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IDaGoat_Mypark
IDaGoat_MyparkLv155yr
2020-01-25 05:28

I'm sorry but I just can't read this.....he is such a coward. And don't even get me started on how basically everyone can read his fucking thoughts even though his a master of occumency. Like what the ****, It's not even funny anymore it's just plain stupid.

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Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

Pretty sure only 2 people can read his thoughts he hasn't fully mastered occulmeny ones a seer and the other is his ai

Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

Plus bro I wrote this from scratch in the past like 2 days just go with it lol I free handed this stuff and it's my first writing attempt so I'm not too bothered

Malcolm_Massey
Malcolm_MasseyLv14

Sure he needs a little more spine but it's really not that bad. A 1 star review because of some minor things is stupid. The writing quality and grammar is pretty good, chapter release rate is amazing so far and world/character development is really good.

Suriel8224
Suriel8224Lv5

馃槅

Raze_
Raze_Lv5

I disagree with you, the novel is desperately lacking both commas and apostrophes, alongside the couple misspelled words in need of correction. In the end, if I were to rate this book it'd be a 1.5/5 stars, and if the grammar is fixed it might go to 2.5/5 stars.

Malcolm_Massey:Sure he needs a little more spine but it's really not that bad. A 1 star review because of some minor things is stupid. The writing quality and grammar is pretty good, chapter release rate is amazing so far and world/character development is really good.
systemguy
systemguyLv3

Ageee

Commonnerfer
CommonnerferLv4

Grammar nazi

Raze_:I disagree with you, the novel is desperately lacking both commas and apostrophes, alongside the couple misspelled words in need of correction. In the end, if I were to rate this book it'd be a 1.5/5 stars, and if the grammar is fixed it might go to 2.5/5 stars.
Anthurs
AnthursLv14

im currently on 300+ in it and ive got to say for some one who could not even be bothered to take the time and read past the first 10 chapters u dont actually know anything about the story so far he is not a coward at all he just wants to have fun it actually picks up quite a bit later on altho u would have to read past the Harry Potter world to get their

Eins_Mensch
Eins_MenschLv14

i saw a similar setup just with another world and a far better MC, the funniest thing is that its a cultivation novel...

Ryan_Colman:Plus bro I wrote this from scratch in the past like 2 days just go with it lol I free handed this stuff and it's my first writing attempt so I'm not too bothered
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Blasphemer
BlasphemerLv5

The only good thing about this novel is the number of chapters and update frequency. Thats probably the only reason ppl are reading it. Now onto the story review,the mc is a guy that has a multiverse system that has a qq farm from the novel as well as the shadow hack.What does he do with his cheats? Nothing he doesn absolutely nothing,im not kidding when i say nothing,its not like those mc that dont abuse their system,the mc literally does nothing with his cheat.He doesnt get strong at all in the first 100 chapters which is the harry potter world.What he does do is basically suck hp's dick and his friends all story long.Whatever he worked hard to get,guess what ? He becomes a tooth fairy and gets it for everyone with a soul in the story.He is basically the cheat for the hp world for everyone.Guess since he doesnt abuse it for himself,he might as well let others abuse it for themselves right? Now that if that isnt infuriating then we get the whole lets reveal everything to everyone trope,yeah he shows everyone what makes him special etc,why bother with the mind arts if youre gonna reveal everything lol We spend 100 chapters of him basically being the same as any other character in hp probably even worst,he isnt smart,he isnt talented he has a lot of problems but his system can fix it but he doesnt do so heh. Now we have the next world,a world with vampires and werewolf in it.Guess what he does in such a dangerous world where he can be killed in a moment's notice? He doesnt get supernatural powers from his system oh no he doesnt capitalize on it at all.He chooses to stay human and play mysterious only to almost die from a accident. Pathetic,did i mention he is scared of needles too? Overall this novel has a useless mc that is a doormat for every single character in every world,probably gonna be a doormat for the characters in the next world too.He is already trying to abuse his system so his vampire crush's problem could be fix rofl.

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