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Danyz
DanyzLv154yr
2020-06-06 23:39

The story is very good, it may seem slow to others but there is a lot of world building, foreshadowing, character development. I like all the details, especially those about the power system and the world background. I woudn't mind to know even more about the world. The characters are also quite likeable in my opinion. I really like the style of writing, it flows naturally and it seems "clean". Also, I didn't notice grammatical errors, just a name switch between Heima and Henrietta in a chapter I think, but that is understandable. What may be a put off to others is that the MC takes a lot of time to take control of the host. I am myself quite eager to see it happening already but the other details, developments and character interactions kept me focused and hooked until now. Also, at first I wanted to give this a 4 for the stability of the updates because I've seen that the update rate is around 4 chapters per week (which in my opinion can be better). But then I thought I can't comment on that too much as I only started reading this yesterday and the chapters are pretty long. Also, I want to encourage the author to write more and continue the story, maybe at a faster pace in the future (faster pace as in chapters released per week/day, not the pace of the story). So, keep up the good work author and don't ever drop this story, please! Good luck!

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Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

The only reason for the slow updates is because I have yet to finish planning the full storyline. Though I must say, I am almost done with it, and will probably finish it by next Sunday. After that, you can expect a stable release rate. I am happy that you are enjoying this story, this pumps up my writer spirit!!!

Danyz
DanyzLv15

I am glad to hear that!😁

Overlord_Venus:The only reason for the slow updates is because I have yet to finish planning the full storyline. Though I must say, I am almost done with it, and will probably finish it by next Sunday. After that, you can expect a stable release rate. I am happy that you are enjoying this story, this pumps up my writer spirit!!!
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

btw, this review is really detailed. I am pinning it, hehe

Danyz:I am glad to hear that!😁
gumball221
gumball221Lv5

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Overlord_Venus:btw, this review is really detailed. I am pinning it, hehe
gumball221
gumball221Lv5

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Overlord_Venus:btw, this review is really detailed. I am pinning it, hehe
gumball221
gumball221Lv5

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Overlord_Venus:btw, this review is really detailed. I am pinning it, hehe
Vastoking
VastokingLv5

I have only one thing to say. Is there a way I can read this for free?😢😢😢

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

It is free till chapter 92. After that, you can use fast passes to read for free

Vastoking:I have only one thing to say. Is there a way I can read this for free?😢😢😢
Mister_Poopie
Mister_PoopieLv1

I want Farem

Fikre
FikreLv4

xp

Daoist455843
Daoist455843Lv14

having trouble reading cuz my preference is like a gaming system hahaha. still giving it a chance

Tai_Tankamaru
Tai_TankamaruLv1

can I be in the story

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

what is your opinion now? was this story your cup of tea?

Daoist455843:having trouble reading cuz my preference is like a gaming system hahaha. still giving it a chance
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

you can, if you gift a crown

Tai_Tankamaru:can I be in the story
JorgenThinn
JorgenThinnLv14

What is a crown😅 i dont really know how this app works yet, So there is a lot of stuff i dont know about. Also, if you (Overlord_Venus) read this, how do you keep up your writing spirit? I stopped wanting to write my story after a week or so, even though i roughly know where the story is going. and i really want to write more, but its hard to find time to do so because of homework. So i was wondering if you could tell me how to find time to work on my story and keep up my writing spirit. If You do, it would really mean a lot to me, as i see you as a rather sucsessful writer/author. Thank you for reading the whole thing, it means a lot

Overlord_Venus:you can, if you gift a crown
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

Wow, you're the first to call me a successful writer. Thanks, ahaha. Before becoming an author, I was a binge reader. I started a new story every week and was also following 20+ novels daily. This was not to mention comics and anime. Over the course, my tastes became picky and I could no longer enjoy others stories as much as i did before. So, my only option was to write one myself. But believe, my first story was vomit material. It had a decent premise but the execution left everything to be desired. To me, i enjoy dreaming about the world i have created, trying my best to live in it. I enjoy that. That's why I can write continuously. Because I want to live more in that world. Hope this answers your question.

JorgenThinn:What is a crown😅 i dont really know how this app works yet, So there is a lot of stuff i dont know about. Also, if you (Overlord_Venus) read this, how do you keep up your writing spirit? I stopped wanting to write my story after a week or so, even though i roughly know where the story is going. and i really want to write more, but its hard to find time to do so because of homework. So i was wondering if you could tell me how to find time to work on my story and keep up my writing spirit. If You do, it would really mean a lot to me, as i see you as a rather sucsessful writer/author. Thank you for reading the whole thing, it means a lot
SugarLilRedPanda
SugarLilRedPandaLv13

harem?

Nat_Powell
Nat_PowellLv11

I may read it

Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

No harem

SugarLilRedPanda:harem?
Overlord_Venus
Overlord_VenusAuthor

Thank you

Nat_Powell:I may read it
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