For a guy who was apathetic even when he's sentenced to death became a warm goody good guy as soon as he play the game? what's up with flirting around with all these npc? its like he's hitting on to every woman he comes across.. MCs character can change, but shouldn't there be a transition period !here it happened instantaneously. what's wrong with MC to drop his advantages (dude is flame talent but won't train it?? )There's these random characters popping up without propet introduction too. plus what's wrong with his levels? isn't the prisoners supposed to be beta players !how come there are others with higher levels ! too many inconsistencies for me. i think it's not my cup of tea. l did liked the concept though. i don't know whether the story gets better in further chapters(i only read up to 23, so this can be considered only as a first impression). nice attempt bro. really appreciate your efforts.
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Nix is the apex fire mage in Colonial, he just isn't that way at the start. I've been writing this for a year, what you read covers the first week. Geez dude... Why long time readers don't review and a fly-by does is beyond me.
And while you're at it, check out Blackbird. :P
😁 I wrote, basically because it was way too different from my expectay.. guess i have to give a 2nd try
BotwaCazador:Nix is the apex fire mage in Colonial, he just isn't that way at the start. I've been writing this for a year, what you read covers the first week. Geez dude... Why long time readers don't review and a fly-by does is beyond me.
It's understandable though. I am at chapter 30 and have more or less the same impression. His initial character introduction was showing a completely different side then how he behaves ingame. So far there was barely any descriptions of the world around him or even the people he met. He instantly travels between several continents, suddenly is grouped up with people without any introduction of those. For me this is an example of a way to fast pace with to less information explanation, which keeps me from feeling immersed in the story. At this point I'm actually searching for another novel to read. If the whole novel is like this it's certainly not my cup of tee. According to your reply it seems it will get better at some point. If this is the case maybe a self review explaining that would be helpful. If you care about that at all at this time since it's already complete.
BotwaCazador:Nix is the apex fire mage in Colonial, he just isn't that way at the start. I've been writing this for a year, what you read covers the first week. Geez dude... Why long time readers don't review and a fly-by does is beyond me.
No worries. If it's not your cup of tea then thanks for giving it a try. Happy trails...
xFKratos:It's understandable though. I am at chapter 30 and have more or less the same impression. His initial character introduction was showing a completely different side then how he behaves ingame. So far there was barely any descriptions of the world around him or even the people he met. He instantly travels between several continents, suddenly is grouped up with people without any introduction of those. For me this is an example of a way to fast pace with to less information explanation, which keeps me from feeling immersed in the story. At this point I'm actually searching for another novel to read. If the whole novel is like this it's certainly not my cup of tee. According to your reply it seems it will get better at some point. If this is the case maybe a self review explaining that would be helpful. If you care about that at all at this time since it's already complete.
