Overall, the book has an overwhelming sense of self. This isn’t a story that follows every other trope or timeline, but one that follows its own path. Not only that, the story is consistent and makes sense, the foreshadowing is used correctly, the characters have shown steady, fluid development, and the world is created well. 5/5 stars deserved. This could be published as a paperback eventually as a bestseller if wanted.
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He is very ruthless, apart from his family and some friends he doesnt care about anyone's life. A person or a child can die in front of him and he wont care, he tortured a lot of people to make them spill secrets. As long as the person is not his family or one of his 4 friends they can die and he wont care. It's really good in my opinion. Moreover he constantly focus on becoming stronger and researching magic, thats what he totally and only focus about, getting stronger.
Sigh. This is not even funny anymore. With all the things he experienced you'd figure that he'd be much more mature now. He even found peace when he for the first time experience death. And here we get, a frustrated petulant little b*tch who has anger issues. Not gonna lie i was really hooked at the start and thought this story is going to be big with all the possible worlds the MC may travel into. Instead here we are, stuck in the sh*tty world he is now, scared and dont want to die because he felt warmth for the first time. How laughable, what happened to his tempered Will? The one made him have a strength to commit suicide? I expected to much from this novel yet was betrayed. Dropping this novel.
I don’t support your opinion. The mind is a fickle place that can change given the environment one is placed in. Also, lith is taking a turn again in the most recent chapters with the ending of the 300 chapter long story arc so things are getting interesting once again.
Ok so. If you don't like, then leave.