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RobbedOfRackades
RobbedOfRackadesLv136yr
2018-12-01 06:28

This is just a warning to future readers: Don't have high expectations just because its in the top 15. I usually don't write bad reviews to not discourage authors, but I just have to because this is in the top 15 (when honestly it shouldn't be, in my opinion) the story is shaky/all over the place, the characters are ****ty as hell, they are literally worse than 2D (meaning they have no depth to them whatsoever and are just there to serve as a wallpaper for the story). The whole story doesn't make any sense and I think it's a good idea it's just written terribly. The terrible part isn't even the English (I've read worse), its the plot. Author if you read this: I hope you know this is just my opinion and I hope you keep writing your story because obviously a lot of people like it.

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Little_Ancestor
Little_AncestorLv11

I feel the same. While reading it seem more like a summary of a story then an actually story. Everything happens rapidly and the MC doesn't have an antagonist or struggle. He is to op too quickly. The girls that like him seem really ***** and stalkerish. He just accept them with expressing deep feeling beforehand. He love his new parents but rarely interact with them. Most read of vague training and op actions.

DragonGod999x
DragonGod999xLv4

Well I agree with this the story and character development is so bad and the story is all over the place, can't be with his previous families and all and just going to many worlds and make sht out of there qnd it just repeats all over and over again with no end sigh

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SleepDeprivation
SleepDeprivationLv6

I like this. I've no reason why I just do. No onto the many, many, many negatives. 1) I don't like harem 2) So the main character is Yun Che from Against the Gods, no big deal. What is a big plot hole is the fact that our MC supposedly has the same exact story and yet ours is super edgy and lacks "female contact" while in ATG, Yun Che is the fucking harem king, this makes no sense to me. 3) I'm not against using the MC of different novels but in this case, the author really ****ed up. The MC we have here has grown up without any type of parental love, any sort of love really and yet fucking Yun Che if I remember correctly has like 4 parents, a **** ton of grandparents, and like a different goddess from every single region who all likes him. TBH the author probs chose ATG because of the power system/cool names. 4)Going to different anime worlds? Cool. But the author doesn't introduce anything new to the worlds he goes to. It's basically just wish fulfillment, the author literally inserts himself into the MC. Let me give an example, the first anime world he goes into is ifinite stratos, and the MC basically steals the harem members from the MC of that anime world and yet is like 1000 times stronger/capable/better in every way. What's more, this doesn't even fit into the MC's character traits. "Hmmm? Some girl I just destroyed in a match yesterday is asking me to be my girlfriend, right in front of my current girlfriend? AND not to mention the fact that my current way just gave away permission just like that since they both drew in a match against each other? Sure why not." 5) Now some may say that it's hard to flesh out an anime world without breaking a few concepts but in this case the author doesn't even need to do much for example I can literally **** out ideas for Infinite stratos, make like a whole arc about how the new tech machine armor thingy can be used in war and the impact it has on current warfare as well as the patriarchy (prodominantly male rule) of society. Would love to see some try to do some research on why the MC is able to use the machines to be able to reverse the changes / get a bigger army with more reserves. 7) Just bad English, some words misspelled, some others just used wrong, some in the wrong tense. Okay that's probably it. Maybe. Either way I know nothing is going to change, the author wants to write what he wants to write and there's nothing wrong with that, I just want to let some of y'all know what you're getting into. 10/10 would review again

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