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Lunatic_Lucifer_13
Lunatic_Lucifer_13Lv56yr
2019-01-09 05:56

I started the novel but couldn't get past first few chapters due to serious disregard for Grammar and writing style. Honestly it's quite frustrating to read.

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peter3135566
peter3135566Lv6

Same...

Critical_Kind
Critical_KindLv4

Could you do a review on my book, Draga of the Vanguard?. I could use the criticism

Lunatic_Lucifer_13
Lunatic_Lucifer_13Lv5

Sure. Let me first read some chapters

Critical_Kind:Could you do a review on my book, Draga of the Vanguard?. I could use the criticism
Critical_Kind
Critical_KindLv4

Have you read them?

Lunatic_Lucifer_13:Sure. Let me first read some chapters
Lunatic_Lucifer_13
Lunatic_Lucifer_13Lv5

Yes I did and I also left a comment in the comment section of chapter 11. I think you need to grasp how to write in a way that gets the reader's attention and it would be great

Critical_Kind:Have you read them?
Critical_Kind
Critical_KindLv4

Aight

Lunatic_Lucifer_13:Yes I did and I also left a comment in the comment section of chapter 11. I think you need to grasp how to write in a way that gets the reader's attention and it would be great
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