Skepparn

is there any point in this if the mc simply could read sigrains mind and ultears minds to solve this plot point like instantly witohut all this trash?

didn't you make a big deal out of how the mc didn't ever leave his pub so why did he casually leave it for some ice cream? Screams forced plot progression

Wtf s beer in my country costs atleast 15$ alone

You write fight scenes well but you really have to choose which battles to drag put cause this is just not one that he should be dragging out and every time he chooses not to end this battle is another retard alert on this mc

Is there even any point for the mc to always drag out every single fight? I could understand if he was alone but while protecting people?

Dropping tvis if it’s going to become a trap story…

was this supposed to be a full chapter or was something cropped out by mistake?

How come we never get to see Jiraiya actually fight for real, it's always someone else and him cleaning up

Seriously? Is he trying to get killed or caught?

Gotta ask why is the luke so slow learning in the force? In canon he literally went from untrained not knowing about the force to being able to duel vader decently well in a few years of training alone with he only had obi wan and yoda teaching him for a super short time