webnovel
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor4yr
2020-08-10 19:19

Hello folks, Author here :) I finally decided to follow our tradition here in WN, hahaha. Updates will be 2 chappies per day, unless I am not feeling well (which is true at the time of posting this review). Chapter length averages around 1900 words (as of chapter 107). Coming to the story, I would like to tell you a few things. 1) The pace of the story is slow as I give attention to many things. But, as we go into the story, the pace picks up a little. 2) World background is detailed, I can say this with a lot of confidence. I have been fleshing out intricate bits since the beginning, taking measures to not make it overwhelming to the readers. After all, I too was a reader(A reader in WN since 2017) for more than 5 years before becoming an author, so I know the information retaining capacity of a reader, which is very less in WN (since each of you probably read 20 other stories). 3) The characters each will have their own life. Sure, there might be many of them that you wouldn't like (Since the setting of the story is like that) but in such cases, try to put yourselves in their shoes and see if their character is justified. Welp, reading experience matters haha. 4) The English language...well, no one has complained about it till now. So, I presume I am doing a fair enough job in that regard. 5) My MC...well, he has lots of issues, so much so that he at times makes decisions that are kind of radical. Well...parasites. 6) The story has a dark vibe. The world revolves around parasites so, it is not exactly a knight and shining example of bravery, justice, camaraderie, etc. The tone is realistic; meaning, the events will occur similar to if the world existed IRL. But, you will also have many heartwarming moments, familial relationships, etc. I won't spoil anymore but, let me end it with a small note. "There will neither be any instant gratification in the story nor a grandpa in a ring or a stone picked up on the street possessing heaven-defying capabilities, sword spirit, great Heaven Void Earth Rending Physique, etc." Oof, on another final note, please don't spam reviews, especially the troll ones. I can take criticism any day (Sure, I will be affected by them. I only said I can take criticism; I never said I am immune to them) but please use a neutral tone if possible. If you are leaving a lower star rating, do specify the parts that led you to make the decision. This will help me improve. But, just because I don't delete reviews doesn't mean you can take advantage of it. Leave me lengthy reviews if possible, I have a thing for them haha. **. I read all comments (Chapter comments included) and also boast a sound memory. So, I'll know... :P

Liked by 103 people

LIKE
Replies72
zork
zorkLv5

Almost catch up to latest chapters. Till now your novel captivates by its originality and solid plot! I like the personality(ies) of the protagonist and antagonist (?) Great job, keep going, don't let us down ✌✊

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

Haha, will do. Thanks for reading my book ~!!! Glad you could enjoy it :)

zork:Almost catch up to latest chapters. Till now your novel captivates by its originality and solid plot! I like the personality(ies) of the protagonist and antagonist (?) Great job, keep going, don't let us down ✌✊
0525314717166
0525314717166Lv4

it’s pretty interesting but the way the characters talk is really weird. they’re way too descriptive sometimes and it sounds unnatural because that’s not how people normally converse

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

It depends on the type of people, their place of birth, and their life experiences. Moreover, the context of the situation also affects the contents of a conversation. Slice of Life type conversations only exist when they are making casual talk, which is hardly written in this book. Since most of the dialogues follow the context, the contents conform to the setting.

0525314717166:it’s pretty interesting but the way the characters talk is really weird. they’re way too descriptive sometimes and it sounds unnatural because that’s not how people normally converse
Reflys
ReflysLv4

Sick novel

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

thank you very much 😍😍😍

Reflys:Sick novel
BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

I haven't read it yet but synopsis said he is trying to get back to his time After all that happens to him when he gets back is him getting back the thing that causes the apocalypse because he brought something back with him If so then is this one of those bootstrap paradoxes

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

That...will count as spoilers so I can't answer your question. [img=update]

BrianG9677:I haven't read it yet but synopsis said he is trying to get back to his time After all that happens to him when he gets back is him getting back the thing that causes the apocalypse because he brought something back with him If so then is this one of those bootstrap paradoxes
The_Potato_Shack
The_Potato_ShackLv4

duck premium

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

😅😅😅

The_Potato_Shack:duck premium
ProfessorofCulture
ProfessorofCultureLv14

harem?

Overlord_Venus:😅😅😅
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

no harem

ProfessorofCulture:harem?
ProfessorofCulture
ProfessorofCultureLv14

sad😔

Overlord_Venus:no harem
Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_RuddLv6

You should think about getting this thing published with TOR books or something. Ypour magical system is very disciplined; Sanderson level, IMO.

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

Wow, thank you for such amazing words~!!! <3 <3 <3 This book is contracted to WN, so I can no longer try to publish it traditionally. I will try for my subsequent books after my skills have improved further.

Khavos_Rudd:You should think about getting this thing published with TOR books or something. Ypour magical system is very disciplined; Sanderson level, IMO.
Kouhaii
KouhaiiLv4

Congrats on your front page recommendations, I found this when I opened my apps and usually I just dismissed it, but I saw a familiar name and it turned out to be you. Haven't read it yet because I'm currently following an original novel and I only read one original story for now for immersive experience, I'll add this story to my list for future read. [img=recommend]

Kailour
KailourLv6

good I'll give it a try then

Overlord_Venus:no harem
Real_spam_bot
Real_spam_botLv5

It takes more to get published than a good magic system. granted I’m not very far in the story, but I am very skeptical that a web novel can get published as a book. The styles are just too different. speaking of Sanderson though he’s my favorite author. there’s a lot more that makes him good than his magic systems, but good for you for having good taste.

Khavos_Rudd:You should think about getting this thing published with TOR books or something. Ypour magical system is very disciplined; Sanderson level, IMO.
Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_RuddLv6

True that it takes more; dialogues, plot etc all come into it. What I meant by the comparison is how the magic system ties into the universe. Money, food, language, relationships, politics all must be touched by the magical system. Take Mistborn for instance; he does not break the rules of his world just to have the MC do something remarkable or get out of a bad situation. Why i suggested thinking about publishing was because you were similarly rigid with your magic system and had it play a role in all aspects of the society. This is very important because you allow a reader to become immersed in the fantasy world where everything makes sense.

Real_spam_bot:It takes more to get published than a good magic system. granted I’m not very far in the story, but I am very skeptical that a web novel can get published as a book. The styles are just too different. speaking of Sanderson though he’s my favorite author. there’s a lot more that makes him good than his magic systems, but good for you for having good taste.
FrightKnight88
FrightKnight88Lv15

Would have tried it out if it wasnt premium, considering webnovel likes to only give 50 chapters free on a 1000+chapter novel... would be nice to read but I dont want to have to dedicate a year or more to reading the story sorry, also kind of makes it ironic that you recommend not lightly reading the story when that's all the average person can probably do with it

Other Reviews
Teddy_910
Teddy_910Lv15

(For a Quick Analysis, skip to the tldr) Lately, I've been playing a game while at work. The game is called "what type of book would my coworkers like to read?" and I am semi-good at it. I believe that everyone has a book that they will enjoy reading. Despite my near perfect rating, this book may not be for everyone. Some people like thrillers, others like romance, drama, mystery, horror, philosophical, or adventure novels. If I were to place this book in a genre, I'm not sure if I could. It scratches a reading itch I never knew I had. Instead of dropping the book into an unfitting stereotype, I'll list some descriptors that come to mind. Similar to "Dune" by Frank Herbert. Sandersonesque. Thought-provoking, Simple to understand. Unclear magic system, A magic system with defined rules. Aloofness among society, Human emotions. This book is filled with almost-contradictions, yet never quite contradicts itself. The author has a grasp upon the truth of human nature, and has used that to create a culture where humans are both the pinnacle of feeling, and the most heartless psychopaths. And inside of it all is someone like us, but stripped of everything that ties us to him. If you enjoy the act of painting a picture in your mind, this may be the book for you. The descriptors are apt and concise in a readable manner. I sometimes reread the fight scenes, or even the relaxed scenes, to repaint the scene until I find it satisfactory. The world has a home in my head and my heart. If you are looking for a book, give this one a shot. It is fabulous. The first few chapters are a tough read because the author writes in a different style, but as you progress and reading becomes easier, the book becomes immensely more enjoyable. As I've said, this book may not be for everyone, but you'll never know if you don't give it a try. TLDR Read the first 5 chapters. Get used to the prose. Then decide if you like it or not. Also, if you like this, check out Brandon Sanderson.

ShadyDemoness
ShadyDemonessLv15

Where to begin... Though it had a complicated start, which most people seemed to get confused by, or right out made them curse at the author, a careful look will make one realise that it is in fact perfect. The psychological problems that plague the MC at the beginning are realistic and make one think. They are confusing and at first look make no sense, but upon taking a step back and asking yourself what you would have done in the shoes of the MC you will realize it makes sense. These Psychological Problems of the MC because of his kind of power remain for the entire Novel, but get less and less as he begins to master it. Even though that is the case some break downs occur. The whole Worldbuilding, and the why of all things are fantastic. One of the few times world lore has actually interested me. A rarity on this platform. The Characters is neither good nor evil, but he follows his own codex. He shemes and plans, but is incredibly caring, later on as he understands more of the world he begins to care not only for humanity. The whole concept that every ability is based on parasites and the genetic changes that occur over time are brilliant. The Side characters ar more fleshed out than most mc's on this platform. Even though it may not seem so at first, it is just because the mc hasn't interacted with them enough to understand theme. Battles are legendary written. You shudder at big fights and feel patriotism for a fantasy Humanity with abilities. These fights are mostly on a level higher than the mc. And the MC is mostly an onlooker, point is on mostly. This is unavoidable as the MC is still a student at the time and is growing up to be a pillar of humanity. Everything he does has meaning, even if not visible at first. All in all, you have here a masterpiece, a gem, that even though confusing at first, will make you feel like you are at the side of the mc all the way. This is just Book 1, Author plans to release Book 2 seperate. The reason being that if he gets enough patrons on P. A. T. R. E. O. N he will make the chapters free for all, and that only works if he releases book 2 seperately. Go on, enjoy a masterpiece.

IndolentFish
IndolentFishLv14

A constructive criticism: A fairly sub-par work, highly not recommended as it is so far. The author is barely making an effort in keeping readers interested. This mostly comes off as a grade school project, with the author trying desperately to hit word count requirements rather than actually write anything of entertainment value. The writing comes across as completely forced, as if the author has no interest in their own webnovel. This is rather unfortunate as the plot is somewhat unique and could make for a compelling story, one that may get a good TV/Movie adaptation. Author-San, please worry less about filling a chapter with words and more on telling an actual story, one with plot, direction, and an compelling narrative. One of the most recommended tips from successful authors is to, in a separate document the readers don't get see, list the upcoming plot points you have in mind, then make it seem like you knew what you were doing all along. The story will come along seemingly on its own as you try to connect one plot point to the next. Using 12 words to describe a standard steel bowl, and writing down what each character does in the bathroom and how many minutes it takes to move their bowels followed by a quarter hour breakdown of each of their actions whilst in the restroom is how you lose readers. I probably will not be reading this novel again until a few hundred chapters have been written, and will probably jump straight from where I currently am (chapter 60) directly to future chapter... 600? to check how things have gone. I hope the chapters prior to that will be worth going back to read. Take care Author-San, and please, do try looking up writing advice online if you feel stuck. I hope my words do not dissuade you from continuing Psychic Parasyte, that your writing improves, and that readers come flocking to your work.

Related Stories

Global Planets: Build A Primordial Civilization From Day One

People got a planet in the beginning and what to do with it was up to them. Wang Yi, a young man in the 21st century, coincidentally transmigrated into a world where everyone had the opportunity to awaken a planet. The larger the diameter of the planet, the more advanced the energy transformed, and the more powerful the civilization created. Some people obtained the planet's energy as " Martial True Qi" and used the creation sandbox to create a martial civilization, and the people on the planet were all martial artists. Some people get the planet's energy as "Immortal True Energy" and use the creation sandbox to create an immortal civilization, and the people on the planet were all cultivators! Some people obtained the energy of the planet as "Fighting Qi", and used the creation sandbox to create the civilization of Fighting Qi, and people on the planet are all fighters! Some people obtained the energy of the planet as "Soul Power", and used the creation sandbox to create the Soul Path Civilization, and the people on the planet were all Soul Masters! ... Everyone was struggling to evolve a magical civilization system. Wang Yi, however, used his past life memories to start evolving an "Primordial" civilization! "Your world-extinguishing laser cannon is powerful, but I have the son of the Great Dao, Pan Gu! One axe will reduce your world to naught!" "Your thousands of angels are powerful, but I have three thousand Chaos Demon Gods to beat you in a minute!" "Your army of darkness is awesome, but I have the Buddha's Paramount Sage, who will defeat you in a minute!" "..." This was a story of how the Primordial civilization crushed various transcendent civilizations.

Taro And Tablet Inscription · Sci-fi
4.3
171 Chs