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Mecha
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2019-01-25 17:00

I'm kinda skewed here; we have a pretty good story here, but it's practically ruined because of the awful grammar and spelling mistakes. Not to mention he just doesn't arrange the sentences and one chapter is just one big paragraph. Hope you can fix this soon to make a better story!

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Mecha
MechaLv5

Progress! Our Author has started to use the enter button! Feeling better as I read this now.

Darthnorther
DarthnortherAuthor

Read after chapter 10 there is less mistakes as for earlier chapters I forgot to correct them. It is is first novel so there is some mistakes

Mecha
MechaLv5

I'm on chapter 30-ish; improvement, but you either need a grammar app or an editor.

Darthnorther:Read after chapter 10 there is less mistakes as for earlier chapters I forgot to correct them. It is is first novel so there is some mistakes
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