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Yanorth
YanorthLv146yr
2019-01-31 19:15

Ok, I'm really disappointment, the author say that the novel is slow paced but is totally rushed, in the first volume he just show the main events that happened in the original book but now have another person with the trio, the mc read a lot but don't really show nothing that he is really learning, in the fight against voldy he just accepted the dark magic. This first volume could have more than 40 chapters easily but the author didn't show the rest of the year, is like show 20 days and the rest of the year was just gone.

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Yanorth
YanorthLv14

Oh I'm did forgot to mention about the tentative of the author for the mc be a outcast/anti hero/ evil. Forced and really lame. Raven, mc totally invisible, the curse of the vordy that is changing his personality, dude this was so forced and predictable

CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

You are wrong, he isn’t anti hero? And I made the story faster paced because everyone was complaining.

Yanorth:Oh I'm did forgot to mention about the tentative of the author for the mc be a outcast/anti hero/ evil. Forced and really lame. Raven, mc totally invisible, the curse of the vordy that is changing his personality, dude this was so forced and predictable
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

And the slow part of the novel was the character development

Yanorth:Oh I'm did forgot to mention about the tentative of the author for the mc be a outcast/anti hero/ evil. Forced and really lame. Raven, mc totally invisible, the curse of the vordy that is changing his personality, dude this was so forced and predictable
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

And he didn’t accept the dark magic, he resisted it. Isn’t it mind possession?

Yanorth:Oh I'm did forgot to mention about the tentative of the author for the mc be a outcast/anti hero/ evil. Forced and really lame. Raven, mc totally invisible, the curse of the vordy that is changing his personality, dude this was so forced and predictable
CrossArk
CrossArkAuthor

In between the chapters, there are time skips.

Yanorth:Oh I'm did forgot to mention about the tentative of the author for the mc be a outcast/anti hero/ evil. Forced and really lame. Raven, mc totally invisible, the curse of the vordy that is changing his personality, dude this was so forced and predictable
Legendary_Otaku
Legendary_OtakuLv12

Bro, he wrote very lengthy chapters, when compare other sh*t out there. And with MC not being born with reincarnation (based on story we have up to now) what has been done is really great. And also author-san, don't listen to comments. If you can have new inspiration from comments then that other issue. But don't change your original story just based on some comments.

HellfireLynx
HellfireLynxLv4

Just so you know just because it better doesn’t mean it’s good. Its like 2 people punched you and one punches you softer then the first, it’s better but you still got punched.

Legendary_Otaku: Bro, he wrote very lengthy chapters, when compare other sh*t out there. And with MC not being born with reincarnation (based on story we have up to now) what has been done is really great. And also author-san, don't listen to comments. If you can have new inspiration from comments then that other issue. But don't change your original story just based on some comments.
reader_52565
reader_52565Lv5

But isn't the story good?

HellfireLynx:Just so you know just because it better doesn’t mean it’s good. Its like 2 people punched you and one punches you softer then the first, it’s better but you still got punched.
HellfireLynx
HellfireLynxLv4

I'm not here to say whether the story is good or not. I'm just saying that because a novel is better or "longer" than others, doesn't mean it's good or it gets a free pass to criticism. it's like saying if I write longer essays I automatically get a better grade. As for this novel, I enjoyed the beginning but after the vampire part, the harem/fan service/romance took to much room so I got bored and stopped.

reader_52565:But isn't the story good?
reader_52565
reader_52565Lv5

Ahh.. i see..is what you are saying it is lengthy but the plot is not to your taste.. i am not going to judge, different people different opinion.. well sorry to hear that.. PFFT (*trying to hold my laugh*) btw when you said the vampire part i dont remember any vampire hehe..(a little mix up i see)

HellfireLynx:I'm not here to say whether the story is good or not. I'm just saying that because a novel is better or "longer" than others, doesn't mean it's good or it gets a free pass to criticism. it's like saying if I write longer essays I automatically get a better grade. As for this novel, I enjoyed the beginning but after the vampire part, the harem/fan service/romance took to much room so I got bored and stopped.
HellfireLynx
HellfireLynxLv4

... well, so I got the book mixed up with "Harry Potter and the Prince of Slytherin". So forget the whole review part. Thanks for pointing that out.

reader_52565:Ahh.. i see..is what you are saying it is lengthy but the plot is not to your taste.. i am not going to judge, different people different opinion.. well sorry to hear that.. PFFT (*trying to hold my laugh*) btw when you said the vampire part i dont remember any vampire hehe..(a little mix up i see)
reader_52565
reader_52565Lv5

Haha no problem I almost did the same thing until i realized the author's name

HellfireLynx:... well, so I got the book mixed up with "Harry Potter and the Prince of Slytherin". So forget the whole review part. Thanks for pointing that out.
Xerathyon
XerathyonLv5

K

Chunchunmaru_sama
Chunchunmaru_samaLv6

Gay mc? I saw the tags....

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