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LordSamurai
LordSamuraiLv44yr
2020-05-12 01:15

I was attracted to the story and I want to continue reading. However, I found the term to mention it used as "he" in almost every paragraph very repetitive. I advise you to decrease when using your own name. Hastin thought ... Hastin was curious ... You can refer to it using "him", but not very often, because it gets tiring. The novel has a good premise, I will accompany and support you!

DEATHLY APP

Darlene_Virginia
4.7
109 Chs

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Darlene_Virginia
Darlene_VirginiaAuthor

Thank you for the review!! I consider your suggestion and try to work on that...

4yr
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