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LavishShadow
LavishShadowLv56yr
2018-10-09 12:19

It's a great story. Though most people are turned off by the fact that the story so far doesn't take place in a "popular" anime, I think it's full of creativity and different from all the other ones fan-fictions you'll see on this site. Definitely recommend it.

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Einlion
EinlionAuthor

How kind of you to say. I'm a bit sad if people don't like the story just because it takes place in Danmachi~ After all, I let the readers choose the world and had to do a lot of research just to be able to progress the story thus far. The whole reason I made the forest training arc was to have time to study the world so I don't make as many mistakes xD.

Supreme_Leader
Supreme_LeaderLv12

There are too much Naruto fan fiction everywhere. And reading fanfics can sometimes ruin some characters for you. I have read few fanfics where 3rd hokage was a bad guy or a cunning old fox. Or Dumbledore in HP fanfics as bad guy or cunning old fox that destroys harry's life etc. Sunce then I have not been able to enjoy fanfics where these characters are shown as kind or good person. So making fanfics on works that have less or no fanfics based on them is better. It will be more fresh. If the writing and details are good it doesn't even matter if I have not read the original work or forgotten the original work. I have read some fanfics without ever reading the original work and still enjoyed them.

Einlion:How kind of you to say. I'm a bit sad if people don't like the story just because it takes place in Danmachi~ After all, I let the readers choose the world and had to do a lot of research just to be able to progress the story thus far. The whole reason I made the forest training arc was to have time to study the world so I don't make as many mistakes xD.
aFallenLeaf
aFallenLeafLv6

Um, I thought DanMachi waa famous? xD haha But I got your point. Still contemplating whether to read this or not~

Shuten
ShutenLv14

Danmachi is one of my top 15 Anime/Manga/Novel

Wallker
WallkerLv4

Author is a shameless person who deletes bad reviews

GoldenFateCoin
GoldenFateCoinLv4

No... People are turned off by the fact that the author can't accept criticism, and when criticized, he starts insulting their intelligence, starts complaining that they don't understand his "genius", and then says sh*t like "If you don't like my novel, write your own then!".

PUERKO_Senpai
PUERKO_SenpaiLv4

Danmachi si good, the problem is tower of god (i am no speak English)

Einlion:How kind of you to say. I'm a bit sad if people don't like the story just because it takes place in Danmachi~ After all, I let the readers choose the world and had to do a lot of research just to be able to progress the story thus far. The whole reason I made the forest training arc was to have time to study the world so I don't make as many mistakes xD.
asdasdssf
asdasdssfLv1

People are not turned off by Anime it's placed in. People are turned off because after while novel just became all about instant girl picking and Slice-of-life harem stuff. I'm at 271 and I'm really struggling at this point, last 150~chapters have had almost no progress at all. Every chapter just blends into others as it's same repetitive fluff with the girls. Good story is about telling a story, we are reading about day to day interactions if mc and his girls. That's more of an log or diary than a story. Last 150 chapters mc has had barely any story progression aside from more girls that are starting to become just numbers due to amount. Even the Original girls like Hephaestus, Ais, Tiona and Lili that were actually interesting have become dull because there just isn't enough development for them. New ones we don't really care about because there's so many and mc captures new ones constantly with no effort. I mean come on, I actually like harem but this is just boring.

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Exalted_Felix
Exalted_FelixLv4

Bored_Reader_
Bored_Reader_Lv3

I mostly write this just to help people understand some of the premise and not be disappointed if they are looking for something else. Now, this is not a wish fulfillment story about travelling across various anime worlds and fighting and adventuring. This is a story about the life of a 14 year old who has spent his entire life in captivity, being exploited by others . Literally. He was found to have panacea like blood as a newborn and was kept in a research facility since he was like a month old. He has not been loved or cared for at all and is just used as a blood producer. His common sense comes only from animes and mangas. Now, you have to understand is that what he does and how he acts is entirely different from normal considering he is a broken, ignorant child. He does not process emotion as casually as we do and is basically just a giant bleeding heart because of his past. Because of this he will not act like shounen protagonists or wuxia MCs at all. They are hot blooded idiots who like fighting, want women and are usually extremely ambitious. Vahn is none of those. He is someone who has been given a life and freedom and just wants to experience it. To him, fighting is a nuisance and despite his claims of being a battle junkie, does not like having fights to the death. He does want to explore, but he has no urgent desire to make it his immediate goal. Understand that this is a rather realistic story of Vahn's growth despite the fantasy tag. He mostly just wants to live in peace and love because of the fact he never had it for the first 14 years of his life. He appreciates it. Some of you like to think of him as a generic japanese protagonist but thing is he grew up watching them as well as suffering great injustice so he has an actual reason to be so merciful. If you expect an MC that goes around all excited and battle hungry or has some vague reason to become the strongest, this is not it. Also, I'll just adress another issue that is going to come up as you progress. He has a huge harem. As in over a dozen girls after the first 100 chapters or so. And the reason for this is because he is a capable male that is highly empathetic and thus becomes attractive to most women who live in a rather shitty world. Also, since he himself has no resistance to others, he accepts basically everyone. He craves love and if someone gives it he'll take her. So yeah, it can become rather unbearable to watch him forsake higher power just to mess around with the harem members and basically start a slice of life but if he doesn't do this, it would be highly unrealistic. This is not a one dimensional novel about fighting progressively stronger enemies and becoming the greatest of them all for no particular reason and neither is it for exploring universes and collecting women. It's about a shattered person trying to enjoy life and fulfill his desires. He wants to explore but won't just leave his family behind for it. He wants to become strong but won't neglect his reason for becoming strong for it. I hope you found this useful.

ThomasDarkrose
ThomasDarkroseLv12

Writing Quality: 5/5 - While there are occasional typos, ****y tiny grammatical errors or punctuation errors, they do not detract from the story in any way. The writing is excellent and just draws you in. Stability of Updates: 5/5 - The author pumps out chapters like a madman all in order to feed the addicted souls he has created. 'Nuff said. Story Development: 5/5 - The story starts with a nieve and broken main character, Vahn, and through interactions with the world and the characters in it, he grows. Vahn still has a lot of growing to do and I, personally, look forward to seeing the man that Vahn will grow into. Character Design: 4/5 - I would love to give the author 5/5 stars just for the design of Vahn, but I prefer to be honest and forthright. Because this is a fan-fiction many of the main characters were already designed by the original author of DanMachi. That said, Einlion takes those pre-existing characters and completely makes them his own without violating the source material. While reading this story you will be hard pressed to find any reason to complain about the use of the pre-existing characters, their reactions, or their believability. World Background: 4/5 - Again, I would love to make this 5/5 stars, but the story takes place in a pre-existing world. Just like the characters though, the world is not violated or discarded it is embraced and honored. Fan-fictions are a tough genre to write in, you have to take a world and characters that already exist, and are loved, then make them your own while writing your own story. Einlion does this exceptionally well and is crafting an amazing story that follows a unique and amazing character. The only thing I could possibly complain about is that I found this novel now instead of a year from now, I can't binge read it nearly enough. On a final note, if you are a fan of DanMachi, or anime in general, and looking for a story with a unique and entertaining main character than I strongly recommend reading this story.

TFH
TFHLv6

Dude.... You are writting an amazing world here... the quality of the writting is excellent and i dont believe i have found any mistake, the character development is marvelous dude... each individual character is seen as a person with alll their characteristics. About the development of the story, while i find that its somewhat... well, really fast paced i would like it to slow down. Its like you want to climb a mountain but you dont go by foot but by helicopter. So far the MC is soul tier 2 and tier 9 is the highest known currently since the path is an artifact lvl 9, if mc goes to soul tier 3 to fast it will make things feel rushed. Now speaking of danmachi, to be honest i would find it a waste should the MC leave, currently danmachi is cataloged as 1-4.... But a way exist to make it 1-5 and so on i believe. So it would be awesome if the world can level up too, and there exist the posiblity of even mixing up worlds with portals so as to make that MC could come and go between worlds. Even the MC could get a portal skill to come back to Hephaestus and the others. IT would be awesome if you can make it with the help of MC that people can go beyond lvl 7, which is ottar from the freya family and reach lvl 8 or higher. I say it again, it would be a huge waste and terrible mistake in my opinion to leave behind danmachi should the mc go to another world. This is beacause danmachi universe didnt existed before the mc went inside, the path i believe created that world, gods and all. So its fine to think that the path has the ability to make universes that are weaker than it, who says you cant make other universes and mix them up? Even more you can put it that inside the laberith is a portal to another world too, and to make things easier it was found a portal in floor 60 for example that can send you back to the surface or from the surface to floor 60 if you have reached it.

MoonLord
MoonLordLv14

This story is one of my most favorites that I have ever read, from Royalroad to Webnovel, I've been reading stories for years. I've loved how this story showed me the gradual change in the MC, how his hard work made him grow stronger physically and mentally, however unfortunately, the story ended up following the usual harem template... I'm not saying that harem stories are bad, in fact I love a lot of stories like that, however when every character introduced is a romantic interest.. no, more like a sure fact that the character is immediately gonna join his harem... Because for some unknown reasons they immediately fall in love with him and act the same way as every girl that has feelings for him, relationships between the MC and the female characters are either Harem member, possible and future harem member and non-harem member, not a single friendly relation. The story quickly became bland. Also there's no friendship between the MC and any other Male character, in fact there's not a single interesting guy that the MC can befriend. The weird fact is how the female characters always end up falling in love with the MC in a matter of days, there's no developing and gradual romance in this story with the exception of veeerrrryyy few... I like some of the girls because of their personalities and gradual development, however for most of them, they just pop out like popcorns and the MC ACCEPTS every single girl that says "I Love You" as if they've had enough interactions to fall in love... and he can never say no. I love this story, this is why I'm frustrated with how it is developing. .. though I'll keep reading hoping that it'll get better, I'm just sad it developed that way.

AnActualLivingPoet
AnActualLivingPoetLv4

The story started out quite well, it was interesting, it had action, but it turned to sh*t at the 200 or so chapter mark. I mean don't get me wrong, your writing quality and updates are still awesome, but the way you introduced the heroine's from Danmachi was in a word slutty. They became generic Dating Sim gals on easy mode. They easily- no brainlessly fell for a pathetic guy who can "Emphatize" with them. In 3 mere months nonetheless. (F*ck! I can do that, hold my beer) I won't go into anymore details about this as I've already read a few reviews that were more specific about this topic. As for Vahn, I just plainly don't like him. You have great skills author, but Vahn is ****. He's just a cheap knock off of Bell. Without his plot armor "The path" he can't even compare. He's just a sad child that didn't know how to belong in the world, but somehow became a great socialite that could get every heroine(although braindead) to bed with only a few interactions. Give an autistic person a chance to reincarnate as a normal one, then give him "The Path", a handsome face and a large dick. I guarantee he'll do a better job than this faggot. Anyways, Writing quality - 5 Stability in updates - 5 Story Development - 1 (because 7/10 chapters are more on Vahn's daily life flirting with who knows how many girls especially in the early chapters) Character Design - 1 (You designed Vahn enough said) World Background - 1 (Danmachi is a great world don't get me wrong, but it's nothing new. I already read about it in the original don't want to read the same thing here) Overall : 2.6 Little advice bro, criticism isn't bad, you can learn and grow from them. But if you insist that everyone is wrong and you are right then you'll never be number 1.

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