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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-08-15 15:09

Look as a FF writer u deserve 5 stars cause of ur writing but ur stories...I will not lie, I've enjoyed each one [ the DD, AGT and naruto FF's] before I dropped cause.. -ur stories all have MC do **** cause of plot...whether its getting chicks or becoming stronger. And its bland as fk -And offense but ur romance is forced,,,the DD FF, that was messed up and rushed [ in relationships]. There was no moments of romance, nothing built and ur MC was more or less the 3rd wheel in that FF, most of the story that dude just being with the main cast....no world exploration, nothing [atleast till where I read C43]...u should explore and add ****. -Ur AGT FF...that MC is the generic AGT FF MC...meaning,,,MC is a show off retard, gets chick cause he is good looking and gains their interest, they barely have a personality...and its all forced by plot...MC has knowledge about everything, but he barely does **** and whatever he does, theres no consequences. Why? He MC. The amount times he should've been killed cause of what he did in the AGT ff is practically limitless. but nope, he protected by plot. and he more or less follows what the OG yun che did and despite what he does there are not many changes -Ur OG bk, MC was a rapist -Naruto FF...MC is protected by plot and kinda weak [ironic cause others bk MC was OP and yet they didnt do ****],,,and somethings like *cough* *tsunade* seemed forced... --------------------- Look i am not bashing u, or saying u ****...cause u not..people like ur ****, I did to BUT there are some ****ty things in ur bk. So...I , long time reader and some what of a fan, request u to avoid doing what u've done.. Dont make MC a show off retard, use brains and do ****. Think, plan, u say manipulative MC, but more often MC just barely tricks a chick, he moreless just lies to em...dont do this...make MC plan, be smart, think and dont show off, hide power....add new ****, rather than following cannon. and the love interests..dont make em useless fk toys like in AGT FF....give em a better personality [but not the cliche arrogant young miss that falls for strong MC in 2 chps]...take **** slow, and make MC use his brains. And dont force romance, take it slow. anyway, my rant is over. GL

Dark Rebirth (An ATG Fanfic)

Evil_Dragon
4.5
288 Chs

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Ttsfih
TtsfihLv4

what do u mean about Tsunade in his naruto fanfic?

4yr
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

her reasons to stay in the village, she was OC [actually some characters were kinda OC ]....there were other things but this was something I remembered,

Ttsfih:what do u mean about Tsunade in his naruto fanfic?
4yr
JoJo_Soni
JoJo_SoniLv4

I agree that his fanfics have not been perfect. But there has been improvement. I have only read his 2 fanfic since I was not interested in others. But I think that MC has been promising so far. If u just put aside what author is saying about MC (manipulative and all) and just enjoy it, you will like it a lot. Romance was a bit better in last fanfic so we can at least expect that it won't be forceful like before. I really think that author is really good writer (read a lot of **** fanfic which people say is 5/5 and is in top of ranking)

4yr
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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

if u mean this, yep. I agree....all the chps..love it....to be fair, I like all his ****...but IDK, the old ones kinda felt repetitive [and also what I said] but they were all dope...this though is better

JoJo_Soni:I agree that his fanfics have not been perfect. But there has been improvement. I have only read his 2 fanfic since I was not interested in others. But I think that MC has been promising so far. If u just put aside what author is saying about MC (manipulative and all) and just enjoy it, you will like it a lot. Romance was a bit better in last fanfic so we can at least expect that it won't be forceful like before. I really think that author is really good writer (read a lot of **** fanfic which people say is 5/5 and is in top of ranking)
4yr
1
JoJo_Soni
JoJo_SoniLv4

Yeah I read his atg fanfic. And it has problems. But they were that much in Naruto ones. So I think that this will be only better. you can just see the improvement in his last fanfic. Early chapters were not that good. But it got better and better(with some problems ofc). We all love his work and are here to give feedback after all. Author has talent. Let's just hope that just like his updates his quality will also be high and consistent.

amaturewriter:if u mean this, yep. I agree....all the chps..love it....to be fair, I like all his ****...but IDK, the old ones kinda felt repetitive [and also what I said] but they were all dope...this though is better
4yr
1
JoJo_Soni
JoJo_SoniLv4

Yeah I read his atg fanfic. And it has problems. But they were that much in Naruto ones. So I think that this will be only better. you can just see the improvement in his last fanfic. Early chapters were not that good. But it got better and better(with some problems ofc). We all love his work and are here to give feedback after all. Author has talent. Let's just hope that just like his updates his quality will also be high and consistent.

amaturewriter:if u mean this, yep. I agree....all the chps..love it....to be fair, I like all his ****...but IDK, the old ones kinda felt repetitive [and also what I said] but they were all dope...this though is better
4yr
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Lexi_69
Lexi_69Lv1

Hey?...ummmm.why.do.you.not.use.spaces.?

4yr
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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

Why do u care? Does it hurt you?

Lexi_69:Hey?...ummmm.why.do.you.not.use.spaces.?
4yr
Lexi_69
Lexi_69Lv1

Nah.Why?.are.you.asking?.Does.it hurt.you?.

amaturewriter:Why do u care? Does it hurt you?
4yr
1
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

No, u are the one that brought it up. I type like that, cause i like it. Its ur problem, not mine. So idc. U do u. Peace

Lexi_69:Nah.Why?.are.you.asking?.Does.it hurt.you?.
4yr
SugarGodno1
SugarGodno1Lv4

author sama been quite silent after this

2yr
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Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

A shameless review from the author here. Just here to tell you that the novel is gonna be pretty long. It's gonna be a harem but not from the start. MC gonna be smart, manipulative, maybe evil in some regards. I have tried to keep the relationships as normal as possible. Hopefully, you ignore a few things here and there. I will try to keep the grammar decent...

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ali_seifi
ali_seifiLv4

Well...at first I thought it's gonna be a different kind of ATG fanfic but I was wrong. The same old story, our MC arrives in Floaty floaty city, wisely chooses to rob protagonist of everything he got. Cliche. Author is trying very hard to show mc very smart but just from the beginning plot holes start to suck up to mc.

4yr
darkimortal
darkimortalLv6

Reveal spoiler

4yr
True_Excalibur
True_ExcaliburLv4

This is basically a speed run of the original ATG except the MC is far more unlikeable. The author wants to make a ruthless and smart MC but ends up making everyone else an idiot and MC a spiteful manchild. The worst thing is that the author twists the personalities of the OCs and forces the same plot as the original.

4yr
Izanmi
IzanmiLv4

Reveal spoiler

4yr
DARKSLORDFROST
DARKSLORDFROSTLv5

This shows a lot of promise and I want to see Him bashing some people cough Cough "Braham Goddess" Cough cough 😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏 Insert Evil laugh here : HaHaHaHaHaHaHaha ha ha ha ha

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LUGAL_KUG_GA
LUGAL_KUG_GALv3

the story has a high potential if the author just played it right. but things just came crashing down starting on the part where he contradicted himself about about not wanting to sully xisu's body. I don't know what the author decided the mc personality to be. but to me the mc is like a 13 year old boy ongoing a rebellious phase except he was given power and being fed with godlyspoon and thinks that he is the most miserable person in existence and being hypocritical yet wanted everything.... respond if you think I am wrong. I am open for discussion, just make sure you get your point clear.

3yr
CyB
CyBLv14

it's more a speedrun through the world than an enjoyable read with a well built enviroment. Character interactions are minimalistic and love's not rlly happening.

4yr
Venerable_love
Venerable_loveLv13

kind of lame. Mc refused to have romantic feeling at first because he didn't want to dirty on the Previous owner of the body but he forgot that he already used evil technique which previous user hated. Also he is kind of naive , edgelord type. Chu yuechan humiliated him at first and he simply left her. Although he intended to get revenge later at least he could have taken some benefits .

2yr
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