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Writing style is a train wreck (especially the first 5 five chapters; barely readable): punctuation problems, capitalization problems, too much use of "...", confusing use of braces and brackets (why use this symbols for dialogue/thoughts at all?), lacking dialogue tags or action beats (author writes like a screenwriting). I have no complains for grammar though. Instead of using symbols with unclear meaning (i.e. braces or brackets), just use the standard apostrophe or quotes for thoughts and dialogues. It is your job as an author to make sure that the readers understand whether it is the character's thoughts, mind communications, or dialogues by using the standard format. Do yourself a favor by researching more on proper novel dialogue writing (punctuation too!). Here are other elements I feel that you are lacking: 1. The sense of the MC! That's right, a human has 5 sense, not just sight. How does it smells like when MC arrived in the world? When he drink the water, how does it taste like? Are there any sounds of cracking flames and wave of heat when he got near the burning mountain? If you want to create extraordinary immersion, you should improve this point. 2. What was his name again? Ah, Sam! I almost forgot his name without you mentioning it at all at chapter 10 and only once at chapter 9. 3. World building (visuals) is quite lacking in the first few chaps. You need to improve from this question: What is the MC's first impression on seeing the new world? Just "dumbfounded" or "awestruck" is not enough. If you think you can give more visualization more on the world , don't be afraid on making an extra chapter just for it. What I say is that, imagine yourself in that world, what do you see and feel in your surrounding?
This novel has many different elements such as philosophy , leadership , alchemy, artifacts, high tech etc The problem is Dear author : you don't have to make a single mc experience them all and give us a bit of everything You could very well create many main characters with different backgrounds walking towards the very same goal as the mc Hope you consider my suggestion and tell me your opinion
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Is a kind of weird story, I don't know. So far I will read it to see if I will love it later on. I love this kind of stuff but... I will follow up with the update.
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This is a great story. It starts out a little slow cause of all the technical stuff, but it鈥檚 really worth the read, and has really gotten really interesting. You can鈥檛 guess what鈥檚 gonna happen next and it new and refreshing. I hope the author keep this tale going cause I can鈥檛 wait to see what鈥檚 next.
A bit of a slow start it gets better then since twists and turns the concept is fairly interesting and the character has some room to grow.
A Girl who traped in to beast world
Year Date March 30, 2030 On a seemingly normal day across all countries on the face of the earth. A sudden eruption of the crust and a sudden appearance of void rifts-like holes appeared. It was the start of ULTIMA CHANGE, soon monsters arise from those rifts. And it was soon followed by bloodshed. In nearly 5 months 1 hundred million have already perished from the monsters. And with that, countries all over the world have formed their Safe Zones. Building walls that might secure them from monsters. And with the appearance of monsters also the appearance of people with strange powers and abilities.
The human race is weak ? Can she only conquer a meager fragment of the universe? Are human geniuses rubbish compared to ordinary people of other races? I will reverse this ratio. Any human child will be comparable to the best geniuses of any race, while any human will have the capacity to wipe out entire civilizations. From the moment I the Soul King is born, the human race is destined to fight across the universe for one day to stand on top of thousands of races! I don't know who the artist is, if they want I can remove the cover at any time. Currently on hiatus because I'd like to get it published in a publishing house. In the meantime I write this: https://www.webnovel.com/book/mercenary-system-i-can-increase-innate-potential-!_24843002705961105 Go have a look, I guarantee you won't be disappointed! haha (except for the number of chapters, but that will require a little patience ;)) If you like the story, don't hesitate to make a small donation of 2/3euros on my paypal. The student in me would be very grateful haha --> https://www.paypal.me/SoulKingSystem
What happens when your fated mate is an entity of death? You might find that you love them through many lifetimes. Or never meet them at all. Come enjoy this story of love and war as Sirius a vampire with the blood of Loki and a beast in his veins and Saoirse his wife, a werewolf continue their journey after their death as reincarnated beings. This is the second book in the series but it can be read non- chronologically. the first is more like a prologue. Culminating ultimately with Ragnarok this is a tale of origins of gods and untold stories of realms not just Asgard but from the perspective of creatures of death. Should Odin really be king and is hell really a bad place? ***be sure to save my other two books in this series! this will be a 4 book series with a 5th book grand finale. this is not a sequel the first 4 can be read in any order and book 1 is complete. the finale will be the only one you should read after the other 4 because all characters will come together. It鈥檚 going to be epic!**
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