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2022-04-19 01:07

(-) As already mentioned, there is no plot here (=) The book draws out only due to the "Hand" and "Name" of the author (+) From the very first meeting with any character, the author best depicts their image from the canon, which I always liked in his previous 2 works. (-) But already in the same chapter, this beautiful character can turn into a dead shell, with only one name. (-) In his previous works, I did not particularly notice this, but this time the degradation of the surrounding characters is the main problem of this work. (+) I liked how the author smoothly and without undue rudeness displaces the previous MC from the canon (+) It looks like the author wanted to create - easy everyday life and ecchi, thereby taking a break from the constant development of MC in siscon. (-) But then I don't understand why he immediately lost his virginity at the beginning of the book, if for 400 chapters there is nothing but ecchi, which makes these chapters hypocritical in my eyes. (=) An unpleasant sensation is caused by his bipolarity - acting, when he tries to flirt or justify himself in front of the girls. All people are hypocrites, so I don't pay attention to it. (=)Now after reading 400+ of this work, my opinion about his previous 2 works has changed for the worse, because of which I am very sad and I decided to leave this work. It feels like I'm watching my favorite anime with terrible voice acting or reading a new volume of a book, at a time when the author has some kind of internal or life crisis. Sediment after the rain smells good But the sediment after a bad job, beloved author, makes you hide and wake up every morning with red eyes Thanks for your hard work

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That's exactly what i feel when reading this

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