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Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor5yr
2019-02-02 04:44

As the author: this story is my first attempt at a system story. It moves a little slower than I care for, but has a very well thought out world, characters and plot. The reader follows Joseph as he learns magic at an obsessive level, while dealing with drama from his only friend Stella, and his father who is a slave Master. The world throws curve balls at him, to derail his carefully detailed plans. But he will eventually persevere and become the Mage King.

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DaoistZoid
DaoistZoidLv15

Romance, harem or something?

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

It is not romantic or harem. Joseph learns magic and becomes awesome.

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

It is not romantic or harem. Joseph learns magic and becomes awesome.

DaoistZoid:Romance, harem or something?
SoberanoSinNombre
SoberanoSinNombreLv5

The tags say gay and romance. This is yaoi ? 🤢

Sdrawkcab:It is not romantic or harem. Joseph learns magic and becomes awesome.
Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

No. I do not know why I have these tags. I don't know how to remove them either.

SoberanoSinNombre:The tags say gay and romance. This is yaoi ? 🤢
Pannath
PannathLv13

When the author writes a review for his own work in progress and doesn't give himself full stars... Doesn't a higher star rating help attract readers who haven't read it yet?

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

When I first made this review, I was unsure on how to write a story with a system element. I have not really read a lot of stories with a system to base my own concepts off of. As I have written more of this story, my confidence has risen, but I feel that all authors have room for improvement. Whether people read my story or not, should be based off of what they want, not just me trying to shove it down their throats. I appreciate your comments and concerns.

Pannath:When the author writes a review for his own work in progress and doesn't give himself full stars... Doesn't a higher star rating help attract readers who haven't read it yet?
senkii
senkiiLv6

like

Pannath:When the author writes a review for his own work in progress and doesn't give himself full stars... Doesn't a higher star rating help attract readers who haven't read it yet?
Devilcore
DevilcoreLv4

i find this story amazing i want to thank you for writing it , i love the system actually having a personality i love the hard work the mc puts in learning things .im all caught up and just loving every day i check to see a new chapter i highly recommend this story. i just wish you had a discord

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

I am on discord, it's Sdrawkcab server. Not many people are on it, if you join, you may be the only one other than me lol

Devilcore:i find this story amazing i want to thank you for writing it , i love the system actually having a personality i love the hard work the mc puts in learning things .im all caught up and just loving every day i check to see a new chapter i highly recommend this story. i just wish you had a discord
Devilcore
DevilcoreLv4

do you have a link posted somewhere?

Sdrawkcab:I am on discord, it's Sdrawkcab server. Not many people are on it, if you join, you may be the only one other than me lol
Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

Not really. I should probably do that. Thanks 😊

Devilcore:do you have a link posted somewhere?
Devilcore
DevilcoreLv4

now im excited :D

Sdrawkcab:Not really. I should probably do that. Thanks 😊
Devilcore
DevilcoreLv4

just letting you know without the number behind discord wont let you add iv tried Sdrawkcab T-T

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

Thanks! I'll fix that.

Devilcore:just letting you know without the number behind discord wont let you add iv tried Sdrawkcab T-T
dwvande
dwvandeLv14

I have to ask- is your name an allusion to Piers Anthony?

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

No, but my husband and one of my three boys loves his work.

dwvande:I have to ask- is your name an allusion to Piers Anthony?
GraniteGrizz
GraniteGrizzLv14

I can't wait for your next work. Thank you for Joseph and Stella!

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

You are very welcome! Thank you for reading!

GraniteGrizz:I can't wait for your next work. Thank you for Joseph and Stella!
Reader_Harris
Reader_HarrisLv10

Have you any other titles?

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Saarlink
SaarlinkLv5

This is a book that keeps making me almost stop reading then drawing me back in until the next thing that makes me want to stop reading. Very early we are introduced to happy slaves who are just so happy to be slaves... yea almost dropped it right there but thought I would give it a bit more time as it was so early in the book. The magic system was interesting and I started to like the characters. Then comes the child rape. Like 3 different times in not many chapters. Once was jarring, three times was when I should have stopped. Especially as it changed at least one of the characters so much that they are now fairly unlikeable. But I enjoyed the magic system and wanted to see what would happen with it if nothing else. Maybe this was just a one off dark beginning set up that would never come again? Then comes the stupidest king to ever live. Okay sure, I thought, he is a puppet of the real people in charge of the kingdom. Oh wait no, a few chapters later we learn that he is actually smart and in charge. Really? So smart that he signs the dumbest and most lopsided contract I have ever seen? Would you trust a complete stranger you have never met before and sign a life or death contract with them without even reading said contract? Now I am left bored to tears by all the politics and magic is so far from the story I don't even know when it is coming back. I am done. It is a good premise and the world seems like it could be fun but the author REALLY needs to work on being more stable. There are too many changes to the kind of story being told, the tone, and so on.

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