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One_Azure
One_AzureLv12yr
2022-06-02 03:36

Lots of grammar and spelling mistakes. Sentence construction is also not great. So 2 for Writing quality. Not sure about the updating stability as I don't follow the novel... Look as far as the novel goes apart from the writing, is very avarege. The OCs are mostly generic and the mc is basically templated. I feel like there also some developments wich are unlikely but that can be glossed over by this just being a fantasy novel of that style and the world is obviously so that's still good even though there issue's when comparing the logic of characters and their abilities to the original world.

Shinobi Fenrir

Lain_Walker
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58 Chs

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One_Azure
One_AzureLv1

But I'm glad that you're writing and that you enjoy it👍keep up the good work Author 💪 I know writing is hard especially with harsh criticism ❤️

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I am not a fan of the inuzuka clan but this one is awesome!!! Worth the read and I highly recommend this to everyone! Keep up the good work. 👍

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Grass_Cutter
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The book is awesome the character isn’t totally over powered and it’s not cliqche at all also love how the MC like a total my guy like he’s plenty relatable like if I learn the shadow clown jutsu I would totally skill class every day, the MC is a totally new person and isn’t some fucking sister or brother of naruto/ reincarnated into another characters person because that just gets rids of the whole world of what naruto is like but what you do is not quiche at all the character is new and is quite my type of guy (No homo) also love how the character doesn’t really have anything to abuse and how he got to where he is by hard work and how he trained all he could. Also love the no Sharigan for now, I would not be mad if he got sharigan but that’s like a famous body builder with the prime body for body building and he has a very fast metabolism but can build up muscle easier and trained all his life basically getting a upgrade and now he is part machine and has bacically a no u card at all times.

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Shameless reader here giving a book 5 star since its my favorite!! Hoping author looks at this review and immediately posts 100 more chapters at least, 200 hopefully

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kryllsama
kryllsamaLv5

its nice to have a mc that is caring but pls dont give hinata to the mc... as the story progress she will be the only anchor for naruto to be the person he is to become... the rest are fun to read and even if this novel will be premium, im willing to continue reading this.

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ElhitBunny
ElhitBunnyLv5

Well, what can i say? It's a novel based on Naruto, so i'm waiting and hoping it's going to be a good one. Until now i have seen many typos in the text which the Author could try to correct, these things are a huge turn off. Maybe when more chapters are released i will come to change this review. Here goes the little vit of help i can give the Author! (๑•̀ᄇ•́) ﻭ ✧

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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

DUMBASS.....make no mistake...this is dope.....so far its dope but why dumbass,,,cause writer is one....I just binged this **** and loved it...but I only found this by luck....who the hell puts a fanfic in MR? wrong genre.....author put it in FF....more people will love this ****............also build romance....keep it happy and fluff....MC must be one man army....god damn lone wolf......keep harem small just no NTR or shallow romance.........**: give MC some BS power to match up against eyes that manipulate reality....also......world travel would be dope

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McLoggernaut
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Awesome, keep updating plz!!!!!!!

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