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Vyte
VyteLv116yr
2018-11-27 12:32

Couldn't read past the second chapter due to horrible writing quality. Almost no capitalization in some areas, numerous typos, weird grammar and wording in most sentences. Get an editor or go back and fix all your chapters and I'll come back and continue reading and update my review

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Lysistrata
LysistrataLv5

And this is English we're talking about. Capitalization in English is super easy not like German were every noun and a bunch of other stuff have to be capitilized and let's just not start about the difference in grammar complexety...

TheGentlemenWorld
TheGentlemenWorldLv10

Uh, he has pretty much fixed it now, other than a few flaws.

Vyte
VyteLv11

I doubt that to be the case when literally in the first paragraph there is still a typo of "surprisinhly" instead of surprisingly. Literally the first paragraph.

TheGentlemenWorld:Uh, he has pretty much fixed it now, other than a few flaws.
Madsaber3wave
Madsaber3waveLv4

h

Vyte:I doubt that to be the case when literally in the first paragraph there is still a typo of "surprisinhly" instead of surprisingly. Literally the first paragraph.
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SleepDeprivation
SleepDeprivationLv6

I like this. I've no reason why I just do. No onto the many, many, many negatives. 1) I don't like harem 2) So the main character is Yun Che from Against the Gods, no big deal. What is a big plot hole is the fact that our MC supposedly has the same exact story and yet ours is super edgy and lacks "female contact" while in ATG, Yun Che is the fucking harem king, this makes no sense to me. 3) I'm not against using the MC of different novels but in this case, the author really ****ed up. The MC we have here has grown up without any type of parental love, any sort of love really and yet fucking Yun Che if I remember correctly has like 4 parents, a **** ton of grandparents, and like a different goddess from every single region who all likes him. TBH the author probs chose ATG because of the power system/cool names. 4)Going to different anime worlds? Cool. But the author doesn't introduce anything new to the worlds he goes to. It's basically just wish fulfillment, the author literally inserts himself into the MC. Let me give an example, the first anime world he goes into is ifinite stratos, and the MC basically steals the harem members from the MC of that anime world and yet is like 1000 times stronger/capable/better in every way. What's more, this doesn't even fit into the MC's character traits. "Hmmm? Some girl I just destroyed in a match yesterday is asking me to be my girlfriend, right in front of my current girlfriend? AND not to mention the fact that my current way just gave away permission just like that since they both drew in a match against each other? Sure why not." 5) Now some may say that it's hard to flesh out an anime world without breaking a few concepts but in this case the author doesn't even need to do much for example I can literally **** out ideas for Infinite stratos, make like a whole arc about how the new tech machine armor thingy can be used in war and the impact it has on current warfare as well as the patriarchy (prodominantly male rule) of society. Would love to see some try to do some research on why the MC is able to use the machines to be able to reverse the changes / get a bigger army with more reserves. 7) Just bad English, some words misspelled, some others just used wrong, some in the wrong tense. Okay that's probably it. Maybe. Either way I know nothing is going to change, the author wants to write what he wants to write and there's nothing wrong with that, I just want to let some of y'all know what you're getting into. 10/10 would review again

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