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Immortal_Potato
Immortal_PotatoLv66yr
2019-01-31 11:09

The character is terribly disappointing and beyond pathetic. Better to rewrite the. Try to fix his inconsistent mess of a “personality”. Author keeps making excuses that he is a “child” and all children “innately need friends”. That’s a load of nonsense. Some level 4 bots trying to boost the ratings.

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CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

Humans are social creatures

CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

And his personality is inconsistent, because he has a fickle personality.

Immortal_Potato
Immortal_PotatoLv6

But not all seek social interaction. Also, it is not a valid reason or justification for his actions.

CrossArk:Humans are social creatures
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

Yessir, and I know that, my plan is to slowly make MC become a social outcast. His betrayal by Harry,(if you read that far) will affect him, and even though it seems as though he has forgiven Harry... I’ll leave it at a cliff hanger.

Immortal_Potato:But not all seek social interaction. Also, it is not a valid reason or justification for his actions.
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

And I’m not saying that all children are social, (that would be child-ist) I’m just saying that SOME are, (although it did sound like I was saying all children.) plus, from the first chapter, I had written Mc to be a social child,(he is very friendly with the neighbors remember?)

Immortal_Potato:But not all seek social interaction. Also, it is not a valid reason or justification for his actions.
Skepparn
SkepparnLv14

Slowly changing personality is the worst decision you could ever make if the start mc is retarded lmao Nobody would want to read past the retarded part to get to the half assed part if they had anything else to do or anything else to read which I do Dropped in less than 10chapters but I won’t leave a bad review like I was planning cause the story has potential if you get your head out of your ass and realize that a ****ty mc makes a ****ty story enough said...

CrossArk:Yessir, and I know that, my plan is to slowly make MC become a social outcast. His betrayal by Harry,(if you read that far) will affect him, and even though it seems as though he has forgiven Harry... I’ll leave it at a cliff hanger.
Skepparn
SkepparnLv14

Slowly changing personality is the worst decision you could ever make if the start mc is retarded lmao Nobody would want to read past the retarded part to get to the half assed part if they had anything else to do or anything else to read which I do Dropped in less than 10chapters but I won’t leave a bad review like I was planning cause the story has potential if you get your head out of your ass and realize that a ****ty mc makes a ****ty story enough said...

CrossArk:Yessir, and I know that, my plan is to slowly make MC become a social outcast. His betrayal by Harry,(if you read that far) will affect him, and even though it seems as though he has forgiven Harry... I’ll leave it at a cliff hanger.
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

Lmao *internally cries because he can’t really deny a thing

Skepparn:Slowly changing personality is the worst decision you could ever make if the start mc is retarded lmao Nobody would want to read past the retarded part to get to the half assed part if they had anything else to do or anything else to read which I do Dropped in less than 10chapters but I won’t leave a bad review like I was planning cause the story has potential if you get your head out of your ass and realize that a ****ty mc makes a ****ty story enough said...
Skepparn
SkepparnLv14

Your story has potential so just work out the stuff that readers don’t like and you’ll be golden

CrossArk:Lmao *internally cries because he can’t really deny a thing
Shadewind
ShadewindLv6

Dude you are interesting...! So will Mc get better and when. Is it harem or single lover. As I haven't read your strory I have to ask this as It will decide my interest to read your story or not

CrossArk:Lmao *internally cries because he can’t really deny a thing
Skepparn
SkepparnLv14

I realized that I was kinda *cough* very harsh with that, what I mean after having gone back to read 160ch of the story is that, mc is stupid and from what he's had to experience he's still too naive

CrossArk:Lmao *internally cries because he can’t really deny a thing
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

Lol

Skepparn:I realized that I was kinda *cough* very harsh with that, what I mean after having gone back to read 160ch of the story is that, mc is stupid and from what he's had to experience he's still too naive
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