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Hydrosphere
HydrosphereLv56yr
2018-09-29 17:12

I mean the story is very boring, there's so much transition from future and the past, like mann can you just calm the fck down, i mean like wtf its very confusing. Example the next chapter will be in the future instantly then will show you the future mc, like i mean if you're gonna show the future mc whats the point of building the character right wtf

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Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

Sorry you felt that way. The future MC was in Loki timeline and not the current MC. The whole point of Loki time travel is to change the future that he saw. And in that future Azief was not as compassionate and was most lonely than he is now in the current timeline

DarkEdenGod
DarkEdenGodLv11

Ey shut the **** up Don't cry like a little ***** if your brain can't understand it ok.... good

Rawr_Kitten
Rawr_KittenLv5

... ok yeah seems like a nonsensical confusing read.... if it bounces between tinelines over and over... then its not even really focising on character growth if your already seeing the person in the future... seems redundant

haathhi
haathhiLv4

The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.

DeathLingers
DeathLingersLv14

Yet Loki kept trying to make the future the same, ie making him and the ice slùt get together or not stopping him from being hurt and invaded in ice with ice slùt. Honestly the romance ruined it completely and Loki forcing him to get with random thots made it worse

ze_ro
ze_roLv11

**** you

novel_fanatic
novel_fanaticLv13

That makes sense...

Keikokumars:Sorry you felt that way. The future MC was in Loki timeline and not the current MC. The whole point of Loki time travel is to change the future that he saw. And in that future Azief was not as compassionate and was most lonely than he is now in the current timeline
Haku_Cianci
Haku_CianciLv4

Ya

Maestro01
Maestro01Lv4

wait did i just got a spoiler, did you mean in the future chapter the MC will be the LOKI!!!

Keikokumars:Sorry you felt that way. The future MC was in Loki timeline and not the current MC. The whole point of Loki time travel is to change the future that he saw. And in that future Azief was not as compassionate and was most lonely than he is now in the current timeline
keelan_moore
keelan_mooreLv10

Right

Keikokumars:Sorry you felt that way. The future MC was in Loki timeline and not the current MC. The whole point of Loki time travel is to change the future that he saw. And in that future Azief was not as compassionate and was most lonely than he is now in the current timeline
Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

I didnt say that. But I will not deny it. I like people thinking about it. Who knows? Maybe you ae right

Maestro01:wait did i just got a spoiler, did you mean in the future chapter the MC will be the LOKI!!!
Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

Slut? I think you have problem with women man. Chill

DeathLingers:Yet Loki kept trying to make the future the same, ie making him and the ice slùt get together or not stopping him from being hurt and invaded in ice with ice slùt. Honestly the romance ruined it completely and Loki forcing him to get with random thots made it worse
alfie0123
alfie0123Lv13

alfie0123
alfie0123Lv13

haathhi:The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.The author always fucdup. He saw a series in TV and write one or two chapters copying them, next see a movie and again write another couple of chapters. The story is so disintregrated that I asked all to avoid the story.
Jackson_0005
Jackson_0005Lv15

Womp womp, cry little man

DarkEdenGod:Ey shut the **** up Don't cry like a little ***** if your brain can't understand it ok.... good
2331Mk_x_
2331Mk_x_Lv3

my only problem is with his relationship with Sophia like bro always got into good relationships with other girls but with Sophia it seems toxcic somewhat but OVERALLY I like this Shii OP MC ,Harem and rivalry between the future Sovereigns

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screwyoujerks
screwyoujerksLv5

I feel so betrayed. In the beginning of the story the author depicts a fantastic character who doesn't seem to involve in being lustful Pig or tied down by any sort of companionship. It felt like a man against the world is trying his best to survive to grow stronger to Triumph. The setup for the Apocalypse had me waiting for the Mythos oh, but then he added Sofia. At first I thought he's going to handle it properly were is this going to be a short a Ally until they parted ways. But then it turns the classic light novel Horror Story of girl teases guy but in the most annoying way possible you hate the girl you want her gone but the guy endearing towards her and they had some sort of fake love that blossoms and makes you want to tear your eyes out. The story which had such a good start and idea, was destroyed to the point where it's unrecognizable. Please understand that if you read this book you will not be getting the quality characters that you seem to be promised in the beginning. You see his first companion die you think the author has balls. But it seems like they are cut off by someone halfway through the beginning. I would not suggest to read whatsoever! Also please read through the other comments hidden between the 12 year olds who don't know what actual relationship should be like are negative comments you point out the faults in the story. This isn't a complaint this is a warning do not waste your precious time to grow attached to a character who will be destroyed in the most gruesome way an author can!!!!!

Vaettir
VaettirLv5

I won't comment on the grammar and spelling mistakes, since many have already spoken about it. It's amazing how someone can take a good idea for a very good plot and turn it into such a horrible novel. The romance for the MC and the Female Lead is as dumb as possible. He tries to make it an epic romance, but fails terribly. Either they are apart because the FL is a dumb b*tch, or the are together with the FL whining and complaining about the MC. And the poor bastard just takes it, over and over again. This whole idea is so plain stupid that the MC nearly sacrifices his life for the FL so many times, and the times he needs help she is never around because she needs to be stronger for the MC. What is the point of that if she is never around when he needs it?! On the other hand we have another love interest that practically killed herself to save the MC, that stands by him, supports him, understands him, but NO!! The FL has to be the romance for the MC. It gets so annoying that I find myself wishing the stupid spoiled FL to just die. I honestly think the author must have had a really screwed up relation in his past to think of love as he does. Whatever that is, it's not love, neither here nor in hell!! The characters generally are well written, meaning the are not 2 dimension characters. they have their own backgrounds, reasons, hopes, etc. The issue here is that the author spends as much time writing about the side characters as he spends on the MC. And he keeps on jumping perspectives. One moment we are following the MC doing something important, and then we are watching some non important character doing a monologue about how beautiful the sky is. The time jumping also is a bit too much. Time travelling is supposed to be either impossible or prohibited by the higher powers, but every few chapters we find another time traveler, or someone with memories about the future. The really good parts about this novel is when we are following the MC. He is a decently written character, besides his stupidity in romance and the main love interest. But regarding his "cultivation" an advancement the chapters are pretty interesting. And the challenges he faces are well done as well. Besides correcting the grammar and spelling (FIND AN EDITOR!!) and slowing down the changes of perspectives, all the author would need is a realistic romance or no romance at all and the story would improve drastically...

RG1986
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