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Salmon_El_SolomonLv33yr
2021-06-13 00:32

I do not know if it offends someone, my objective is not that. This novel looks like the typical Chinese-Japanese novel with a mc simp, to which the author adds whatever he wants and a half job remains. MC's personality is always changing, sometimes he is very mature, in others very childish, another thing he has is that MC sometimes seems to be someone with experiences in relationship and in others he seems like a virgin who never met a girl. The story progresses too slowly, it is already through chapter 118 and not even a week has passed inside the novel ... I'm sorry if you can't understand it well, i use translator

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Donald_DucxLv4

Nah, this perfectly describes this novel.

Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

MC is bet 😂

Dao_of_NothingnessLv4

Simp and hypocrite mc. I don't also know why this has a very high rating, it should just be between 4.3-4.5.

AboodeLv1

I am in chapter 210 and only one week and a half from the start of the story. It is frustrating how slow the pacing of the story

YourDad_Lv5

nah man it should have rating around 4.0

Dao_of_Nothingness:Simp and hypocrite mc. I don't also know why this has a very high rating, it should just be between 4.3-4.5.
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Daoist591682Lv5
GodackLv2

Writing Quality: 3*: The grammar is fine but because the way the story is written I have to give it 3*. Why? I will have to share how interpret how this story is written. [Main character meets an important character: main character-sanchankunkohai please call me idiot-samakunsanchanniinee] I just can't read the story normally. Updates are fine. Story development 3*. The beginning started out fine but then it just stagnated, it took multiple chapters for one day where I felt like there wasn't even much plot development besides the obvious ranting of the main character. Character design 2*. I liked the prospect of the main character but it all came crashing down when he started interacting with his surroundings. At first I though that that aunt person would be the only one but then it just became worse and worse untill I coun't read any further. World background 2*. In the couple dozen chapters I've read I haven't really learned anything significant about how the world works and what it actually is, my initial guess was that it was an original world with characters from anime etc but then apperantly it was a cliche anime world full of 2d cardboard characters that filled the world. Total score 3.0*. Now don't start saying that I am bad mouthing the story because I will admit that I am doing it but it is still a review on my opinion of the story, but this is in no way trying to discourage you from reading as you have your onw opinion and weird fetishes(though you have to have some weird and sick mind to like such fetishes[Opinion]) so don't start hating. Now my personal opinion: this story is just another generic cliche (Harem/romance/r-18) story on this cursed website that will be long forgotten after the author either drops it or finishes it.

GinOokamiLv14

I was going to wait until the end of this fanfic or at least by the end of chapter 500 to write a review, but I've been bottling up something that I think I should let it out here instead of the comment section. My overall rating may looked bad, but trust me, I don't hate this fanfic nor Akikan. I just hope that I don't offend a lot of people because of this. Also, I don't follow Akikan's siscon fanfic, so I'm basing/comparing this fanfic from his first one. Akikan's writing definitely improved from his first work. But there's this combination of words that he always uses in almost all of his paragraph, and that is "He had to admit." I get that being a non-native English speaker, it is difficult to choose different phrases to express something similar in meaning, but reading it over and over is irritating. Akikan did say that this fanfiction is very slow on its story development. People had speak out about this in the past. So, instead of saying the same thing, I'm going to let my star rating speaks for itself. Now, character design. After chapter 200, I'm beginning to hate this main character. The fact that he said to himself that he won't indulge in romance or anything similar before he finishes writing his obviously plagiarized title from the real world, but still did it anyway, irks me to no end. I won't care as much when a character becomes somewhat of a hypocrite in a story with a not snail-like speed on its story development. But bruh, the timeline in this story hasn't even reach six months, yet he catches women left and right like his story is about to end. Unless you're aiming for women with a garden opened for any male that's passing by, women can wait for a month or two. Heck, he even write the plagiarized story as his novel within a night. Surely letting your little brother stay in your pants for just a week isn't that hard. The update stability for this fanfiction is on point. There's nothing other than praises for this one. I say Akikan did a good job. Even after 200+ chapters, the world hasn't been expanded except for a couple of places. You would think that getting huge amounts of shares of different companies for free is going to help building the world, making it more interesting. But nope, those companies are just names for now. I guess Akikan would rather slap more characters from other fiction than Sakurasou and hope that it builds the world he's using instead of introducing places with unique situations. After writing about 2000+ words on this review, I guess the person who reads this got the message that, although I don't hate this fanfic, I don't like it either. I don't have any expectations for this novel, and I'm not confident that he would read this. The main character will most likely add more women to his ever expanding harem, and whines about how his heart couldn't at least love one of them. Personally, I will continue to read this fanfic, but I won't give a stone/day for this. Maybe a couple/week is enough to help this stay on the 'leaderboard' of webnovel... not like my stone is going to change anything.

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