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2020-06-30 16:39

Seemed interesting at first. I found some early moments that I wasnt crazy with but still kept readung. By chapter 50 I can honestly say its lackluster. MC who wants so much but doesnt really care for others nor does he really use what he has effectively either. Its an ok fanfiction of a harem story and a slice of life OP story. It doesnt really do either genre justice and is really just a power wank without any real progression of plot. Just grab her, then her, ooo i have a dungeon, and lets grab her. Now he doesnt grab a might massive harem or anything but those he chooses he seems to not cherish much at all. Bottom line, its an ok read and I feel the author could improve the story by creating actual character development, doesnt have to be some big tragedy but simple things like more introspective moments and realizations of behavior attempts at change and or cherishing his family more, etc. Just give it some thought. Good luck!

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If you're interested in the bakugan, someone wrote a fanfic about the bakugan and it made me feel very nostalgic. The fanfic is called "bakugan: rise of the half bakugan", if you have time, I would appreciate it if you could take a look and write your personal opinions in the comments. they are called authors, but their articles do not stand out because there is not much interaction. I'm a writer too, so I'm posting some fanfictions with comments so you can feel better. I am writing this message because I am afraid that if he feels that what he has written is not taken into account, he will leave. If you enjoy this fanfic like me, you will make me very happy if you direct others to this fanfic. Thanks if you've read this far. (and my english is not very good so sorry for the typos.)

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