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Nevermindthename
NevermindthenameLv144yr
2020-07-28 05:00

High rating for the unique concept which is well written. The writing quality is pretty good, no obvious mistakes in that. Decent world building, volume 1 sets the stage for the story. It takes the time to explore things but doesn't reveal everything and keeps a sense of mystery. Though this takes focus away from mc for long and combined with the unanswered questions, it might be annoying for some. Now the characters, the mc isn't op but has unique advantages that he still doesn't fully understand. He's personality is being shaped because of his unique circumstances and doesn't seem forced. The other characters seem to have a role to play and it's hard to predict how things will go with the way they are set or developed. That being said there's also room for improvement for example the 1st volume could have been far more captivating. Since the mc is formerly from a similar world as ours, more contrast could have been shown to highlight the difference with not just the architecture but the way of life and attitude of people though this could be depicted later as well. These are just a few things at the top of my head right now.

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ShadyDemoness
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Where to begin... Though it had a complicated start, which most people seemed to get confused by, or right out made them curse at the author, a careful look will make one realise that it is in fact perfect. The psychological problems that plague the MC at the beginning are realistic and make one think. They are confusing and at first look make no sense, but upon taking a step back and asking yourself what you would have done in the shoes of the MC you will realize it makes sense. These Psychological Problems of the MC because of his kind of power remain for the entire Novel, but get less and less as he begins to master it. Even though that is the case some break downs occur. The whole Worldbuilding, and the why of all things are fantastic. One of the few times world lore has actually interested me. A rarity on this platform. The Characters is neither good nor evil, but he follows his own codex. He shemes and plans, but is incredibly caring, later on as he understands more of the world he begins to care not only for humanity. The whole concept that every ability is based on parasites and the genetic changes that occur over time are brilliant. The Side characters ar more fleshed out than most mc's on this platform. Even though it may not seem so at first, it is just because the mc hasn't interacted with them enough to understand theme. Battles are legendary written. You shudder at big fights and feel patriotism for a fantasy Humanity with abilities. These fights are mostly on a level higher than the mc. And the MC is mostly an onlooker, point is on mostly. This is unavoidable as the MC is still a student at the time and is growing up to be a pillar of humanity. Everything he does has meaning, even if not visible at first. All in all, you have here a masterpiece, a gem, that even though confusing at first, will make you feel like you are at the side of the mc all the way. This is just Book 1, Author plans to release Book 2 seperate. The reason being that if he gets enough patrons on P. A. T. R. E. O. N he will make the chapters free for all, and that only works if he releases book 2 seperately. Go on, enjoy a masterpiece.

Overlord_Venus
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IndolentFish
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A constructive criticism: A fairly sub-par work, highly not recommended as it is so far. The author is barely making an effort in keeping readers interested. This mostly comes off as a grade school project, with the author trying desperately to hit word count requirements rather than actually write anything of entertainment value. The writing comes across as completely forced, as if the author has no interest in their own webnovel. This is rather unfortunate as the plot is somewhat unique and could make for a compelling story, one that may get a good TV/Movie adaptation. Author-San, please worry less about filling a chapter with words and more on telling an actual story, one with plot, direction, and an compelling narrative. One of the most recommended tips from successful authors is to, in a separate document the readers don't get see, list the upcoming plot points you have in mind, then make it seem like you knew what you were doing all along. The story will come along seemingly on its own as you try to connect one plot point to the next. Using 12 words to describe a standard steel bowl, and writing down what each character does in the bathroom and how many minutes it takes to move their bowels followed by a quarter hour breakdown of each of their actions whilst in the restroom is how you lose readers. I probably will not be reading this novel again until a few hundred chapters have been written, and will probably jump straight from where I currently am (chapter 60) directly to future chapter... 600? to check how things have gone. I hope the chapters prior to that will be worth going back to read. Take care Author-San, and please, do try looking up writing advice online if you feel stuck. I hope my words do not dissuade you from continuing Psychic Parasyte, that your writing improves, and that readers come flocking to your work.

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