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2020-09-24 14:08

Dude seriously, and this is to the author by the way, i thought i liked the main character at the beginning but the more i read the more annoyed i get. It started out with the subpar translation now i just blame the author. The MC's decisions and thoughts are just plain dumb, its so freakin frustrating for a so dubbed intelligent human being to be this stupid. You're being targeted, you cant retaliate, reason, your parents safety will be compromised. Teacher offers to help in your situation n she says she'll help in the investigation, whats the point not like you can do anything to the Katsuragis even if you can prove its them. Ask your teacher for money you dumbass or at least a faster way to get them out of the region to another base. Heck you could just ask the Kudos for help, screw owing them, with your parents out of the way you have more freedom. Thats your number 1 problem or are you gonna wait till after something happens to them. All in all the premise n storyline was good but your writing style just freaks me out, you potray him as calm n smart n strong but then throw in aspects of ruthlessness which comes out of nowhere, and his ruthless persona seems so forced it just doesnt match. I forgot the rest but at the very least make him a bit more decisive, if someone wrongs him either kill him or bide your time dont get overly frustrated over every lil thing.

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