Have fun writing.

But at the same time... it does sound cool, man. Ugh, now you've given me a dilemma. Just great.

... Would you really go for it? It sounds kinda like ruling the world. Sure, on paper, that's a cool goal. But imagine all the work you'd have to put into it. Do you REALLY, TRULY, after thinking it through for more than 5 seconds, want to get into that? ... I wouldn't. Sounds like a fkin drag. What's the point? There is a perfectly good world right around him. Why go through all the effort to make a new, possibly inferior one, too? Sounds like a mental illness.

And then you'd get slapped to death by literally the first villain. That kind of mindset is an insidious poison. But I get it. Everybody is the protagonist of their own life. It's what it is.

Like... don't get me wrong. Complaining about this when I read the synopsis and the story is called 'God of Wisdom' is honestly stupid. But I am going to do it anyway! This thing would have been WAAAAAAY more interesting if the MC was a human. Like WAAAAAAAY more interesting. (Yes, I tried to write it childishly on purpose. Deal with it.) WAAAAAAY more interesting!!!!! Raphael would still make this into a complete curb-stomp for the MC ( No, hush, author, you have no idea how the skill works. Don't even try arguing your point. You are coming into the argument with a flawed premise. You already lost, fool! ... Just joking? ) but I think such a thing would have been really interesting. After all, Raphael would have been a huge help, but the MC would still need to go through the journey of becoming stronger and would start as a standard average human. You could spin the plot in any way from there. ... THAT SAID, now that you wasted your time reading this comment, let me just say that I think doing it this way, making MC an Asgardian, could still be great. I am not going to judge the story before reading further and seeing what the author is going to cook up here. The initial idea is interesting, though.

He was long dead by then. Why wait until that moment? If he wanted them dead, he could have killed them when he was alive. He had literal decades and three wars with ripe opportunities for it. There was literally no reason for him to wait. The assumption that it was his plan is kinda... stupid? It just makes no sense, tbh.