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Daoist591682Lv53yr
2021-03-24 20:04

I'll be honest, Author. I liked your fic, but your system is very broken, you practically made the protagonist the richest man in the world in less than 48 hours of acquiring the system. And as for the protagonist, I see no reason why the protagonist could turn into a Scumbag who owns a great harem, since so far he is the typical good boy who has no selfish desires or long-term goals. In the first chapter you said that he had to work hard, but until now I don't see him doing it, the system practically gives him skills without him trying. To be called the Scumbag system, it does not fulfill that function. When I read the title of your fic and the first chapter, I thought that the system would force him to have a harem to get rewards, but with the passing of the chapters, I was disappointed. Your system does not impose penalties that force him to have a harem or give him mandatory missions for that purpose, it gives him rewards that are too great just for meeting the possible candidates of his harem, so I do not see it necessary for the protagonist to convert in a scumbag, he would only have to meet more girls and the rewards obtained should be more than enough. On the other hand, I think that the rewards should be given to the protagonist, when he manages to conquer the girl, not when he sees her.

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ForfixsLv10

thanks for your review, i wouldn't even try to read it, because like you i thought he (MC) would be a slave to the system and i hate that kind of story.

SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

He isnt slave for now

Forfixs:thanks for your review, i wouldn't even try to read it, because like you i thought he (MC) would be a slave to the system and i hate that kind of story.
ReaderLoveLv14

This novel is not considered a fanfic, it is more of a translation since most of his idea are copied from another author. This author is a scum, using many of the other author idea and adding his only origin idea and then just naming the novel as his. This explain why the writing felt like two author were writing the author, because he is adding his own idea to a mtl verison of the other author. Got this info from another commenter.

Gustavo_Cobos_1208Lv3

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VahhLv1

Do you know from which novels the author took to compose the novel?

ReaderLove:This novel is not considered a fanfic, it is more of a translation since most of his idea are copied from another author. This author is a scum, using many of the other author idea and adding his only origin idea and then just naming the novel as his. This explain why the writing felt like two author were writing the author, because he is adding his own idea to a mtl verison of the other author. Got this info from another commenter.
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ReaderLoveLv14

Check my image that was attached to my comment, it has the name of the novel that this author translated and added more filter chapter to it.

Vahh:Do you know from which novels the author took to compose the novel?
Prince_TrikotiLv3

you right

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