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Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv105yr
2020-04-06 05:53

It was so good for the first 10-20 chapters then you begin to realize the MC is a complete spineless coward that sits around lazing around talking about how he wants some good life with no worries but it doesn't happen because he continues the running into dangerous situation for every little f****** thing but he's too f****** lazy and stupid to buy anything to make him more powerful so he doesn't have to worry about getting his ass kicked by something as pitiful as a troll And then you go to the twilight world radio acts like a f****** guy version of Bella swan being afraid of every little f****** thing oh and don't get me started on the harem it was pretty good in the earlier chapters because you can still hear the names but now there's so many in his harem that is still devolved to him just saying "I'm going out on a date with the girls" instead of individually saying their names because there's like 20 girls already in his harem and he's only been to like five worlds Not to mention the cultivation world's when it's just the author talking down to his readers constantly

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Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

oh and I forgot to post this on the review but the characters personalities from all these worlds he's have their personalities almost completely changed Example: the mc made a bet with Tsunade for a couple hundred million for her hand in marriage which I seriously doubt she would actually agree to even if it was for that much money and when she loses she pretty much has no qualms with being his husband even know that is not fit her personality at all oh and just so you know anybody that writes anything negative on his novel he'll end up probably talking s*** about you in his later chapters this is just a perfect example of a author that gets a successful novel and has their ego grow to the size of a fucking planet and believes they can do no wrong with their novel so they belittle anybody that has any sort of negative opinion on there novel

Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

Oh and sorry for my terrible grammar I am speaking into a microphone to write this review because I don't want to take the time out of my day and fix all my grammatical mistakes

Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

At this point I'm pretty sure your the only one left complaining about me lol. The rest have already figured out that I've written this whole thing in two months and I can at any point in time just go back to earlier chapters and do literally whatever I want and change it since this is basically a fun rough draft for my spare time. Nobody pays me. Noone tells me what to write. And if you don't like it feel free to read something else. If i want to complain or change how my characters act so be it it's my story.

Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

I'm probably going to drop this but I doesn't take away the fact that I can review your books to stop other people from reading this booking and getting disappointed like I did If you're doing it just for fun don't publish it if you can't take constructive criticism or any sort of criticism because you'll never make it as an author ever if you can't even take any sort of criticism and continue to bash all of your haters in the later chapters of your novel and I was actually somewhat enjoying in till you went to ATG world where all you were doing is talking down to people that criticized your book and yes people did stop complaining cuz most of the people that were complaining left which I'll probably do after I'm done reviewing it the only redeeming quality about your novel is a fact that you update a lot and even then it continued to deteriorate to the point where it's just childish jokes every single chapter oh and feeding the harem which has grown to the point where I don't even remember half the people that are in the f****** harem

Ryan_Colman:At this point I'm pretty sure your the only one left complaining about me lol. The rest have already figured out that I've written this whole thing in two months and I can at any point in time just go back to earlier chapters and do literally whatever I want and change it since this is basically a fun rough draft for my spare time. Nobody pays me. Noone tells me what to write. And if you don't like it feel free to read something else. If i want to complain or change how my characters act so be it it's my story.
Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

Lol anyone can post whatever they want any time they want it literally says what kind of book it is in the synopsis honestly just go read something else if you don't like it there's no rule stating I'm not allowed to post a not even half done book I just randomly decided to write for fun I literally just write on the fly so cya.

Primordial_Phoenix:I'm probably going to drop this but I doesn't take away the fact that I can review your books to stop other people from reading this booking and getting disappointed like I did If you're doing it just for fun don't publish it if you can't take constructive criticism or any sort of criticism because you'll never make it as an author ever if you can't even take any sort of criticism and continue to bash all of your haters in the later chapters of your novel and I was actually somewhat enjoying in till you went to ATG world where all you were doing is talking down to people that criticized your book and yes people did stop complaining cuz most of the people that were complaining left which I'll probably do after I'm done reviewing it the only redeeming quality about your novel is a fact that you update a lot and even then it continued to deteriorate to the point where it's just childish jokes every single chapter oh and feeding the harem which has grown to the point where I don't even remember half the people that are in the f****** harem
Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

LOL I never said you couldn't I was giving you constructive criticism to maybe help you improve I am telling you if you can't take constructive criticism or any sort of criticism you don't need to post on a public site any novels going to get hate and for you to try to invalidate everybody's criticism for something as nonsensical as you don't have to read your novel just because you can't take any criticism kind of makes you a ****y author and so what if you only do it for fun I do a lot of things for fun but it doesn't mean I can't get better at the things I do

Ryan_Colman:Lol anyone can post whatever they want any time they want it literally says what kind of book it is in the synopsis honestly just go read something else if you don't like it there's no rule stating I'm not allowed to post a not even half done book I just randomly decided to write for fun I literally just write on the fly so cya.
Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

Lol I do take constructive criticism quite well however who I was talking about where bossy little brats telling me what to do any not giving me anything at all but crappy responses which have literally all stopped now I give myself a round of applause for that but if your offended by what I write oh well lol I'll write and complain about whatever I want. I mean what do you expect for 2 months of work jeez.

Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

LOL you don't take constructive criticism very well at all I read a pretty good amount of comments in your comment section and some of them are actually really good and constructive but you f****** almost always reply back saying "if you don't like it leave" Or you mock them in your later chapters

Ryan_Colman:Lol I do take constructive criticism quite well however who I was talking about where bossy little brats telling me what to do any not giving me anything at all but crappy responses which have literally all stopped now I give myself a round of applause for that but if your offended by what I write oh well lol I'll write and complain about whatever I want. I mean what do you expect for 2 months of work jeez.
Primordial_Phoenix
Primordial_PhoenixLv10

LOL and quit calling people little brats dude quit acting like you're 30 f****** years old dude talking down to everybody when you're probably just barely in your mid-twenties acting like a child in almost every single one of your chapters so if anyone's a f****** Brat its you

Ryan_Colman:Lol I do take constructive criticism quite well however who I was talking about where bossy little brats telling me what to do any not giving me anything at all but crappy responses which have literally all stopped now I give myself a round of applause for that but if your offended by what I write oh well lol I'll write and complain about whatever I want. I mean what do you expect for 2 months of work jeez.
Ryan_Colman
Ryan_ColmanAuthor

LOL

Primordial_Phoenix:LOL and quit calling people little brats dude quit acting like you're 30 f****** years old dude talking down to everybody when you're probably just barely in your mid-twenties acting like a child in almost every single one of your chapters so if anyone's a f****** Brat its you
darklord_hades
darklord_hadesLv2

Lol

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Blasphemer
BlasphemerLv5

The only good thing about this novel is the number of chapters and update frequency. Thats probably the only reason ppl are reading it. Now onto the story review,the mc is a guy that has a multiverse system that has a qq farm from the novel as well as the shadow hack.What does he do with his cheats? Nothing he doesn absolutely nothing,im not kidding when i say nothing,its not like those mc that dont abuse their system,the mc literally does nothing with his cheat.He doesnt get strong at all in the first 100 chapters which is the harry potter world.What he does do is basically suck hp's dick and his friends all story long.Whatever he worked hard to get,guess what ? He becomes a tooth fairy and gets it for everyone with a soul in the story.He is basically the cheat for the hp world for everyone.Guess since he doesnt abuse it for himself,he might as well let others abuse it for themselves right? Now that if that isnt infuriating then we get the whole lets reveal everything to everyone trope,yeah he shows everyone what makes him special etc,why bother with the mind arts if youre gonna reveal everything lol We spend 100 chapters of him basically being the same as any other character in hp probably even worst,he isnt smart,he isnt talented he has a lot of problems but his system can fix it but he doesnt do so heh. Now we have the next world,a world with vampires and werewolf in it.Guess what he does in such a dangerous world where he can be killed in a moment's notice? He doesnt get supernatural powers from his system oh no he doesnt capitalize on it at all.He chooses to stay human and play mysterious only to almost die from a accident. Pathetic,did i mention he is scared of needles too? Overall this novel has a useless mc that is a doormat for every single character in every world,probably gonna be a doormat for the characters in the next world too.He is already trying to abuse his system so his vampire crush's problem could be fix rofl.

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