Henil_Patel_6069

what's the name of the fic?

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if you are portraying Duryodhan as a positive character then you can use Suyodhan as his name. I read somewhere that his actual name was Suyodhan but because of his bad karma his name was changed to Duryodhan. You might still wanna check before changing it. Just a suggestion as you seem to portraying Dhuryodhan in positive light.

To be honest when I read first 8-9 ch. I didn't like the novel but I still decided to give it a try as there are very few Indian mythology novels out there. I didn't like how the MC is OP from the start like him getting too many boons and powers. It would be alright if he just got the boons but in the starting chs it looked like he can do anything without training but then it got better when author showed that he trained with kartavirya arjun. still the training was less then what I wanted but can't complain as author at least tried. It would be good if author can edit first few chs and make him less OP right from the start like him doing Yagya with all other Rishi munies right after his birth. I think lot of readers might drop reading because of the starting few chs. so I strongly recommend author to edit first few chs.. I liked how he took karna and eklavya as disciples but him taking kauravas was strange, I don't mind him taking the kauravs with him but there is no spending time with them mentioned at all so I thinks that part was unnecessary so far. I only read until 54 ch but sk far I don't see any point of taking kauravs with him as he could have just guided bhismapita and other kuruvansh rather then taking the kauravs with him all together but will read further too see if something changes. he could have explained why he thinks that vidur is Adharmi just because he believes in superstition and thinks that duryodan is calamity, he did not try to guide he on right path but right out declared that vidur is Adharmi, if he want vidur as adharmi he could have given some explanation like he was jealous or something like that because without any explanation and deciding that all karu vansh and vidur is Adharmi just doesn't seem right to me as in real Mahabharat Krishna admired Vidur for his dharm and impartiality so author can add few more chs where he takes all kauravs with him where he can show more details on kuru vansh being in Adharm from this beginning of mahabharat. also add some ch on his bonding with kauravs as well as you can just say I took the. with me as be done with it. for now this is it but keep it up with the novel and I expect and pray that you improve the writing and avoid this minor detail which seem minor but on whole novel has very bad impact. Good Luck. one more thing I absolutely loved how Krishna and Radha are together as just this morning I was listening to kavi Kumar vishvas's video about kyu roe Shreekrishna? and in that he takes about Radha Krishna and their love and when ever I think about Krishna I always think why Radha and Krishna were not married its so unfair to Radha. I used to think what could happen if they were married and how happy Radha would be. Please Auther add some slice of life with Radha Krishna. Please I only have this request. Thanks in advance.

its confusing whether chakra is shred or misubi. this whole new powers and chakra and breathing techniques is heating annoying as there no particular power syatem shown here. its all jumbled up

so je did not share Misubi but chakra to koreko as it was mentioned earlier other it would not make sense if chakra and misubi is different