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Kris_Watson
Kris_WatsonLv65yr
2019-04-12 08:58

My new review as of chapter 93. Love both Joseph the MC and Stella the FL. In-universe Joseph has proclaimed there will be no harem and not even a full year has past since the story started so Joseph is still 7. The magic system is very well-defined and the Joseph has taken a while to accumulate his power to this point meaning the story for many will have a slow start. He has been given a system by his father but the author isn't abusing it to make him overpowered. He is still working for his goal on his own. His system even remarked that it appreciated someone not trying to make a harem after being given the system. The system does have some occasional smack talk and isn't used as a crutch for filling plot holes. This is my favorite original novel on this site so far. The story has been incredibly consistent so even if it's not believable with elements like magic and a system the story itself is written well so you can believe the people in it would respond the way they do. Also even though he gets memories of previous lives, Joseph maintains his self unlike a lot of other stories where the person in the story is replaced by his former lives. He even struggles with accepting all of the past lives information and mental traumas for some chapters in order to stay himself on purpose.

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Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

Thanks!

ThrustThunder
ThrustThunderLv6

The Author has the system congratulate a 7 year old for not having a harem? And so far the one word that everyone has used to describe this novel is "Slow". Would you say this is more of a slice of life story than an action one?

Kris_Watson
Kris_WatsonLv6

The system graduates him because he has no desire to because the system is tired of being used for stupid reasons. The systems goal is to be attached to powerful hosts and it helps them become more powerful to achieve it's own goals. Still no word on the exact goal of the system. Also much of this series feels slice of life yes. The main interactions are between the mc and fl but later on he gets several other people important to him. Only a few chapters are from the fl perspective so multiple pov is used extremely light. So far in 100 chapters only 4 or 5 chapters have Stella's perspective.

ThrustThunder:The Author has the system congratulate a 7 year old for not having a harem? And so far the one word that everyone has used to describe this novel is "Slow". Would you say this is more of a slice of life story than an action one?
FraulC
FraulCLv14

Wait, so almost a 100 chapters in and it's only been a year with the story? I haven't read it yet, but it seems slow paced for me. I think I'll wait for a lot more before reading. Thanks for the review.

FraulC
FraulCLv14

Wait, so almost a 100 chapters in and it's only been a year with the story? I haven't read it yet, but it seems slow paced for me. I think I'll wait for a lot more before reading. Thanks for the review.

Jazzz
JazzzLv4

Nice thoughts

Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

There are moments of action, but this story, in no way compares to my Evolutionary series. I intended for this story to build much slower, in order to have a sense of accomplishment when the mc actually does gain immense powers. I like to think of it as a slow moving ball that gets faster and faster as it rolls down a hill.

ThrustThunder:The Author has the system congratulate a 7 year old for not having a harem? And so far the one word that everyone has used to describe this novel is "Slow". Would you say this is more of a slice of life story than an action one?
ThrustThunder
ThrustThunderLv6

Hey, thanks for responding! I read your Novel all the way up til the Slave girl forced her way into the Harem and realized all the Reviews I had read were speaking the truth. I'm sure those who enjoy reading your novel are quite happy with your slow pace and enthusiastically abundant descriptions of minutia, but it's regretfully not for me. Good luck in your future endeavors!

Sdrawkcab:There are moments of action, but this story, in no way compares to my Evolutionary series. I intended for this story to build much slower, in order to have a sense of accomplishment when the mc actually does gain immense powers. I like to think of it as a slow moving ball that gets faster and faster as it rolls down a hill.
Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

My evolutionary series is much faster paced. I understand that this story is too slow, what I don't understand is, what harem are you talking about? People keep referencing that this story has a harem, but the mc only has one love interest, granted they are way too young to call her that yet, but I'm setting it up for that after a time skip.

ThrustThunder:Hey, thanks for responding! I read your Novel all the way up til the Slave girl forced her way into the Harem and realized all the Reviews I had read were speaking the truth. I'm sure those who enjoy reading your novel are quite happy with your slow pace and enthusiastically abundant descriptions of minutia, but it's regretfully not for me. Good luck in your future endeavors!
PixelKid
PixelKidLv6

so there will be timeskip in later chapter?~ thank god! xD

Sdrawkcab:My evolutionary series is much faster paced. I understand that this story is too slow, what I don't understand is, what harem are you talking about? People keep referencing that this story has a harem, but the mc only has one love interest, granted they are way too young to call her that yet, but I'm setting it up for that after a time skip.
Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

Yes, there will definitely be a time skip, and I have moved it forward, from where I had intended to have it, because of the wishes of my readers

PixelKid:so there will be timeskip in later chapter?~ thank god! xD
ThrustThunder
ThrustThunderLv6

The "Harem" that people are referring to in this context is more referencing the Creative Decisions and Ideas behind how the Author has the MC interact with Females characters. It's a reader's rejection of how much FL pull from the main story lines and warp everything to be about themselves in a gravitational well of mediocrity and contrivance. I personally dropped because the FL has had more screen time by that point then almost any other character purely for the fact she was female, and that you were going to make her a Harem member not because she was an interesting person, but because she was a ~She~. She was injected into the story and immediately the scene became about who she was, where she came from and how interested the MC was in her, and the cost of every other part of the narrative flow. Then when the MC finally moves along to continue the Magical Adventure we all signed up for, the plot once again came to a screeching halt so an entire chapter could be dedicated to explaining why she decided to give up her old life and cling to the 7 year old MC's ankles for no reason other then *She's Going To Be A Harem Member*. Readers are smart, they know the signs of a terrible Harem forming on the horizon. You, yourself have even posted that you fully intend to go that route in the future. We've been burned too many times from too many Hack Writers on this site to stick around after seeing the dreaded "Harem Tag" get added to a story. Just being honest with you. Your story is yours, and has already been written far beyond where I am planning to go. So keep the course you feel is right for you. Just be aware that not all stories are for all people and try to keep the readers you do have happy.

Sdrawkcab:My evolutionary series is much faster paced. I understand that this story is too slow, what I don't understand is, what harem are you talking about? People keep referencing that this story has a harem, but the mc only has one love interest, granted they are way too young to call her that yet, but I'm setting it up for that after a time skip.
Sdrawkcab
SdrawkcabAuthor

Thank you, this makes more sense, as my understanding of Harem was that there would be several female characters in competition with the main male lead for romantic reasons. Your reasons for not liking the story are founded and I greatly appreciate you taking the time to explain them to me. Thank you.

ThrustThunder:The "Harem" that people are referring to in this context is more referencing the Creative Decisions and Ideas behind how the Author has the MC interact with Females characters. It's a reader's rejection of how much FL pull from the main story lines and warp everything to be about themselves in a gravitational well of mediocrity and contrivance. I personally dropped because the FL has had more screen time by that point then almost any other character purely for the fact she was female, and that you were going to make her a Harem member not because she was an interesting person, but because she was a ~She~. She was injected into the story and immediately the scene became about who she was, where she came from and how interested the MC was in her, and the cost of every other part of the narrative flow. Then when the MC finally moves along to continue the Magical Adventure we all signed up for, the plot once again came to a screeching halt so an entire chapter could be dedicated to explaining why she decided to give up her old life and cling to the 7 year old MC's ankles for no reason other then *She's Going To Be A Harem Member*. Readers are smart, they know the signs of a terrible Harem forming on the horizon. You, yourself have even posted that you fully intend to go that route in the future. We've been burned too many times from too many Hack Writers on this site to stick around after seeing the dreaded "Harem Tag" get added to a story. Just being honest with you. Your story is yours, and has already been written far beyond where I am planning to go. So keep the course you feel is right for you. Just be aware that not all stories are for all people and try to keep the readers you do have happy.
Chaoticmike
ChaoticmikeLv14

The chapters is around 200, how old is the mc now?

Kris_Watson
Kris_WatsonLv6

18 but he ages 4 x faster now so maybe 20.

Lord_CronutX
Lord_CronutXLv4

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Sdrawkcab:Thanks!
Lord_CronutX
Lord_CronutXLv4

H

Lord_CronutX
Lord_CronutXLv4

Awesome

Sdrawkcab:Thanks!
Lord_CronutX
Lord_CronutXLv4

Awesome

Journae_Askin
Journae_AskinLv15

👏🏽

ThrustThunder:The Author has the system congratulate a 7 year old for not having a harem? And so far the one word that everyone has used to describe this novel is "Slow". Would you say this is more of a slice of life story than an action one?
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