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Writing style is a train wreck (especially the first 5 five chapters; barely readable): punctuation problems, capitalization problems, too much use of "...", confusing use of braces and brackets (why use this symbols for dialogue/thoughts at all?), lacking dialogue tags or action beats (author writes like a screenwriting). I have no complains for grammar though. Instead of using symbols with unclear meaning (i.e. braces or brackets), just use the standard apostrophe or quotes for thoughts and dialogues. It is your job as an author to make sure that the readers understand whether it is the character's thoughts, mind communications, or dialogues by using the standard format. Do yourself a favor by researching more on proper novel dialogue writing (punctuation too!). Here are other elements I feel that you are lacking: 1. The sense of the MC! That's right, a human has 5 sense, not just sight. How does it smells like when MC arrived in the world? When he drink the water, how does it taste like? Are there any sounds of cracking flames and wave of heat when he got near the burning mountain? If you want to create extraordinary immersion, you should improve this point. 2. What was his name again? Ah, Sam! I almost forgot his name without you mentioning it at all at chapter 10 and only once at chapter 9. 3. World building (visuals) is quite lacking in the first few chaps. You need to improve from this question: What is the MC's first impression on seeing the new world? Just "dumbfounded" or "awestruck" is not enough. If you think you can give more visualization more on the world , don't be afraid on making an extra chapter just for it. What I say is that, imagine yourself in that world, what do you see and feel in your surrounding?
This novel has many different elements such as philosophy , leadership , alchemy, artifacts, high tech etc The problem is Dear author : you don't have to make a single mc experience them all and give us a bit of everything You could very well create many main characters with different backgrounds walking towards the very same goal as the mc Hope you consider my suggestion and tell me your opinion
Very good novel i like the many jokes and the swort of a pervert.ππππ‘πΊ
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Is a kind of weird story, I don't know. So far I will read it to see if I will love it later on. I love this kind of stuff but... I will follow up with the update.
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This is a great story. It starts out a little slow cause of all the technical stuff, but itβs really worth the read, and has really gotten really interesting. You canβt guess whatβs gonna happen next and it new and refreshing. I hope the author keep this tale going cause I canβt wait to see whatβs next.
A bit of a slow start it gets better then since twists and turns the concept is fairly interesting and the character has some room to grow.
My first ON will try my best not to screw it up. Synopsis: A young man dies by getting pushed in front of the train by a strange shadow. He awakens in the Nothingness were the Judge of all Gods takes interest in him because of the history the soul of the young man contains. He sends the young man out so he can find the protagonist's murderer while letting the protagonist live a new life in the era of the Three Kingdoms. Basically our MC will be traveling from Era to Era starting with the Three Kingdoms. He will be living under the Vikings, participate in the 100-year-old War between France and England and many more before he reaches his goal. The Cover was made by The_Kings_Author. Thank you for making it for me.
A Russian economics expert had been making money through long-short strategies during the Russia-Ukraine war. Despite his economic success, he felt deep regret about Russia's historical mistakes. He wrote on his blog that "Russia has been on the wrong path since the 19th century," critically analyzing Russia's history. Then, remarkably, he traveled back in time to 1891 and found himself in the body of Russian Crown Prince Nicholas II during his visit to Japan.
Waking up inside the ruins of an orphanage, Alexander finds himself chained and sold to slavery. A modern metallurgist, trapped in ancient times, watch as he tries to play with the cards fate dealt him. He will make plate armor, invent paper, build roads, teach governance and many more, as he tries to carve a place for himself. But how can such things not attract jealous eyes? The naval superpower- Cantagena, The unstoppable army of- Exolas, The superpower of the east- Adhania, The mercantile confederation- Sybarsis, The religious fanatics- Iyizarid, And the ever-present- Barbarians of the Barren Forrest, All want something from each other. In this ocean of sharks, follow a small carp as it struggles to leap through the dragon gate and establish a dynasty to outlast them all. The cover is not mine. If you are the owner of this cover, comment and I will remove it.
In the chaotic era of the Three Kingdoms, where warlords vie for supremacy and kingdoms rise and fall, a modern soul awakens in the body of the infamous LΓΌ Buβthe peerless warrior known as the Flying General. Armed with a mysterious system that grants him unparalleled power and strategic insight, the reincarnated LΓΌ Bu is determined to rewrite his story. This time, he will not be the reckless warrior manipulated by others nor the traitor scorned by history. Instead, he will unite the fractured land under his banner, carving a legacy that rivals even the greatest legends of his time. Through cunning strategy, ruthless ambition, and overwhelming strength, LΓΌ Bu conquers villages, crushes rebellions, and builds alliances. Along the way, he grapples with the weight of his new identity, the challenges of loyalty, and the complexities of navigating a world filled with treachery and ambition. But as LΓΌ Bu rises to power, the system reveals that his greatest challenge lies not only in uniting the land but in facing forces that threaten the very fabric of history. Will he succeed in forging a new destiny, or will he fall victim to the same fate that history once dictated? --- Note: This novel is a fanfiction inspired by the myth and historical legends of the Three Kingdoms period in China. It reimagines the life of LΓΌ Bu through the lens of reincarnation and an alternate timeline, blending historical elements with fantasy and action. (Book Cover from: Three Kingdoms: Live as Lu Bu)
Jarvis Maximus has awoken on an unknown continent on Earth though in this universe Earth was different as leaders for each nation was different from the ones in reality
Two cities, in rivalry since the beginning of their existence. One overpowered by the wealthy and the other by the less fortunate. Love, money, stealing, and death, all come in a package with a bow named Inko Petrov. When she has the people who love her by her side, she's more than unstoppable. Read Trap City to venture into a world of fight, love, and tears as Inko works her way through the ranks.
Konrad Schuster, an above average high school student, suddenly finds himself transported to a strange new world filled with swords and magic, tasked with continuing the legacy of the Third Reich (WW2 Germany) after he touched his Grandfather's old German military uniform! He discovers a unique power that allows him to convert souls into source points. Using this power, Konrad can create anything he wants by simply imagining it! Soldiers! Guns! Tanks! Fighter Jets! Nuclear Bombs! As he explores this magical world, he must hunt and kill to expand his army and crush the locals with his overwhelming technological advantage! But danger is never far away, and Konrad must be cautious. He knows little about this world, and every decision he makes has consequences. He must use his technological superiority to his greatest advantage! WHAT TO EXPECT: A highly competent ruthless protagonist that acts and behaves like a proper general. He becomes intimidating, commanding and doesn't blink if he needs to get his hands dirty. He is a true evil protagonist. I hate beta and "nice" MC with a passion, so he is the exact opposite. TRIGGER WARNING: RACISM AND DISCRIMINATION (Against Demi-Humans) I DO NOT SUPPORT NAZIS Please don't take any views in my novel seriously, I just wrote this for fun, I don't support any Nazi ideals and behaviours. I just like the idea of a WW2 German army using modern equipment in a fantasy world. *Chapters* Chapters will be all over 1000 words. This is a FAST-PACED novel. Cover: Thanks N0xiety for the AI image!
Since Lady Goddess granted me a second life, I will conquer this new world and transform it into a utopia! Authorβs note: This is a story of kingdom building and conquest. A reincarnated person uses his knowledge to develop weapons and develop his nation in a world similar to Earth, albeit with a fantasy twist. The fantasy element is relatively weak in combat but is prevalent in production, taming, and mechanics. So there wonβt be one-man armies, or sword saints and heroes.