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Ghost_Devil
Ghost_DevilLv34yr
2020-05-29 22:18

Well it started good with good pace and good character development. As the story moved forward and the number of harem members started increasing, it got jumbled up like author just forgot what the story is and pace got overly fast with no idea whats going on!!!!

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LegendaryChaos
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While it is sad to say it, I have to agree my story ran away on me. Hopefully I can fix it and get the pacing going great again.

Ghost_Devil
Ghost_DevilLv3

Well I hope u can at least create a chapter with all the harem and give a short description on who they are and how they started.. It will make it somewhat easier to follow and also plz try to have some relationship development before committing on future chapters.

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