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ali_seifi
ali_seifiLv44yr
2020-08-20 17:35

Well...at first I thought it's gonna be a different kind of ATG fanfic but I was wrong. The same old story, our MC arrives in Floaty floaty city, wisely chooses to rob protagonist of everything he got. Cliche. Author is trying very hard to show mc very smart but just from the beginning plot holes start to suck up to mc.

Dark Rebirth (An ATG Fanfic)

Evil_Dragon
4.5
288 Chs

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Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

Honestly... Your review makes me think that I should add the fact that Yun Che will be killed in this fic in the synopsis. Also the fact that the story is gonna cannon for some time... Hmm... Just for this fact, I won't delete your review.

4yr
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DearCompanion
DearCompanionLv4

Mc gives "the great way of b****" divinie technique to yuanba for no reason while mc's cultivation speed himself is like a turtle compared to yunche. Seems like author want mc interaction with yuanba where yuanba jokingly punch mc and mc was bedridden after that. Or maybe author want to give all mc's girls to yuanba to piss the readers who knows 😐

4yr
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ImmortalCockroach
ImmortalCockroachLv3

you forgot the most annoying thing which is ''the mc with an indifferent expression pull down his pants, mc whit cold face rubbed his D, Mc whit an indifferent expression cum, Mc whit chilling eyes pull his pants'' for f**k sake can't he understand that he's not making the mc look badass or cold and calculative but juste a f****g tsundere!

4yr
36
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

Hmm...over 40 chps and its cannon, mc doing what yun che did and he is wasting time. So far nothing new, just a stupid mc...

Evil_Dragon:Honestly... Your review makes me think that I should add the fact that Yun Che will be killed in this fic in the synopsis. Also the fact that the story is gonna cannon for some time... Hmm... Just for this fact, I won't delete your review.
4yr
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DearCompanion
DearCompanionLv4

I can't..., the author really piss me off. Mc will help yuanba this, yuanba that, oh how dare you do this to yuanba, if i .... yuanba, it will really help yuanba. What The FU*k am i reading, what a piece of sh*t.

4yr
19
Devil_soveriegn
Devil_soveriegnLv4

this is not ff bro... it's re-edit with different mc taking yunche place ...and everything is same as cannon

4yr
19
Venom_God
Venom_GodLv12

thx for saving my time bro

DearCompanion:Mc gives "the great way of b****" divinie technique to yuanba for no reason while mc's cultivation speed himself is like a turtle compared to yunche. Seems like author want mc interaction with yuanba where yuanba jokingly punch mc and mc was bedridden after that. Or maybe author want to give all mc's girls to yuanba to piss the readers who knows 😐
4yr
7
DearCompanion
DearCompanionLv4

Ur welcome bro, trashfic shouldn't deceive the readers as if it was gold.

Venom_God:thx for saving my time bro
4yr
10
Baylord_Yama
Baylord_YamaLv2

Story not that bad actually but the characters really makes people cringe. Mc and girls really not written good. Mc is an asshole worse than yun che. And girls has no character too speak off. You cannot enjoy even story development is good.

4yr
9
JustTiredOfPicking
JustTiredOfPickingLv11

so you deleted other low reviews.... makes sense..lol

Evil_Dragon:Honestly... Your review makes me think that I should add the fact that Yun Che will be killed in this fic in the synopsis. Also the fact that the story is gonna cannon for some time... Hmm... Just for this fact, I won't delete your review.
1yr
3
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Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

A shameless review from the author here. Just here to tell you that the novel is gonna be pretty long. It's gonna be a harem but not from the start. MC gonna be smart, manipulative, maybe evil in some regards. I have tried to keep the relationships as normal as possible. Hopefully, you ignore a few things here and there. I will try to keep the grammar decent...

4yr

darkimortal
darkimortalLv6

Reveal spoiler

4yr
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

Look as a FF writer u deserve 5 stars cause of ur writing but ur stories...I will not lie, I've enjoyed each one [ the DD, AGT and naruto FF's] before I dropped cause.. -ur stories all have MC do **** cause of plot...whether its getting chicks or becoming stronger. And its bland as fk -And offense but ur romance is forced,,,the DD FF, that was messed up and rushed [ in relationships]. There was no moments of romance, nothing built and ur MC was more or less the 3rd wheel in that FF, most of the story that dude just being with the main cast....no world exploration, nothing [atleast till where I read C43]...u should explore and add ****. -Ur AGT FF...that MC is the generic AGT FF MC...meaning,,,MC is a show off retard, gets chick cause he is good looking and gains their interest, they barely have a personality...and its all forced by plot...MC has knowledge about everything, but he barely does **** and whatever he does, theres no consequences. Why? He MC. The amount times he should've been killed cause of what he did in the AGT ff is practically limitless. but nope, he protected by plot. and he more or less follows what the OG yun che did and despite what he does there are not many changes -Ur OG bk, MC was a rapist -Naruto FF...MC is protected by plot and kinda weak [ironic cause others bk MC was OP and yet they didnt do ****],,,and somethings like *cough* *tsunade* seemed forced... --------------------- Look i am not bashing u, or saying u ****...cause u not..people like ur ****, I did to BUT there are some ****ty things in ur bk. So...I , long time reader and some what of a fan, request u to avoid doing what u've done.. Dont make MC a show off retard, use brains and do ****. Think, plan, u say manipulative MC, but more often MC just barely tricks a chick, he moreless just lies to em...dont do this...make MC plan, be smart, think and dont show off, hide power....add new ****, rather than following cannon. and the love interests..dont make em useless fk toys like in AGT FF....give em a better personality [but not the cliche arrogant young miss that falls for strong MC in 2 chps]...take **** slow, and make MC use his brains. And dont force romance, take it slow. anyway, my rant is over. GL

4yr
True_Excalibur
True_ExcaliburLv4

This is basically a speed run of the original ATG except the MC is far more unlikeable. The author wants to make a ruthless and smart MC but ends up making everyone else an idiot and MC a spiteful manchild. The worst thing is that the author twists the personalities of the OCs and forces the same plot as the original.

4yr
Izanmi
IzanmiLv4

Reveal spoiler

4yr
DARKSLORDFROST
DARKSLORDFROSTLv5

This shows a lot of promise and I want to see Him bashing some people cough Cough "Braham Goddess" Cough cough 😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏 Insert Evil laugh here : HaHaHaHaHaHaHaha ha ha ha ha

4yr
LUGAL_KUG_GA
LUGAL_KUG_GALv3

the story has a high potential if the author just played it right. but things just came crashing down starting on the part where he contradicted himself about about not wanting to sully xisu's body. I don't know what the author decided the mc personality to be. but to me the mc is like a 13 year old boy ongoing a rebellious phase except he was given power and being fed with godlyspoon and thinks that he is the most miserable person in existence and being hypocritical yet wanted everything.... respond if you think I am wrong. I am open for discussion, just make sure you get your point clear.

3yr
CyB
CyBLv14

it's more a speedrun through the world than an enjoyable read with a well built enviroment. Character interactions are minimalistic and love's not rlly happening.

4yr
Venerable_love
Venerable_loveLv13

kind of lame. Mc refused to have romantic feeling at first because he didn't want to dirty on the Previous owner of the body but he forgot that he already used evil technique which previous user hated. Also he is kind of naive , edgelord type. Chu yuechan humiliated him at first and he simply left her. Although he intended to get revenge later at least he could have taken some benefits .

2yr
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