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ElhitBunny
ElhitBunnyLv54yr
2020-02-27 01:18

Well, what can i say? It's a novel based on Naruto, so i'm waiting and hoping it's going to be a good one. Until now i have seen many typos in the text which the Author could try to correct, these things are a huge turn off. Maybe when more chapters are released i will come to change this review. Here goes the little vit of help i can give the Author! (๑•̀ᄇ•́) ﻭ ✧

Shinobi Fenrir

Lain_Walker
4.6
58 Chs

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Lain_Walker
Lain_WalkerAuthor

Thank you so much for the review 😁 I'm sorry that there's a lot of typo because I'm creating the drafts for my story in my phone. Usually some words like 'the' turns 'tge' and I sometimes forgot to capitalize 'i' but I'm trying to edit the chapters in my free time while I create new contents. Anyways thank you again for the review, I really appreciate it. 😁

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