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ValZodIsMyName
ValZodIsMyNameLv144yr
2020-07-12 20:28

The grammar is fine everything else is trash. Too 20 rankings? The level of disrespect is astounding. Doesn’t follow the rules of the world. A six year old can somehow withstand the energy of multiple title douluo with no issues? Horse****

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